Poems About Memories Seeking Honest Critique
#memories
Poems about memories seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Carpe_Noctem
Poem Published
20th Dec 2024 4:27pm
20th Dec 2024 4:27pm
Husk of a shell of my former self
we used to dance
on the beach
naked
in the rain
right by the speakers
gyrating
all in the hips
as the saying goes
who was it that popped that first pill that night?
was it you
me, misremembering some Romeo and Juliet scene, with each putting the pill on the others tongue
the summer Australian heat permeating through the dance floors sweat soaked surface
fuck me you mouthed
as our eyes met from either side of the room
why stop at just one
when your reputation precedes...
on the beach
naked
in the rain
right by the speakers
gyrating
all in the hips
as the saying goes
who was it that popped that first pill that night?
was it you
me, misremembering some Romeo and Juliet scene, with each putting the pill on the others tongue
the summer Australian heat permeating through the dance floors sweat soaked surface
fuck me you mouthed
as our eyes met from either side of the room
why stop at just one
when your reputation precedes...
#LifeAsAWriter
#memories
#philosophical
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3 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
20th Dec 2024 3:39pm
20th Dec 2024 3:39pm
Time Encapsuled
100 years ago was 1924...
Macy's had their first parade!
My parents are not born yet.
Coolidge got his second term.
One third of cars they were electric!
All the movies silent screen, but...
they've now made the first TV!
No bikini bathing suits for 20 years!
Just 5 yrs since the pandemic...
2 packs of smokes were just a quarter.
5 years til the great depression.
Some things change. Some never do!
2024 is our present...
kids imagine their new genders...
both my parents are long dead and gone!
Trump...
Macy's had their first parade!
My parents are not born yet.
Coolidge got his second term.
One third of cars they were electric!
All the movies silent screen, but...
they've now made the first TV!
No bikini bathing suits for 20 years!
Just 5 yrs since the pandemic...
2 packs of smokes were just a quarter.
5 years til the great depression.
Some things change. Some never do!
2024 is our present...
kids imagine their new genders...
both my parents are long dead and gone!
Trump...
#historical
#memories
87 reads
1 Comment
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
20th Dec 2024 2:29am
20th Dec 2024 2:29am
Jerk Off Girl
#memories
#sex
390 reads
7 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
19th Dec 2024 6:28pm
19th Dec 2024 6:28pm
Nightmare Rules
What do you do...
when you cause...
your own fucking
NIGHTMARE?
I wrote about
the horrific
death of...
BOBBY!
He lost his
freaking
head...
LITERALLY!
In my nightmare...
Bobby's head was
rolling around...
FOLLOWING ME!
Nobody gave 2 shits...
that his head was
In every store at
THE FUCKING MALL!
It was a dream in my
head and I caused it
by imagining Bobby...
GROWN UP AND FUCKING ME!
Then I wrote about his
unexplained decapitation ...
when you cause...
your own fucking
NIGHTMARE?
I wrote about
the horrific
death of...
BOBBY!
He lost his
freaking
head...
LITERALLY!
In my nightmare...
Bobby's head was
rolling around...
FOLLOWING ME!
Nobody gave 2 shits...
that his head was
In every store at
THE FUCKING MALL!
It was a dream in my
head and I caused it
by imagining Bobby...
GROWN UP AND FUCKING ME!
Then I wrote about his
unexplained decapitation ...
#dark
#memories
#nightmares
108 reads
4 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
19th Dec 2024 9:59am
19th Dec 2024 9:59am
Cousin Denise
#abuse
#dirty
#memories #sexy
#memories #sexy
112 reads
5 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
18th Dec 2024 10:25am
18th Dec 2024 10:25am
15 Billion
15 billion miles from Earth
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
My son sits and wonders what’s beyond the universe
A bunny hops into the grass and we laugh and giggle
I think my son can be an Astronaut for Ages
We stare at the sky sometimes I don’t know why
We watch 3 crows chase a bigger Hawk
We always appreciate the beauty of nature
Go in the back yard pitch baseballs in the net
As we do, me and you are like me,we are on a string
See bumble bees times two buzzing around us
So we throw the ball back and forth ...
