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PAR
Poem Published
6th May 2025 9:52pm
6th May 2025 9:52pm
Never Ask Me (Melancholic Pop-Punk Ballad)
(Verse 1)
Never ask me what I'll miss,
don’t make me chase the ghosts like this.
Your tears were neon, burning bright,
fading fast into the night.
(Pre-Chorus)
I don’t wanna know what’s left behind,
I don’t wanna hear your name rewind.
So don’t ask me, don’t ask me—
just let it break, let it slide.
(Chorus)
Never ask me what remains,
lost in echoes, lost in pain.
Hands that shook, hearts undone,
tell me—was it ever fun?
(Oh-oh, was it ever fun?)
(Verse 2)
Never ask me if the...
Never ask me what I'll miss,
don’t make me chase the ghosts like this.
Your tears were neon, burning bright,
fading fast into the night.
(Pre-Chorus)
I don’t wanna know what’s left behind,
I don’t wanna hear your name rewind.
So don’t ask me, don’t ask me—
just let it break, let it slide.
(Chorus)
Never ask me what remains,
lost in echoes, lost in pain.
Hands that shook, hearts undone,
tell me—was it ever fun?
(Oh-oh, was it ever fun?)
(Verse 2)
Never ask me if the...
#lyrics
#music
#PopCulture
57 reads
4 Comments
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
29th Apr 2025 10:47pm
29th Apr 2025 10:47pm
A bunch of fives
Being musos, life's never quiet.
heart songs whirl; brain tunes thrum;
iambs pulse; words voice
their urges: "Write, hence
music comes alive!"
Piano notes plink;
harp's chords whirr;
vocal lines swell, surge, heave.
Drums bring solid tempi;
words weave paths.
Light, night tunes
boost sleep.
Peppy party songs
alert folks.
Awake, souls!
Allow music space—
tutti voice.
heart songs whirl; brain tunes thrum;
iambs pulse; words voice
their urges: "Write, hence
music comes alive!"
Piano notes plink;
harp's chords whirr;
vocal lines swell, surge, heave.
Drums bring solid tempi;
words weave paths.
Light, night tunes
boost sleep.
Peppy party songs
alert folks.
Awake, souls!
Allow music space—
tutti voice.
#dance
#lyrics
#music #PowerOfWords
#music #PowerOfWords
52 reads
0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
27th Apr 2025 8:45pm
27th Apr 2025 8:45pm
~a dialoguing duet of love... of him & her
(an inspired lyrical from Maestro ilayaraja scored & voiced with the mesmerizing Janaki ..
a Love Duet Number.. of a naive rustic beauty & a Robinhood typa outlaw hero..
story inspired by true incidents of the 1960s... from the 1981 film
#MalaiyoorMambattoyaan
the song linked below)
https://youtu.be/alRD1Zvyl7M?feature=shared
this young girl’s infinitely flowing drape, her
saree.. is a golden magnolia.. a Champak
flowering garden… in a scented...
a Love Duet Number.. of a naive rustic beauty & a Robinhood typa outlaw hero..
story inspired by true incidents of the 1960s... from the 1981 film
#MalaiyoorMambattoyaan
the song linked below)
https://youtu.be/alRD1Zvyl7M?feature=shared
this young girl’s infinitely flowing drape, her
saree.. is a golden magnolia.. a Champak
flowering garden… in a scented...
#countryside
#inspirational
#love
#lover
#lyrics
109 reads
4 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2025 9:54pm
22nd Apr 2025 9:54pm
~"my mysteriously alluring lover"
(inspired lyrics from this jazzy slow song linked below..
from the 2003 Tamil Film #KaakhaKaakha.. sung
by the husky voicing beauty.. #BombayJayashri )
https://youtu.be/CWO0msNq47M?feature=shared
(intro verses)
not one… nor just two… are my desires… to
tell of all of them.. a day is not just enough...
let us ask this night my love.. will this night
lengthen beyond the hatching dawn even..
this is the day of what I had...
from the 2003 Tamil Film #KaakhaKaakha.. sung
by the husky voicing beauty.. #BombayJayashri )
https://youtu.be/CWO0msNq47M?feature=shared
(intro verses)
not one… nor just two… are my desires… to
tell of all of them.. a day is not just enough...
let us ask this night my love.. will this night
lengthen beyond the hatching dawn even..
this is the day of what I had...
#inspirational
#love
#lyrics #music
#lyrics #music
100 reads
3 Comments
NANCY_RDZ_STORIES
Poem Published
18th Apr 2025 7:19am
18th Apr 2025 7:19am
IT'S THE BEST WAY
Verse:1
A talented hand
Is a talented brain
Ink so fresh like words that stand
Beautiful gestures that attain....
Verse: 2
I love to express
Like I do my dress
Precious heart that tries to confess
The struggle of my huge stress
Verse: 3
Flowers dance
With aroma immense
Petals with colors that caress
As they fall.They leave a mess.. but still the best
CHORUS:
It's the best way of the rest "Of the rest"
The way life shows...
A talented hand
Is a talented brain
Ink so fresh like words that stand
Beautiful gestures that attain....
Verse: 2
I love to express
Like I do my dress
Precious heart that tries to confess
The struggle of my huge stress
Verse: 3
Flowers dance
With aroma immense
Petals with colors that caress
As they fall.They leave a mess.. but still the best
CHORUS:
It's the best way of the rest "Of the rest"
The way life shows...
#LifeCycle
#lyrics
#metaphor
#MyInspiration
#PowerOfWords
112 reads
3 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
11th Apr 2025 10:25am
11th Apr 2025 10:25am
Fight to live
Eighteen dollars to her name
Can’t survive, it’s all the same
In need of food for her kids
Drugs & booze the way she lives
No ambition to get a job
Unless it’s slobbing on someone’s knob
How much lower can you go
You’ll be remembered as a filthy ho
You must fight to live
You must fight to live
You must fight to live
Inside your fucked up selfish mind
Sleazy strip malls is where you hang
Beware the rats with long sharp fangs
Behind the store to get your fix
Fever ignored, getting real sick
...
Can’t survive, it’s all the same
In need of food for her kids
Drugs & booze the way she lives
No ambition to get a job
Unless it’s slobbing on someone’s knob
How much lower can you go
You’ll be remembered as a filthy ho
You must fight to live
You must fight to live
You must fight to live
Inside your fucked up selfish mind
Sleazy strip malls is where you hang
Beware the rats with long sharp fangs
Behind the store to get your fix
Fever ignored, getting real sick
...
#addiction
#children
#drugs
#lyrics
#poverty
100 reads
8 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 8:24pm
10th Apr 2025 8:24pm
~Our Fusing Breaths, of “-UYIR”:: body, mind, soul
(an inspired lyrical
(female lyrical in italics, male lyrical in non-italics)
inspired from the 1998 Tamil film #UyiroduUyiraga..
…from its its soulful~ romantic love number linked below)
https://youtu.be/RpljvhSoyCo?feature=shared
(Intro Refrain)
my darling my love...
you are my child
just this flesh alone, is not love
for the lifetimes lived on this earth
in all truth, your soul will arrive unto me
for the lifetimes lived on this earth
in all...
(female lyrical in italics, male lyrical in non-italics)
inspired from the 1998 Tamil film #UyiroduUyiraga..
…from its its soulful~ romantic love number linked below)
https://youtu.be/RpljvhSoyCo?feature=shared
(Intro Refrain)
my darling my love...
you are my child
just this flesh alone, is not love
for the lifetimes lived on this earth
in all truth, your soul will arrive unto me
for the lifetimes lived on this earth
in all...
#inspirational
#love
#lyrics
#romantic
#spiritual
160 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 10:58am
10th Apr 2025 10:58am
Baby it's you
So many times when I look or hear about people being lonely
I have a feeling of sadness deep inside
It makes me wonder if I would have been alone, before I found you
What would happen if you turned around and said goodbye
Honey it's you
you're what I'm living for
I have it all, nothing more
right from the start when I found you
Baby it's you
you were the one for me
the one who's been making me see
the world with you is such a brighter place
I now realize it's you
you are my brightest star
whether you're...
I have a feeling of sadness deep inside
It makes me wonder if I would have been alone, before I found you
What would happen if you turned around and said goodbye
Honey it's you
you're what I'm living for
I have it all, nothing more
right from the start when I found you
Baby it's you
you were the one for me
the one who's been making me see
the world with you is such a brighter place
I now realize it's you
you are my brightest star
whether you're...
#loneliness
#love
#lyrics
#relationships
#romantic
223 reads
9 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 00:19am
10th Apr 2025 00:19am
Shadow of Fear
You can drive a car if you do it right
but you can't go far if it puts you out of sight
you can't look at girls
you can't drink anything
you got to get your kicks in the shadow of fear
You stay out late when they think your young
then they find out, there gonna want you hung
so you try to understand that you might get near
cause your lost alone in the shadow of fear
So you found a chick that you think is fine
but you fell too fast so you lost your mind
society looks, but they turn their ears
you got to get your kicks in...
but you can't go far if it puts you out of sight
you can't look at girls
you can't drink anything
you got to get your kicks in the shadow of fear
You stay out late when they think your young
then they find out, there gonna want you hung
so you try to understand that you might get near
cause your lost alone in the shadow of fear
So you found a chick that you think is fine
but you fell too fast so you lost your mind
society looks, but they turn their ears
you got to get your kicks in...
#FeelingTrapped
#lyrics
#rebellion
#rhyming
#teens
114 reads
6 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 00:17am
10th Apr 2025 00:17am
Pecker Slapper
#dirty
#family
#funny
#lyrics
#sex
200 reads
4 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
9th Apr 2025 9:49pm
9th Apr 2025 9:49pm
Song Lyrics inspired by Muse Xx
I want 2
Save you
Enslave you
Bathe you
In love
I gave you
Vodka
Lime
Mind
Grime
Out of time
Thought
Caught
Haute
Wrought
I want 2
Save you
Enslave you
Bathe you
Make you mine
Even if ....
You're going prime
Medium
Rare
I stare
I don't care
Catch me
Report me
Slash me
Cash me
Flash me
It's a dare
Save you
Enslave you
Bathe you
In love
I gave you
Vodka
Lime
Mind
Grime
Out of time
Thought
Caught
Haute
Wrought
I want 2
Save you
Enslave you
Bathe you
Make you mine
Even if ....
You're going prime
Medium
Rare
I stare
I don't care
Catch me
Report me
Slash me
Cash me
Flash me
It's a dare
#crush
#lover
#lyrics
#music
#PopCulture
183 reads
25 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
9th Apr 2025 9:04pm
9th Apr 2025 9:04pm
~a die-hard supernaturalistic love... this is
https://youtu.be/eDQPwBuJMrs
https://youtu.be/gL0z7S-PxVA?feature=shared
my sizzling young angelic beauty..
am just a flaming spirit orbiting you ..
vanished are those tears of love
..without you, am nothing…this now
(refrain)
my sizzling young angelic beauty..
am just a flaming spirit orbiting you ..
vanished are those tears of love
..without you, am...
https://youtu.be/gL0z7S-PxVA?feature=shared
my sizzling young angelic beauty..
am just a flaming spirit orbiting you ..
vanished are those tears of love
..without you, am nothing…this now
(refrain)
my sizzling young angelic beauty..
am just a flaming spirit orbiting you ..
vanished are those tears of love
..without you, am...
#graveyard
#inspirational
#love
#lyrics
#mystery
105 reads
2 Comments
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