Poems About School Seeking Honest Critique
#school
Poems about school seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
Today 11:13am
Today 11:13am
One Nervous Teenager
He would go to those dances
He could never get the nerve to ask a girl to dance
Like he would really know what to do when he got out on the floor
He had tried dancing alone in his room and had gotten so embarrassed that he just had to stop
He watched men & woman dancing on TV & movies
They made it look so easy
Women were so mysterious and full of shit
He wouldn't have a clue what to say to one if he ever got the chance
The dances went by and he went to almost all of them
He would find the darkest part of the gym and watch them with his back...
He could never get the nerve to ask a girl to dance
Like he would really know what to do when he got out on the floor
He had tried dancing alone in his room and had gotten so embarrassed that he just had to stop
He watched men & woman dancing on TV & movies
They made it look so easy
Women were so mysterious and full of shit
He wouldn't have a clue what to say to one if he ever got the chance
The dances went by and he went to almost all of them
He would find the darkest part of the gym and watch them with his back...
#dance
#dating
#fiction
#school
#ShortStory
19 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Nov 2024 7:39pm
2nd Nov 2024 7:39pm
Is the Ranch Dressing As Creamy As Your Cum?
A vulgar case
Of food tampering
Bodily fluid
Into salad dressing
Orgasm in the cafeteria
Semen into salad dressing
Everyone there is disgusted
The sickest thing they've ever heard
Contents could have been digested
Warnings told about this health hazard
Of food tampering
Bodily fluid
Into salad dressing
Orgasm in the cafeteria
Semen into salad dressing
Everyone there is disgusted
The sickest thing they've ever heard
Contents could have been digested
Warnings told about this health hazard
#MentalHealth
#satirical
#school
#TruthOfLife
#dirty
98 reads
9 Comments
AaHarvey
Poem Published
31st Oct 2024 7:10pm
31st Oct 2024 7:10pm
Katrina
We spent a lifetime apart,
But I knew right from the second start,
That you have an important piece of me.
Like a blast from the past,
I smiled and you laughed.
I wasn’t expecting that we’d ever meet.
I smoked your memory away.
Thought I’d gone for the grave,
But then you recognized.
I saw it in your eyes,
No word of a lie,
It could be written on the horoscope page.
Is our future without?
My heart is taken, no doubt,
Yet we...
But I knew right from the second start,
That you have an important piece of me.
Like a blast from the past,
I smiled and you laughed.
I wasn’t expecting that we’d ever meet.
I smoked your memory away.
Thought I’d gone for the grave,
But then you recognized.
I saw it in your eyes,
No word of a lie,
It could be written on the horoscope page.
Is our future without?
My heart is taken, no doubt,
Yet we...
#love
#memories
#school
44 reads
0 Comments
Naajir
Poem Published
28th Oct 2024 9:27am
28th Oct 2024 9:27am
Every Now And Then...
..only a good old fashion
azz whoopin' will suffice as the solution for the
social pollution that has
...infected what was once considered
discourse...
...from the rational to the radical
it seems common sense has decidedly gone
far far left...bereft of any respect
for an opposing opinion...
cool...
...jump up in my personal space
screaming incoherence and i promise to ...
azz whoopin' will suffice as the solution for the
social pollution that has
...infected what was once considered
discourse...
...from the rational to the radical
it seems common sense has decidedly gone
far far left...bereft of any respect
for an opposing opinion...
cool...
...jump up in my personal space
screaming incoherence and i promise to ...
#CallToAction
#LifeStruggles
#school #frustration
#school #frustration
140 reads
2 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
10th Sep 2024 2:20am
10th Sep 2024 2:20am
They Saw Each Other At Art Class
Sabrina dropped that one robe.
She looked over her shoulder at Richard.
They smiled at each other.
She looked over her shoulder at Richard.
They smiled at each other.
#art
#beauty
#fiction
#romantic
#school
105 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Sep 2024 9:23pm
2nd Sep 2024 9:23pm
Dance night at the school gymnasium
He would go to those dances
He could never get the nerve to ask a girl to dance
Like he would really know what to do when he got out on the floor
He had tried dancing alone in his room and had gotten so embarrassed that he just had to stop
He watched men & woman dancing on TV & movies
They made it look so easy
Women were so mysterious and full of shit
He wouldn't have a clue what to say to one if he ever got the chance
The dances went by and he went to almost all of them
He would find the darkest part of the gym and watch them with his back...
He could never get the nerve to ask a girl to dance
Like he would really know what to do when he got out on the floor
He had tried dancing alone in his room and had gotten so embarrassed that he just had to stop
He watched men & woman dancing on TV & movies
They made it look so easy
Women were so mysterious and full of shit
He wouldn't have a clue what to say to one if he ever got the chance
The dances went by and he went to almost all of them
He would find the darkest part of the gym and watch them with his back...
#courage
#dance
#fear
#school
#teens
57 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
26th Aug 2024 9:30pm
26th Aug 2024 9:30pm
She never listened to anybody
This was around the time I was 8 or 9 years old.
I was in the 3rd grade.
The teacher's aid always told her and the rest of us not to stand up on the swing.
She always did it anyway.
She never listened to anybody.
I heard she had a terrible upbringing.
She was beaten by her mother for being mischievous and defiant.
Her father would come home when he wanted to.
He was a traveling salesman.
Supposedly he had two mistresses, with families in Texas & Virginia.
I hated her guts because she always used to chase me home from school, pull my hair...
I was in the 3rd grade.
The teacher's aid always told her and the rest of us not to stand up on the swing.
She always did it anyway.
She never listened to anybody.
I heard she had a terrible upbringing.
She was beaten by her mother for being mischievous and defiant.
Her father would come home when he wanted to.
He was a traveling salesman.
Supposedly he had two mistresses, with families in Texas & Virginia.
I hated her guts because she always used to chase me home from school, pull my hair...
#acceptance
#childhood
#funny
#nonfiction
#school
110 reads
8 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
22nd Aug 2024 8:13pm
22nd Aug 2024 8:13pm
Back to The Back of the Bus
Move me back to the back of the bus
where the cool kids be
no muss no fuss, just booze and weed
and firecrackers
aimed at tires and seats of open jeeps
move me please
too much heat on the front where a rear view sees
and I am doomed to please
by having all my human cease
let me be as scum and sleaze
cough and wheeze
in the back of the back of the back of the bus
rum and heathens
run your thumb above where drunk chum is sleeping
to find gum...
where the cool kids be
no muss no fuss, just booze and weed
and firecrackers
aimed at tires and seats of open jeeps
move me please
too much heat on the front where a rear view sees
and I am doomed to please
by having all my human cease
let me be as scum and sleaze
cough and wheeze
in the back of the back of the back of the bus
rum and heathens
run your thumb above where drunk chum is sleeping
to find gum...
#consumerism
#music
#nostalgia #school
#nostalgia #school
97 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
30th Jul 2024 11:19am
30th Jul 2024 11:19am
The Aliens Have Arrived
Yelling cursing, noise level terror
Then he hits her
She cries
Things get quiet, then it starts again
Locked in his room, the boy sits on the floor next to his bed
That's the place he goes when they go at it
Mother & Alien, this man/boyfriend
This thing that watches TV or it's i-phone and drinks long cans of malt liquor in the dark
Sometimes the Alien is there when his mother isn't
The Alien doesn't talk
The Alien drinks, beats mother & watches TV
The boy knows that he's lucky the Alien doesn't beat on him
Other Aliens have...
Then he hits her
She cries
Things get quiet, then it starts again
Locked in his room, the boy sits on the floor next to his bed
That's the place he goes when they go at it
Mother & Alien, this man/boyfriend
This thing that watches TV or it's i-phone and drinks long cans of malt liquor in the dark
Sometimes the Alien is there when his mother isn't
The Alien doesn't talk
The Alien drinks, beats mother & watches TV
The boy knows that he's lucky the Alien doesn't beat on him
Other Aliens have...
#abuse
#aliens
#DomesticViolence
#home
#school
118 reads
2 Comments
PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
30th Jun 2024 4:58pm
30th Jun 2024 4:58pm
The Schoolboys and the Rastafarian Men (With original Patois quotations)
Two schoolboys, Dan and Josh, attended the Independent City All Age School in St. Catherine. In the evenings, they used to walk through a cane field near the school when they were going home. Many tall coconut trees bordered the cane field. Dan and Josh would cut sugar cane and pick coconuts to eat. In addition to that, they would carry some sugar cane and coconuts home.
The boys had a big problem. They had to pass a construction site on the way home, and some men who worked there would beg them sugar cane and coconuts. If the boys refused to give the men what they asked...
The boys had a big problem. They had to pass a construction site on the way home, and some men who worked there would beg them sugar cane and coconuts. If the boys refused to give the men what they asked...
#men
#school
#curse
#water
#children
72 reads
0 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
22nd Jun 2024 2:31am
22nd Jun 2024 2:31am
Let's Get One Thing Straight, Kid.
Let's
get one
thing straight, Kid.
I agreed to
pose naked for your
art class project. But you
are not allowed to do things
to me that we know should be known
as nasty and obscene or the deal
is off. Do I make myself clear on that?
get one
thing straight, Kid.
I agreed to
pose naked for your
art class project. But you
are not allowed to do things
to me that we know should be known
as nasty and obscene or the deal
is off. Do I make myself clear on that?
#art
#dialogue
#fiction
#school
#sensual
160 reads
2 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
16th Jun 2024 4:25pm
16th Jun 2024 4:25pm
Such An Embarrassing Day It Was For Her
On Monday, Janet
disrobed and turned
towards the entire
art class that includes
her grandmother.
disrobed and turned
towards the entire
art class that includes
her grandmother.
#family
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#school
#sensual
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0 Comments
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