#astronomy
#father
#memories
#son
#universe
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Dec 2024 7:24pm
17th Dec 2024 7:24pm
Confined Solitude
I ramble on ways where fear and memories are eternal
Where my existence day after day becomes more painful
Then so, I live to meet you in my path someday
I don't possess the desire of being in heaven
Earthly feelings will take me to the insanity down below
One more time I seek in the depths of melancholy
And it's like the weight of my sadness will be arrested onto my feet
I will be left with this hurt and the death pain whispers
And if I can't forget your face I will die without even noticing
Sweet and enlightened death, end this...
Where my existence day after day becomes more painful
Then so, I live to meet you in my path someday
I don't possess the desire of being in heaven
Earthly feelings will take me to the insanity down below
One more time I seek in the depths of melancholy
And it's like the weight of my sadness will be arrested onto my feet
I will be left with this hurt and the death pain whispers
And if I can't forget your face I will die without even noticing
Sweet and enlightened death, end this...
#dark
#heartbroken
#love
#memories
#sadness
136 reads
4 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
17th Dec 2024 5:29pm
17th Dec 2024 5:29pm
Some Call It Breakfast
#abuse
#fear
#hate #memories
#hate #memories
75 reads
1 Comment
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
17th Dec 2024 2:46am
17th Dec 2024 2:46am
Time ticks away...
Time ticks away...
You want time to pass quickly at work, so you may go home or go partying? Have fun!
But those are moments of your life you never get back.
You can't wait for Christmas, Summer or that
long awaited vacation...
...or even your favorite TV shows to have
their new fall episodes...
...then Halloween, Thanksgiving and
Christmas, again - has it been another year
already?
Someone won't be at the table this year...
Their time sadly is up!
Children want to grow up fast...
You want time to pass quickly at work, so you may go home or go partying? Have fun!
But those are moments of your life you never get back.
You can't wait for Christmas, Summer or that
long awaited vacation...
...or even your favorite TV shows to have
their new fall episodes...
...then Halloween, Thanksgiving and
Christmas, again - has it been another year
already?
Someone won't be at the table this year...
Their time sadly is up!
Children want to grow up fast...
#death
#LifeCycle
#memories #sadness
#memories #sadness
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2 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
16th Dec 2024 5:46am
16th Dec 2024 5:46am
My Safety
My safe world is a beautiful place...
...where the air smells of cotton candy...
...and all my favorite songs play...
...while I happily dance and spin!
No one shouts and no one cries in my world.
There is no fear of being touched or being beaten.
My world is safe.
My world is my safety.
Only I can can visit MY world...
...for my own safety!
It is deep inside my head...
...and YOU can't see the pretty colors...
...but my world really does exist!
I have visited my world quite often.
I CREATED MY WORLD!...
...where the air smells of cotton candy...
...and all my favorite songs play...
...while I happily dance and spin!
No one shouts and no one cries in my world.
There is no fear of being touched or being beaten.
My world is safe.
My world is my safety.
Only I can can visit MY world...
...for my own safety!
It is deep inside my head...
...and YOU can't see the pretty colors...
...but my world really does exist!
I have visited my world quite often.
I CREATED MY WORLD!...
#fear
#hurt
#memories
105 reads
2 Comments
Paulajobi
Paula Jobi
Paula Jobi
Poem Published
15th Dec 2024 9:45pm
15th Dec 2024 9:45pm
So I Move On
#abuse
#family
#memories #mother
#memories #mother
74 reads
3 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
15th Dec 2024 10:48am
15th Dec 2024 10:48am
Sweets
I still remember the scent.
Of chocolate,wet cement.
When I was still a child.
And all of the pain was mild.
I remember the scent of pastries.
With cream and chocolate chips.
I remember her cookies.
So good,you would lick your lips.
And maybe homemade,vanilla cake.
That you and your family would make.
Maybe the scent and taste of caramel.
If only I could remember the smell.
I would have a fairytale to tell.
One day,I will also try to bake.
Maybe while painting an ethereal lake.
I will...
Of chocolate,wet cement.
When I was still a child.
And all of the pain was mild.
I remember the scent of pastries.
With cream and chocolate chips.
I remember her cookies.
So good,you would lick your lips.
And maybe homemade,vanilla cake.
That you and your family would make.
Maybe the scent and taste of caramel.
If only I could remember the smell.
I would have a fairytale to tell.
One day,I will also try to bake.
Maybe while painting an ethereal lake.
I will...
#happiness
#hope
#memories
#nostalgia
#uplifting
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