Poems About Determination Seeking Honest Critique
#determination
Poems about determination seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Lasso the Sun
The rider rides
With rage and passion in his heart
Over golden hills and across the plains
Across the great breath of land
Through realms and domains
Ready
To capture the sun
His untamed spirit and will
Has no time for menial things
There is a flame to catch and a force wield
As he gallops into the distance
Willing to conquer the day
Ready
To seize the sun
He chases the fire in the sky
Without wings or propellors he flies
Hi horse racing against time
Leaving a plume of smoke and dust...
With rage and passion in his heart
Over golden hills and across the plains
Across the great breath of land
Through realms and domains
Ready
To capture the sun
His untamed spirit and will
Has no time for menial things
There is a flame to catch and a force wield
As he gallops into the distance
Willing to conquer the day
Ready
To seize the sun
He chases the fire in the sky
Without wings or propellors he flies
Hi horse racing against time
Leaving a plume of smoke and dust...
#courage
#determination
#dreams
#hope
#strength
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5 Comments
Cruelty is your middle name
Most people duck reality. Reality is a river with a fierce current. You can try & resist but the current won’t stop. It moves faster & stronger then you ever will. People give in. People have to many vices that blur their vision. Most people accept what it is and never go against the mainstream. Swim up the mainstream, go against what is the norm and what is being force fed to you. Living life this way takes perseverance and determination.
Society, civilization, language, just living day by day, people are tired. They don’t have the strength to make change. This is why so...
Society, civilization, language, just living day by day, people are tired. They don’t have the strength to make change. This is why so...
#courage
#determination
#TruthOfLife
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6 Comments
Never doubt thyself
Let's just keep it real as writers of pen 🖋️ to paper 📜 for sure let's stop doubting our talents as writers of unspoken words, for sure that is our calling as much as it is our power of knowledge and wisdom, and our experience to be able to share and articulate with thoughts and feelings. For example sometimes we are artist that are painters of a picture and sometimes we are singers 🎤 who sing to a different beat of a beautiful Melody. For sure what ever is your true spiritual potential will be revealed to you, for sharing is a blessing as it is a gift of...
#determination
#dreams
#inspirational
#philosophical
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Galadriel's Choice
Silent hope beats in the heart,
mixed with the fear of failure,
for valiance is proven in the art
of preserving loyalty in the behaviour,
when tested amid seductive trials,
the domain of inner strength,
then weakness battles in denial,
seeking excuses, while one repents.
Galadriel stood by the well
that predicts doom of the races.
As if a mirror beyond mere spells,
true teller, not of fortune, but of faces.
She wanted to ignite within
the spark of higher immortality,
not innately, despite all sin,
but...
mixed with the fear of failure,
for valiance is proven in the art
of preserving loyalty in the behaviour,
when tested amid seductive trials,
the domain of inner strength,
then weakness battles in denial,
seeking excuses, while one repents.
Galadriel stood by the well
that predicts doom of the races.
As if a mirror beyond mere spells,
true teller, not of fortune, but of faces.
She wanted to ignite within
the spark of higher immortality,
not innately, despite all sin,
but...
#courage
#determination
#dreams
#JRRTolkien
#strength
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0 Comments
GARDEN OF EXCUSES
Place a fence around the Garden of Excuses for habits
To ward off the strays: dogs, foxes and rabbits
That nibble on our fruited seeds and vegetation
Ruining the livestock of our generation.
Don’t allow the rabbits near the carrots
Nor the little foxes near the parrots!
Shun them away from the garden
‘Lest they ruin the garden without pardon!
Your betrayal has no pardon
As you allowed my heart to harden
I created a comfortable cradle
Never knowing it would be fatal!
...
To ward off the strays: dogs, foxes and rabbits
That nibble on our fruited seeds and vegetation
Ruining the livestock of our generation.
Don’t allow the rabbits near the carrots
Nor the little foxes near the parrots!
Shun them away from the garden
‘Lest they ruin the garden without pardon!
Your betrayal has no pardon
As you allowed my heart to harden
I created a comfortable cradle
Never knowing it would be fatal!
...
#determination
#dreams
#escape
#happiness
#healing
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We as one love
We as one love always and forever as we each change each others life and world. 🌍 For I knew that you were the one that was sent, from above to really brighten up my life and show me that love, does exist in some people's hearts and the minds of those who haven't given up, on finding that special one. For sure it was you and I together as one love, with honesty and truth and trust. FROM the very beginning of our paths crossing, like a shooting star shooting across the distance skies. For sure we both had our share of the make believe stories of lies, and false promises that required...
#determination
#happiness
#LifeChangingMoment
#LifeGoals
#PersonalGrowth
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2 Comments
If you can't love me right
They say if you can't love someone right, then leave them alone, for it seems that you haven't grown up yet. FOR you're still playing those childish like mind games. FOR your own foolish personal gain, with one thing on your mind to leave me broken, into little bits of scattered pieces of shatter broken like antique crystals glass. For it comes a time in each of our lives, that you gotta know that doesn't work anymore on some people. For sure you are one of those who has disregards of how you make people feel, with no shame of what you have done to someone, who doesn't deserve to be treated...
#determination
#PersonalGrowth
#StreamOfConsciousness
#strength
#uplifting
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No More Games
One day I stopped hating
I ceased all meaningless activity
I completed the circle
I set my sights straight
Like an arrow I flew
I stopped acting
I got tired of playing with you
Violence & destruction became my reason for living
My out, my excuse
What is your excuse?
Destruction
Without hate, without fear, without judgement
I am no better then you
No one knows this better then I do
I just got tired of playing parlor games
I ceased all meaningless activity
I completed the circle
I set my sights straight
Like an arrow I flew
I stopped acting
I got tired of playing with you
Violence & destruction became my reason for living
My out, my excuse
What is your excuse?
Destruction
Without hate, without fear, without judgement
I am no better then you
No one knows this better then I do
I just got tired of playing parlor games
#determination
#motivational
#strength #uplifting
#strength #uplifting
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11 Comments
My live storie
Im heere two tel u that u ned too stay in skol
I am proof that if yo do't go to skool yo'l end up like me
i dropes out of the 1st grad becuse my teecher give me bad grades & homwork
I left home
I wind up on the stret
dope and alchol fuked my brain by 9
I can't wread & rite two wel
was shot n tha arm and legg thre times
Mum and pops disoned me
I found jeebus, satan and PAR one day
They puled me from the guter
they tawt me how to be a nice, kind man
They said sun, u ned to write your storie
They dircted me to DUP
Now...
I am proof that if yo do't go to skool yo'l end up like me
i dropes out of the 1st grad becuse my teecher give me bad grades & homwork
I left home
I wind up on the stret
dope and alchol fuked my brain by 9
I can't wread & rite two wel
was shot n tha arm and legg thre times
Mum and pops disoned me
I found jeebus, satan and PAR one day
They puled me from the guter
they tawt me how to be a nice, kind man
They said sun, u ned to write your storie
They dircted me to DUP
Now...
#determination
#parody
#PersonalGrowth
#satirical
#TruthOfLife
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10 Comments
Hand and Eye
My little guy has got the hand and eye
See a shape and put your hands in place
To receive what I’m delivering
As it’s coming in…depth perception kicks in
Two points on a map and intersect where you should be
He sees the ball and anticipates where
And what direction
The passing wind can have an effect
You have to put that into the equation
Split second decisions between hand and eye
When you hawk that ball and hunt it down
It ends up positive with clapping all around
Next thing you know you helped...
See a shape and put your hands in place
To receive what I’m delivering
As it’s coming in…depth perception kicks in
Two points on a map and intersect where you should be
He sees the ball and anticipates where
And what direction
The passing wind can have an effect
You have to put that into the equation
Split second decisions between hand and eye
When you hawk that ball and hunt it down
It ends up positive with clapping all around
Next thing you know you helped...
#determination
#MyInspiration
#son #sports
#son #sports
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0 Comments
Up And At ’Em
Up and at ‘em…When I just wanna sleep
As luck would have it, I can only fathom having this peace…
Some imagined reprieve, that I could handle with ease, to turn the war and win the battle in me…
Dear Lord,
I plead for more…From the ground floor to soar
High from a balcony, where ancient alchemy’s released
Confounding winds with a baffling breeze
I dabble in these
Within my rabble-rousing skin
My spirit calls for action and the grappling begins…
Through the lens of these esoteric factions
Lives the fractious…Not enamored...
As luck would have it, I can only fathom having this peace…
Some imagined reprieve, that I could handle with ease, to turn the war and win the battle in me…
Dear Lord,
I plead for more…From the ground floor to soar
High from a balcony, where ancient alchemy’s released
Confounding winds with a baffling breeze
I dabble in these
Within my rabble-rousing skin
My spirit calls for action and the grappling begins…
Through the lens of these esoteric factions
Lives the fractious…Not enamored...
#determination
#healing
#motivational
#MyInspiration
#PersonalGrowth
101 reads
0 Comments
Mel44
Visual Expression IX
#admiration
#courage
#determination
#inspirational
#strength
432 reads
19 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About Determination Seeking Honest Critique