Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique
#death
Poems about death seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Cost of Addiction
In the cramped confines of her daily life,
her words of love and desire were muffled
against the chest of unfaithful men.
Their daily harvesting of her gave
the illusion of love in a chaotic home.
In her dance of survival and despair,
she was a flicker of warmth in the gloom,
her tender lips crafting moments of care and affection,
yet each act of love drained her spirit.
At day's end, she bore stories of a mother's toil
and the scars of a woman given to pleasure.
She sought and found comfort in many men,
then...
her words of love and desire were muffled
against the chest of unfaithful men.
Their daily harvesting of her gave
the illusion of love in a chaotic home.
In her dance of survival and despair,
she was a flicker of warmth in the gloom,
her tender lips crafting moments of care and affection,
yet each act of love drained her spirit.
At day's end, she bore stories of a mother's toil
and the scars of a woman given to pleasure.
She sought and found comfort in many men,
then...
#addiction
#death
#sex
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Grant a Wish
"Grant a Wish"
This life plowed me like a mack truck
But frankly my dear I don't give a fukk
I'm no survivor I'm a goddamn warrior
To brutality & misery I'm no foreigner
Bring it on BIG brother of despair
I can take what you give in pairs
I have no fear of fire & brimstone
Look inside a soul brightly shone
You think you can plague me like Job?
Your sorry ass will swing by the rope
Think my knees have fell down to pray?
Mark it on your calendar that'll be the day
Confession...
This life plowed me like a mack truck
But frankly my dear I don't give a fukk
I'm no survivor I'm a goddamn warrior
To brutality & misery I'm no foreigner
Bring it on BIG brother of despair
I can take what you give in pairs
I have no fear of fire & brimstone
Look inside a soul brightly shone
You think you can plague me like Job?
Your sorry ass will swing by the rope
Think my knees have fell down to pray?
Mark it on your calendar that'll be the day
Confession...
#dark
#death
#despair
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Extreme Unction
I started a gallop but my legs failed
to understand, I fell to the asphalt,
arms ahead for pitiful protection
I asked about a priest in a photo
of a friend in the hospital, the words
"extreme unction" perplexed them
When I look out the car window, up
from book or tablet, or from a nap,
the whiz of a world slows to a still:
Shows me a building, a crowd flagging
jeepneys, where there were a field, a creek
and small stands of fruits and vegetables
In a sense, we notice...
to understand, I fell to the asphalt,
arms ahead for pitiful protection
I asked about a priest in a photo
of a friend in the hospital, the words
"extreme unction" perplexed them
When I look out the car window, up
from book or tablet, or from a nap,
the whiz of a world slows to a still:
Shows me a building, a crowd flagging
jeepneys, where there were a field, a creek
and small stands of fruits and vegetables
In a sense, we notice...
#aging
#death
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~of this elongating ever life… dotted in differential deltaic deaths
this young midnight’s chilling air
in a weirdly turning on groovy beat
mixing in your smoking touchy heat
-tastes a warm spice of musky mace
I crave for
a metallic blood flower rapturous
I bleed and bloom in a pleasantly~
pungent addictive blossom.. that
even this waiting nocturne animal
in your plunging deep purplish trysts..
pierces sharp unto this seductive
self digging hell in an unreturning
pathway spiral..
hitting red & black as sky~ high
cranial kicks..
this unbearably...
in a weirdly turning on groovy beat
mixing in your smoking touchy heat
-tastes a warm spice of musky mace
I crave for
a metallic blood flower rapturous
I bleed and bloom in a pleasantly~
pungent addictive blossom.. that
even this waiting nocturne animal
in your plunging deep purplish trysts..
pierces sharp unto this seductive
self digging hell in an unreturning
pathway spiral..
hitting red & black as sky~ high
cranial kicks..
this unbearably...
#death
#love
#night #sensual
#night #sensual
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4 Comments
Joining A Glam Metal Band Is Not Good
Racquel joined Nemesis on tour.
Everything was going okay before the drugs.
She's found dead in Miami.
Everything was going okay before the drugs.
She's found dead in Miami.
#art
#dark
#death
#drugs
#fiction
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Lost in the Seams
Playing my own funeral March
Sit down tap out a tune
Didn’t know this would be my funeral
Stand before Jesus
Profess my sins to him
He says that is not so
It’s who I am
Bathing in dirty water
Come up clean prophecy
Bathing in Jesus
Looking for lost prophets
Lost in the seams
Lost in the seams
Search for me in deviling
Come up soul clean
The path is short I’m getting there
Still a beast in the in between
Days are shorter than when I...
Sit down tap out a tune
Didn’t know this would be my funeral
Stand before Jesus
Profess my sins to him
He says that is not so
It’s who I am
Bathing in dirty water
Come up clean prophecy
Bathing in Jesus
Looking for lost prophets
Lost in the seams
Lost in the seams
Search for me in deviling
Come up soul clean
The path is short I’m getting there
Still a beast in the in between
Days are shorter than when I...
#aging
#death
#God
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Loser
I am a loser
i know it, now
i want to quit before starting
Don't follow me
I am on a lonely road
in the middle of a cold desert
the sun is setting
painting the mountains red
I will walk into the darkness
and be one with the sand,
the grey sand
the shade i never liked
i know it, now
i want to quit before starting
Don't follow me
I am on a lonely road
in the middle of a cold desert
the sun is setting
painting the mountains red
I will walk into the darkness
and be one with the sand,
the grey sand
the shade i never liked
#anxiety
#dark
#death
#depression
#sadness
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TAG, YOU'RE IT! (collaboration with Lilliputian)
They played a fierce game of tag all of their lives
From as far back to childhood through to their later years in life
Tag you're it
Now, tag you're it!
The game was harmless, but both were eager to tag the other throughout their lives
Even when they were married & had families, the game went on
One of them fell ill a few years back
Even so, wheelchair bound and sick, he would tag his friend gleefully, like he did for over 70 years
His friend was saddened but thought he'd bounce back
He never did
While in the hospital on his deathbed, he...
From as far back to childhood through to their later years in life
Tag you're it
Now, tag you're it!
The game was harmless, but both were eager to tag the other throughout their lives
Even when they were married & had families, the game went on
One of them fell ill a few years back
Even so, wheelchair bound and sick, he would tag his friend gleefully, like he did for over 70 years
His friend was saddened but thought he'd bounce back
He never did
While in the hospital on his deathbed, he...
#dark
#death
#friendship
#ghosts
#ShortStory
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12 Comments
I'm Dead?
Why has no one ever
told me that I’m dead?
I’m lurking in the dark,
lying on this hospital bed.
My face is all white,
from all this medicine,
in this twisted horror,
is this all I’ve ever been?
Why has no one ever
told me that I’m dead?
I cross the knife,
into my wrist, blood red.
My future is dark,
I can’t escape this,
I know you don’t mean it,
but I won’t be missed.
They always looked at me,
eyes cast down low,
brought me flowers,
with the people in tow.
I’ve...
told me that I’m dead?
I’m lurking in the dark,
lying on this hospital bed.
My face is all white,
from all this medicine,
in this twisted horror,
is this all I’ve ever been?
Why has no one ever
told me that I’m dead?
I cross the knife,
into my wrist, blood red.
My future is dark,
I can’t escape this,
I know you don’t mean it,
but I won’t be missed.
They always looked at me,
eyes cast down low,
brought me flowers,
with the people in tow.
I’ve...
#dark
#death
60 reads
1 Comment
Farewell
I was born through misery,
and raised with pain.
The life they gave me was always filled with vain…
Forgive me my dear, for me wanting to disappear,
everything is going downhill, I can't handle the despair.
This life is too much for me.
But please trust me my dear, I'm now free from despair
Please excuse the blood my dear.
and raised with pain.
The life they gave me was always filled with vain…
Forgive me my dear, for me wanting to disappear,
everything is going downhill, I can't handle the despair.
This life is too much for me.
But please trust me my dear, I'm now free from despair
Please excuse the blood my dear.
#dark
#death
#depression
#despair
#suicide
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Existential Crisis
What happens
With these piles of paper
Once I meet
The Grim Reaper?
With these piles of paper
Once I meet
The Grim Reaper?
#dark
#death
#despair
#LifeAsAWriter
#LifeCycle
64 reads
3 Comments
Imprisoned
When sorrow fills the void
I torment those who I adore
An homage for the living lost
I cannot hide anymore
I torment those who I adore
An homage for the living lost
I cannot hide anymore
#dark
#death
#FeelingLost
#love
#sadness
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10 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About Death Seeking Honest Critique