Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique
#death
Poems about death seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
He Worked, He Drank
He worked
He worked
He worked
and worked
He drank
He drank
He drank
and drank
His job wasn't to far from his home
He would walk home the same route every day
It wasn't the greatest neighborhood
Hobo's were always near the liquor store he would stop by each evening
He'd buy a bottle and have it finished by the time he arrived home
Trash littered the streets & sidewalks
He would always look down to see if any scratch-offs were thrown on the ground
Once he found a used scratch-off that had a 2 dollar...
He worked
He worked
and worked
He drank
He drank
He drank
and drank
His job wasn't to far from his home
He would walk home the same route every day
It wasn't the greatest neighborhood
Hobo's were always near the liquor store he would stop by each evening
He'd buy a bottle and have it finished by the time he arrived home
Trash littered the streets & sidewalks
He would always look down to see if any scratch-offs were thrown on the ground
Once he found a used scratch-off that had a 2 dollar...
#alcohol
#boredom
#death #home
#death #home
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Journey to the stars
"stardust to stardust"
every atom in me
longs to return to thee;
o' majestic stars...
wish i could defy gravity,
soar high into infinity,
be sucked into blackhole-
your ever disintegrating soul
made from stardust-
each cell of my being
yearns to be in sync;
whirling within and within-
you in me and me in you,
a self-destructive waltz
to go on for eternity-
ever lost in mystery...
i'm rusting on earth,
mud peeling off my...
every atom in me
longs to return to thee;
o' majestic stars...
wish i could defy gravity,
soar high into infinity,
be sucked into blackhole-
your ever disintegrating soul
made from stardust-
each cell of my being
yearns to be in sync;
whirling within and within-
you in me and me in you,
a self-destructive waltz
to go on for eternity-
ever lost in mystery...
i'm rusting on earth,
mud peeling off my...
#death
#stars
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Tomorrow was a great day
I'm in a teachers faculty lounge
All there is in the room are ugly, out of shape woman who are topless with sagging tits
I get up from my chair and began fondling one of these woman's breasts
She looked like Colonel Sanders if Colonel Sanders was a woman
UGLY!
Juggling them like I'm a clown or magician
She tries to get away
As she does, I squeeze onto her left nipple as she's forced to stay put
She was about to swing at me
As she did, I ducked and bit her really hard on her right breast
The other old bats start screaming and yelling at me ...
All there is in the room are ugly, out of shape woman who are topless with sagging tits
I get up from my chair and began fondling one of these woman's breasts
She looked like Colonel Sanders if Colonel Sanders was a woman
UGLY!
Juggling them like I'm a clown or magician
She tries to get away
As she does, I squeeze onto her left nipple as she's forced to stay put
She was about to swing at me
As she did, I ducked and bit her really hard on her right breast
The other old bats start screaming and yelling at me ...
#death
#dirty
#erotic #murder
#erotic #murder
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8 Comments
to the sadist's cremains in my panty drawer ~
iii}
wonder who
you were protecting
other than yourself
when you lied that
the chemo was working
{ii}
you died.
on a monday.
six hours
after i
held your hand,
memorized
the paper-thin texture
of your pallid skin,
focusing on
the gentle press of
your bones
against my palm.
said i love you.
see you later.
your eyes
were
wide & terrified
like you could see
it reaching for you
and i got a mocha
on the way out ...
wonder who
you were protecting
other than yourself
when you lied that
the chemo was working
{ii}
you died.
on a monday.
six hours
after i
held your hand,
memorized
the paper-thin texture
of your pallid skin,
focusing on
the gentle press of
your bones
against my palm.
said i love you.
see you later.
your eyes
were
wide & terrified
like you could see
it reaching for you
and i got a mocha
on the way out ...
