Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique
#death
Poems about death seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Hear It Calling
Beneath the loam, where silence breeds
A shadow stirs in restless plight
I buried him, my crime unheeds
Yet feel his clawing in the night
His voice, a rasp through fetid air
A specter’s hymn, a curse untamed
It bids me down the stairs in despair
Yet no tongue speaks the damned unnamed
Scratch, scratch beneath the floor’s tight grain
The boards do shudder at his call
Each groan and creak becomes a chain
That binds my soul to rise and fall
The grave exhales its rancid breath
A miasma cold, my guilt laid bare ...
A shadow stirs in restless plight
I buried him, my crime unheeds
Yet feel his clawing in the night
His voice, a rasp through fetid air
A specter’s hymn, a curse untamed
It bids me down the stairs in despair
Yet no tongue speaks the damned unnamed
Scratch, scratch beneath the floor’s tight grain
The boards do shudder at his call
Each groan and creak becomes a chain
That binds my soul to rise and fall
The grave exhales its rancid breath
A miasma cold, my guilt laid bare ...
#death
#narrative
#night
#nightmares
#shadows
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It fell from the sky
It spreads through the air
Dissolving the body internally
This can't be cured
You'll die a turbulent death
Pressure building inside your skull
Eyes popped out, fall on the ground
Tympanum burst you bleed from your ears
Spasmodic convulsion, your moribund
Loss of consciousness, body fluids oozing Out
Coagulated blood, punctured lungs erode
Softening of the brain, muscle contractions uncontrolled
Puss filled bruises
Maggots munch your flesh
Cerebral meningitis
Swollen cranium explodes
Malignantly slaughtered ...
Dissolving the body internally
This can't be cured
You'll die a turbulent death
Pressure building inside your skull
Eyes popped out, fall on the ground
Tympanum burst you bleed from your ears
Spasmodic convulsion, your moribund
Loss of consciousness, body fluids oozing Out
Coagulated blood, punctured lungs erode
Softening of the brain, muscle contractions uncontrolled
Puss filled bruises
Maggots munch your flesh
Cerebral meningitis
Swollen cranium explodes
Malignantly slaughtered ...
#dark
#death
#illness
#MentalHealth
#pollution
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4 Comments
Lost You When You Moved To California
I
lost you,
my darling
daughter. I lost
you when you moved to
California, got
conned into posing naked
for some magazine and died from
an overdose of drugs at some bash
that was going on at some jerk's beach house!
lost you,
my darling
daughter. I lost
you when you moved to
California, got
conned into posing naked
for some magazine and died from
an overdose of drugs at some bash
that was going on at some jerk's beach house!
#daughter
#death
#dialogue
#fiction
#sex
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Blood In The Loch, Freedom Flowing Fjord
By loch and glen, the shadows grow
The heather drinks the twilight’s glow
With Robert’s men, we ride as one
Beneath the moon, behind the sun
The confessor marches with blades of steel
Their boots do crush the Highland’s keel
But o’er the fjord, the echoes ring
With battle songs we proudly sing
Through mist and stone, our paths are made
The sword our guide, the bow our trade
The stag does leap, the raven cries
And freedom lights the coldest skies
We strike by night, a shadow’s blade
In Bruce’s name, the price is...
The heather drinks the twilight’s glow
With Robert’s men, we ride as one
Beneath the moon, behind the sun
The confessor marches with blades of steel
Their boots do crush the Highland’s keel
But o’er the fjord, the echoes ring
With battle songs we proudly sing
Through mist and stone, our paths are made
The sword our guide, the bow our trade
The stag does leap, the raven cries
And freedom lights the coldest skies
We strike by night, a shadow’s blade
In Bruce’s name, the price is...
#death
#environment
#narrative
#rhyming
#war
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Sacrificial Monolith
Beneath the moon’s unwholesome light
Where shadows coil in endless night
There stands a stone of blackened hue
Carved deep by hands no man e’er knew
Before the Slavs, before the Magyar’s tread
A race debauched, both damned and dread
Did rule these lands with rites obscene
In homage to their shadowed queen
They danced beneath the gibbous moon
To pipe and drum, their foulest tune
Their bodies writhed, unbound by grace
A beast-like, dark, forgotten race
Upon this stone their rites did burn
Where life and flesh to...
Where shadows coil in endless night
There stands a stone of blackened hue
Carved deep by hands no man e’er knew
Before the Slavs, before the Magyar’s tread
A race debauched, both damned and dread
Did rule these lands with rites obscene
In homage to their shadowed queen
They danced beneath the gibbous moon
To pipe and drum, their foulest tune
Their bodies writhed, unbound by grace
A beast-like, dark, forgotten race
Upon this stone their rites did burn
Where life and flesh to...
#dark
#death
#evil
#forest
#magic
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Venomous Kiss Of His Fists
In lieu of a kiss, he used his fist
Felt that she dissed and he got pissed
Used his palms in lieu of a charm
Strangled, she couldn't raise her arms
Recited Psalms then said goodbye
Reached the finale of blackened eyes
She chose the wrong guy for a mate
Hindsight's 20/20; a twisted fate
Felt that she dissed and he got pissed
Used his palms in lieu of a charm
Strangled, she couldn't raise her arms
Recited Psalms then said goodbye
Reached the finale of blackened eyes
She chose the wrong guy for a mate
Hindsight's 20/20; a twisted fate
#death
#DomesticViolence
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My love lost until then ...
Endlessly I walk through a blinded dream
Where are you now my darling.
I miss you every minute of everyday,
it seems so long that you have been gone,
I wonder If I saw you again,
Would my name still linger or would it be forgotten to your lips?
Would time have made us strangers?
Could our love be the same as it once was? Would you reach out and hold my hand if we are reunited once more,
Please save me as I slowly slip into a puddle of my tears and drown in despair, ...
Where are you now my darling.
I miss you every minute of everyday,
it seems so long that you have been gone,
I wonder If I saw you again,
Would my name still linger or would it be forgotten to your lips?
Would time have made us strangers?
Could our love be the same as it once was? Would you reach out and hold my hand if we are reunited once more,
Please save me as I slowly slip into a puddle of my tears and drown in despair, ...
#death
#FeelingLost
#love
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Bone Broth
Sometimes you’ve got to die
and somehow go on living;
plant a thriving summer garden
where winter buried your heart.
Fertilize the soil with your sorrows,
composted into lessons learned,
seasons weathered with experiences,
love tended to and abandoned;
how it all withers until it is watered
with compassion and fed perspective.
Knowing that long hours spent
under the light of truth of oneself
were worth the knowing,
and being known in equal measure.
And one day your heart, pruned
will be ripe for love and joy...
and somehow go on living;
plant a thriving summer garden
where winter buried your heart.
Fertilize the soil with your sorrows,
composted into lessons learned,
seasons weathered with experiences,
love tended to and abandoned;
how it all withers until it is watered
with compassion and fed perspective.
Knowing that long hours spent
under the light of truth of oneself
were worth the knowing,
and being known in equal measure.
And one day your heart, pruned
will be ripe for love and joy...
#death
#grief
#learning #LifeCycle
#learning #LifeCycle
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Hello? Who's Out There?
Elizabeth was
taking a shower before
she heard someone step
into the bathroom which made
her say "Hello? Who's out there?"
Russ came home from work
and saw that the front door was
forced open. He went
into the bathroom and found
his roommate slashed with a blade.
taking a shower before
she heard someone step
into the bathroom which made
her say "Hello? Who's out there?"
Russ came home from work
and saw that the front door was
forced open. He went
into the bathroom and found
his roommate slashed with a blade.
#death
#fiction
#mystery
#tanka
#tragedy
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Road f**king Kills
A ride to salvation so rudely disrupted
I'm looking for revenge on the road
I just got laid off and I'm ready to blow away
The blood lust ready to go
I can’t make the light till this asshole takes flight
My stabbing hand is yearning to fight
To beat you to shit you slow fucking prick
Leave you bleeding and stranded to die
Road Fucking Kills
Splattered around
Road Fucking Kills
And watch you die
I rev up the shift, I’m right on your six
Move over pedestrian scum
Collateral damage is all that they are
I'm not...
I'm looking for revenge on the road
I just got laid off and I'm ready to blow away
The blood lust ready to go
I can’t make the light till this asshole takes flight
My stabbing hand is yearning to fight
To beat you to shit you slow fucking prick
Leave you bleeding and stranded to die
Road Fucking Kills
Splattered around
Road Fucking Kills
And watch you die
I rev up the shift, I’m right on your six
Move over pedestrian scum
Collateral damage is all that they are
I'm not...
#cars
#death
#horror
#MentalHealth
#violence
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6 Comments
Morbid Curiosity
#animals
#death
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10 Comments
Time
As my mind traces back
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me when my time will expire
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me when my time will expire
#death
#identity
#memories
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DU Poetry : Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique