Poems About Determination Seeking Honest Critique
#determination
Poems about determination seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
balanced duality and dichotomy
help me peel back the layers and unmask,
unwind with me as I lounge in the foliage of fall,
be my partner in this beloved folie à deux.
enjoy your time and ride this coaster of emotion.
hurtle forward, drop your gut on the loop, and slingshot backwards.
ride it once and know what to do, nothing new to expect.
except this coaster shows a pattern,
a bigger cycle; fall down 7, get up 8,
it must be fate these missteps won't abate.
depressed, manic, stable
manic, depressed,...
unwind with me as I lounge in the foliage of fall,
be my partner in this beloved folie à deux.
enjoy your time and ride this coaster of emotion.
hurtle forward, drop your gut on the loop, and slingshot backwards.
ride it once and know what to do, nothing new to expect.
except this coaster shows a pattern,
a bigger cycle; fall down 7, get up 8,
it must be fate these missteps won't abate.
depressed, manic, stable
manic, depressed,...
#love
#bipolar
#philosophical
#wisdom
#determination
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Reality
The majority of people duck reality. Reality is a river with a fierce current. You can try & resist but the current won’t stop. It moves faster & stronger then you ever will. People give in. People have to many vices that blur their vision. Most people accept what it is and never go against the mainstream. Swim up the mainstream, go against what is the norm and what is being force fed to you. Living life this way takes perseverance and determination.
Society, civilization, language, just living day by day, people are tired. They don’t have the strength to make change....
Society, civilization, language, just living day by day, people are tired. They don’t have the strength to make change....
#courage
#TruthOfLife
#determination
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Being a Man
I see a lot of boys that's constantly being mislead
Hearing a lot of noise that makes them have a big head
Thinking they got it all together by what's in their vision
Sinking & fall into whatever that grabs their attention
Pretty girls in love wit da gangsta lean, da vicious thug lifestyle
a bright smile to da drug money, party with da night crowd
Breaking down Swishers & White Owls next to da cocaine white pile
no patience for education cause they tryna chase dat bag right now
Luxurious & fast cars with wet paint rolling on...
Hearing a lot of noise that makes them have a big head
Thinking they got it all together by what's in their vision
Sinking & fall into whatever that grabs their attention
Pretty girls in love wit da gangsta lean, da vicious thug lifestyle
a bright smile to da drug money, party with da night crowd
Breaking down Swishers & White Owls next to da cocaine white pile
no patience for education cause they tryna chase dat bag right now
Luxurious & fast cars with wet paint rolling on...
#courage
#motivational
#inspirational
#uplifting
#determination
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Fully In Hand
Like Noble Drew Ali
I will remind my people of their spirituality
Like Muhammad Ali
I will fight even when the opponent is my own country
Like Ernie Banks when he joined his Northside club
I will show the courage that earned him the name "Mr. Cub"
Like the great Hannibal
I will defeat my adversaries when their thinking is dull
Like the warriors of Sekhmet, when I make my last stand
I will do so with my self-respect fully in hand
I will remind my people of their spirituality
Like Muhammad Ali
I will fight even when the opponent is my own country
Like Ernie Banks when he joined his Northside club
I will show the courage that earned him the name "Mr. Cub"
Like the great Hannibal
I will defeat my adversaries when their thinking is dull
Like the warriors of Sekhmet, when I make my last stand
I will do so with my self-respect fully in hand
#strength
#inspirational
#LifeGoals
#uplifting
#determination
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A Keeper Of The Flame
It's not about "bs" or jive
I have a "sacred" duty to keep our stories alive
I follow where the tale goes
through our collective highs and lows
Like a torch bearer, my words make their rounds
to hamlets, villages cities and towns
I am driven by the work I do
in hopes to inspire the next Hughes or Angelou
My only claim to fame
is that I am a keeper of the flame
I have a "sacred" duty to keep our stories alive
I follow where the tale goes
through our collective highs and lows
Like a torch bearer, my words make their rounds
to hamlets, villages cities and towns
I am driven by the work I do
in hopes to inspire the next Hughes or Angelou
My only claim to fame
is that I am a keeper of the flame
#motivational
#inspirational
#LifeGoals
#wisdom
#determination
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One last time
I heard your voice today
feels like forever but it was clear as day
you told me one simple phrase
something to darken the current sun's rays
'do it' as I gave myself a shave
looking at my neck I did not feel brave
rather I felt weak and sad that you
still have a room it's true
but you're voice reflects you now
weak and no longer in control no how
I finished my task without a single drop of red
with your weak voice trailing off in my head
little did you know I did listen to you in a way
I did it and I cut you out of me today.
feels like forever but it was clear as day
you told me one simple phrase
something to darken the current sun's rays
'do it' as I gave myself a shave
looking at my neck I did not feel brave
rather I felt weak and sad that you
still have a room it's true
but you're voice reflects you now
weak and no longer in control no how
I finished my task without a single drop of red
with your weak voice trailing off in my head
little did you know I did listen to you in a way
I did it and I cut you out of me today.
#depression
#dark
#SelfHarm
#determination
#PersonalGrowth
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Bend
It’s second nature to pretend
I’ve been waiting since God knows when
For a miracle; a sign of absolute wonder
Yet I’m being held back to stop and ponder.
I’m wide awake; the dawn’s just breaking
All these intrusive thoughts are a dead-end
I numb this pain; it’s my soul that’s gaining
You can put me through hell, but my will won’t bend.
I’m an elastic band at this point
I’ve been stretched far beyond my capability
These once forgotten thoughts; they’re now impossible to avoid
As I’m lectured on the importance of responsibility....
I’ve been waiting since God knows when
For a miracle; a sign of absolute wonder
Yet I’m being held back to stop and ponder.
I’m wide awake; the dawn’s just breaking
All these intrusive thoughts are a dead-end
I numb this pain; it’s my soul that’s gaining
You can put me through hell, but my will won’t bend.
I’m an elastic band at this point
I’ve been stretched far beyond my capability
These once forgotten thoughts; they’re now impossible to avoid
As I’m lectured on the importance of responsibility....
#strength
#rhyming
#respect #determination
#respect #determination
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A upstair nurture.
We lay off
The
Ocean windmill
And turn tides
To time.
The
Ocean windmill
And turn tides
To time.
#determination
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What that dust did
I come from the north side
Then I kept that east known
But I been on my big boy
I call the whole city home
I been trying to guide the kids
Trying to call my city home
Used to feel so lonely but
This ain't a thing I did alone
Universe been proud of me
Like, look at what that dust did
I don't know my own worth
Guess I have to trust it
know that it's a process
Trying not to rush steps
Trying to learn about love
I used to think it suspect
I know you know I walked here
I learned how to fly tho
Look up at the...
Then I kept that east known
But I been on my big boy
I call the whole city home
I been trying to guide the kids
Trying to call my city home
Used to feel so lonely but
This ain't a thing I did alone
Universe been proud of me
Like, look at what that dust did
I don't know my own worth
Guess I have to trust it
know that it's a process
Trying not to rush steps
Trying to learn about love
I used to think it suspect
I know you know I walked here
I learned how to fly tho
Look up at the...
#responsibility
#healing
#determination
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In the Depths of Uncertainty
In doubt's vast sea, I aimless drift,
No purpose, lost in endless mist.
Within, an ache engulfs my soul,
Guided by darkness, tempest's toll.
Yearning for change, I seek my way,
But where to start, I cannot say.
Time's ceaseless march, it ticks away,
As sands of my heart slowly sway.
No purpose, lost in endless mist.
Within, an ache engulfs my soul,
Guided by darkness, tempest's toll.
Yearning for change, I seek my way,
But where to start, I cannot say.
Time's ceaseless march, it ticks away,
As sands of my heart slowly sway.
#anxiety
#SelfReflection
#despair
#emptiness
#determination
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Summer afternoon.
It was hot and placid
I took drafts and
Blue swan into Wales
Like in water
Dreams across azure
Despair across damsel
Graffiti across gerald
Grass crossed the boat
Ancient Greek screen
Drups of crest grest
Brewing in the morning
Morning beetle sea.
Across a wooden pane
Crawling into draw
Of food and cook.
She pretty sure about
Her mates and the
Dismay the Disney
Door.
Ponds cross the country
Lane where the valley calls ...
I took drafts and
Blue swan into Wales
Like in water
Dreams across azure
Despair across damsel
Graffiti across gerald
Grass crossed the boat
Ancient Greek screen
Drups of crest grest
Brewing in the morning
Morning beetle sea.
Across a wooden pane
Crawling into draw
Of food and cook.
She pretty sure about
Her mates and the
Dismay the Disney
Door.
Ponds cross the country
Lane where the valley calls ...
#evolution
#determination
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nineteen forties, south london
mum was evacuated to a place
in the countryside as
a kid, but she didn’t like it, and she made her
own way back to woolwich
in the countryside as
a kid, but she didn’t like it, and she made her
own way back to woolwich
#determination
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DU Poetry : Poems About Determination Seeking Honest Critique