#death
#grief
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8 Comments
Seven
Six times I have laid my head on death-beds
if you have never felt the warmth of a corpse,
then please, leave your heart on library shelves
And then the seventh
words hollower than Auschwitz choirs,
her silence was the midnight rain
falling in pavement cracks ,
but I felt the breath on her lips
collected in my pillow jar,
forever yesterday, our love will always
be the lighthouse where not even
drowned sailors can reach
And then the eighth…
promises are merely rotten fruits
stowed in hearts of Summer orchards, ...
if you have never felt the warmth of a corpse,
then please, leave your heart on library shelves
And then the seventh
words hollower than Auschwitz choirs,
her silence was the midnight rain
falling in pavement cracks ,
but I felt the breath on her lips
collected in my pillow jar,
forever yesterday, our love will always
be the lighthouse where not even
drowned sailors can reach
And then the eighth…
promises are merely rotten fruits
stowed in hearts of Summer orchards, ...
#death
#love
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Carol of the Creator
(Hush, hush—do not call,)
(Hush, hush—do not fall,)
(Still your breath, still your step,)
(Lest they wake and take you yet.)
They who carved the sky from ink,
Set the sun and stars to sink,
Spun the thread and wove the lines,
Wrote the names and shaped the words.
(Hush, hush—do not gaze,)
(Hush, hush—shun their praise,)
(Turn your eyes, bow your head,)
(Tread too close, you’ll join the dead.)
Words unspoken, worlds unseen,
Maps erased and hands wiped clean,
They who build and they who rend,
Minds...
(Hush, hush—do not fall,)
(Still your breath, still your step,)
(Lest they wake and take you yet.)
They who carved the sky from ink,
Set the sun and stars to sink,
Spun the thread and wove the lines,
Wrote the names and shaped the words.
(Hush, hush—do not gaze,)
(Hush, hush—shun their praise,)
(Turn your eyes, bow your head,)
(Tread too close, you’ll join the dead.)
Words unspoken, worlds unseen,
Maps erased and hands wiped clean,
They who build and they who rend,
Minds...
#death
#God
#horror
#narrative
#rhyming
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On Her Knees Crying Scarlet Tears
After leaving work,
Lisa saw a woman on
her knees crying scarlet tears.
Lisa lifted her
up and saw with shock that she
had no eyes before she lunged.
Lisa saw a woman on
her knees crying scarlet tears.
Lisa lifted her
up and saw with shock that she
had no eyes before she lunged.
#death
#fear
#fiction
#scary
#zombies
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Nightmares in Nevada
"Nightmares in Nevada"
Can I escape nightmares in Nevada?
Screaming for any magik abracadabra
Snuck up behind me with subtle charms
Lying deeply within your sweltering arms
Your mouth equals smoldering passion
Nude bodies collide resistance crashing
Drunk on intoxicating mahogany orbs
Stoned in romance enslaved by thorns
Loneliness decays swallowed in sapphire
Charismatic disguise murdered my desire
Solitude wakens a raging wildfire off course
Severed vessel ruptured by centrifugal force ...
Can I escape nightmares in Nevada?
Screaming for any magik abracadabra
Snuck up behind me with subtle charms
Lying deeply within your sweltering arms
Your mouth equals smoldering passion
Nude bodies collide resistance crashing
Drunk on intoxicating mahogany orbs
Stoned in romance enslaved by thorns
Loneliness decays swallowed in sapphire
Charismatic disguise murdered my desire
Solitude wakens a raging wildfire off course
Severed vessel ruptured by centrifugal force ...
#anxiety
#bittersweet
#death #love
#death #love
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The Guy On The Drums
The guy on the drums
was my brother. He
enjoyed the perks of
rock stardom until he
enjoyed the one known
as drugs too much.
was my brother. He
enjoyed the perks of
rock stardom until he
enjoyed the one known
as drugs too much.
#death
#dialogue
#drugs
#fiction
#music
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Sepia tone
I remember our love
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
#death
#hope
#love
#memories
#stars
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Zion
Mourning air whispering over me
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Zion
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Zion
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
#death
#heaven
#hell
#peace
#silence
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Deep Within
As my mind reflects
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me when my time will end
voices from within
tell me to soul search
a personal energy
that resonates
changing my perspective
as multiple beings
alert me when my time will end
#death
#identity
#memories
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DU Poetry : Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique