Poems About Astronomy Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about astronomy seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 2:52pm
14th Nov 2024 2:52pm
A Desolate Pale
Betwixt the spheres, where no light treads
A chasm yawns, where silence spreads
No star doth shine, nor time can cling
In the place where black stars hang, unseen
Aether’s breath, cold and thin
Cradles neither life nor sin
No gods dwell here, nor demons scheme
Only the void’s eternal dream
The winds do howl, though none draw near
A dirge of forms we dare not hear
Shapes unbidden, unseen, yet felt
In their shadow, even chaos melts
What horrors lurk in yon abyss?
Not fangs, nor claws, nor serpents hiss
But...
A chasm yawns, where silence spreads
No star doth shine, nor time can cling
In the place where black stars hang, unseen
Aether’s breath, cold and thin
Cradles neither life nor sin
No gods dwell here, nor demons scheme
Only the void’s eternal dream
The winds do howl, though none draw near
A dirge of forms we dare not hear
Shapes unbidden, unseen, yet felt
In their shadow, even chaos melts
What horrors lurk in yon abyss?
Not fangs, nor claws, nor serpents hiss
But...
#astronomy
#dark
#evil
#stars
#universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 2:46pm
14th Nov 2024 2:46pm
A Black Star
Lo, in the shadowed eaves of night’s dark keep
Where no sun’s solace nor moon doth creep
A black star hangs, unblinking, cursed
Its baleful gaze o’ th’ heavens reversed
Yon lightless orb, a wound in the firmament
Doth whisper foul in tongues unsent
A hollow hymn, the void’s decree
It singeth not life, but entropy
Hark, the wailing wind doth call
Through barren wood and ruined hall
The stones weep blood, the roots do writhe
As life is scourged by death alive
The air is thick with dread's foul breath
Each mote a...
Where no sun’s solace nor moon doth creep
A black star hangs, unblinking, cursed
Its baleful gaze o’ th’ heavens reversed
Yon lightless orb, a wound in the firmament
Doth whisper foul in tongues unsent
A hollow hymn, the void’s decree
It singeth not life, but entropy
Hark, the wailing wind doth call
Through barren wood and ruined hall
The stones weep blood, the roots do writhe
As life is scourged by death alive
The air is thick with dread's foul breath
Each mote a...
#astronomy
#dark
#shadows
#stars
#universe
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PAR
Poem Published
8th Nov 2024 2:06pm
8th Nov 2024 2:06pm
Portuguese man-o-war
Who are we, lost in the vastness?
Sailing on seas without a compass.
From the first moment, the first breath.
In a labyrinth of doubts and shadows.
Wandering souls in search of meaning.
We cling to the intangible.
Desperate for answers,
in an indifferent and silent world.
Days drag on and nights collapse
in a relentless cycle of uncertainty.
We scream into the void, crying out for direction
but the echo is all that returns to us.
Heavy hearts and exhausted minds.
We walk among the ruins of...
Sailing on seas without a compass.
From the first moment, the first breath.
In a labyrinth of doubts and shadows.
Wandering souls in search of meaning.
We cling to the intangible.
Desperate for answers,
in an indifferent and silent world.
Days drag on and nights collapse
in a relentless cycle of uncertainty.
We scream into the void, crying out for direction
but the echo is all that returns to us.
Heavy hearts and exhausted minds.
We walk among the ruins of...
#astronomy
#heroic
#karma
#sea
#universe
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8 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
26th Oct 2024 1:02am
26th Oct 2024 1:02am
Under The Eyes of A Snake Moon
Yon moon doth split in twain
Two lights like eyes of fate
A serpent’s gaze, so cold, so vain
That stirs the midnight late
Two spheres of piercing white
O’er heavens dark and still
Mark where death takes flight
With cold and ancient will
The stars doth hide in fear
The night doth choke with dread
For all beneath its baleful leer
Are counted with the dead
The Snake-Eyes Moon doth stare
Its gaze both fell and grim
As death takes form from out the air
And walks where shadows swim
O mark...
Two lights like eyes of fate
A serpent’s gaze, so cold, so vain
That stirs the midnight late
Two spheres of piercing white
O’er heavens dark and still
Mark where death takes flight
With cold and ancient will
The stars doth hide in fear
The night doth choke with dread
For all beneath its baleful leer
Are counted with the dead
The Snake-Eyes Moon doth stare
Its gaze both fell and grim
As death takes form from out the air
And walks where shadows swim
O mark...
#astronomy
#dark
#hell
#narrative
#universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
22nd Oct 2024 00:09am
22nd Oct 2024 00:09am
Shadow Pierced Chaos
From depths where order breaks
And chaos first was born
A shadow wakes and shakes
In darkness, swift and sworn
It pierces through the night
With tendrils long and cold
Unseen by mortal sight
Yet ancient as the old
No star can quell its march
No flame can burn it back
It strides beneath the arch
Where time itself does crack
The undying shadow grows
In silence, yet profound
Its strength no limit knows
Nor chain to hold it bound
It pierces through the veil
Where chaos spins its thread ...
And chaos first was born
A shadow wakes and shakes
In darkness, swift and sworn
It pierces through the night
With tendrils long and cold
Unseen by mortal sight
Yet ancient as the old
No star can quell its march
No flame can burn it back
It strides beneath the arch
Where time itself does crack
The undying shadow grows
In silence, yet profound
Its strength no limit knows
Nor chain to hold it bound
It pierces through the veil
Where chaos spins its thread ...
#astronomy
#dark
#evil
#shadows
#universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
21st Oct 2024 1:00am
21st Oct 2024 1:00am
Exodite's Clarity of Stolen Stars
In circles thrice entwined
By sacred numbers torn
The Nine and Seven bind
Where stars are now forlorn
Unholy shapes are cast
In Fivefold glyphs of woe
The heavens turn at last
And to the Void they go
By crooked angles made
The Six betrays the light
Its secrets now displayed
In patterns bent by night
The stars, devoured whole
In thirteens they collapse
A darkness takes its toll
And snaps their cosmic lapse
The diviner counts the lines
In symbols traced by Three
Their meaning...
By sacred numbers torn
The Nine and Seven bind
Where stars are now forlorn
Unholy shapes are cast
In Fivefold glyphs of woe
The heavens turn at last
And to the Void they go
By crooked angles made
The Six betrays the light
Its secrets now displayed
In patterns bent by night
The stars, devoured whole
In thirteens they collapse
A darkness takes its toll
And snaps their cosmic lapse
The diviner counts the lines
In symbols traced by Three
Their meaning...
#astronomy
#dark
#death
#symbolism
#universe
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MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
18th Oct 2024 6:35am
18th Oct 2024 6:35am
Her Grace
Luna! Luna! Beyond the geese!
Shining like an Argonaut fleece!
Consort to the Royal power
of sunbeams at the midnight hour!
Transfixer of our mortal eyes
upon Memento Mori skies!
Syzygy Mistress of the tides
and all the waves a surfer rides!
Cratered gem within the rings
of coronal mass ejection flings!
Fair courtesan of meteorites,
comet tails, and satellites!
Navigatrix through the spiral path
of solar flares and stellar wrath.
Majestic Queen of sonneteers!
May you hold...
Shining like an Argonaut fleece!
Consort to the Royal power
of sunbeams at the midnight hour!
Transfixer of our mortal eyes
upon Memento Mori skies!
Syzygy Mistress of the tides
and all the waves a surfer rides!
Cratered gem within the rings
of coronal mass ejection flings!
Fair courtesan of meteorites,
comet tails, and satellites!
Navigatrix through the spiral path
of solar flares and stellar wrath.
Majestic Queen of sonneteers!
May you hold...
#astronomy
#moon
126 reads
10 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
13th Oct 2024 1:03pm
13th Oct 2024 1:03pm
Luna's Hierophant Triumphant
In silvered veil of night
The moon ascends her throne
A hierophant in light
By hidden wisdom shown
Her phases carve the sky
In waxing, waning form
Where secrets silent lie
Within her timeless storm
She speaks in cryptic dreams
A priestess of the veil
Her knowledge flows in streams
Through shadowed paths, we sail
By crescent horns we rise
In sacred arc we bow
She holds the mirrored skies
Reflecting every vow
The triune force she wields
New moon, full moon, and dark
The mysteries...
The moon ascends her throne
A hierophant in light
By hidden wisdom shown
Her phases carve the sky
In waxing, waning form
Where secrets silent lie
Within her timeless storm
She speaks in cryptic dreams
A priestess of the veil
Her knowledge flows in streams
Through shadowed paths, we sail
By crescent horns we rise
In sacred arc we bow
She holds the mirrored skies
Reflecting every vow
The triune force she wields
New moon, full moon, and dark
The mysteries...
#astronomy
#LifeCycle
#moon
#night
#universe
81 reads
2 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
13th Oct 2024 12:58pm
13th Oct 2024 12:58pm
Celestial Dichotomies of Heavenly Cycles
By numbers they are known
The seven and the nine
Celestial lights are thrown
Both shadowed and divine
The moon, a secret guide
In phases she doth wane
While Sol, in boundless pride
Brings forth his golden reign
In orbit they align
Yet opposite they tread
One gives the sacred sign
The other strikes it dead
Each planet's path is drawn
In cycles vast and deep
The light precedes the dawn
While darkness wakes from sleep
By three and four they turn
In endless cosmic dance
Where...
The seven and the nine
Celestial lights are thrown
Both shadowed and divine
The moon, a secret guide
In phases she doth wane
While Sol, in boundless pride
Brings forth his golden reign
In orbit they align
Yet opposite they tread
One gives the sacred sign
The other strikes it dead
Each planet's path is drawn
In cycles vast and deep
The light precedes the dawn
While darkness wakes from sleep
By three and four they turn
In endless cosmic dance
Where...
#astronomy
#rhyming
#sky
#stars
#universe
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 9:46am
11th Oct 2024 9:46am
tonight ovulating in the universes
tonight awaken and sleep in the deep thought
taking in too much
I masicate the words
to turn phrases into masterbaters,
producing masterpieces
body of pain
failing to digest the knowledge
regress the need for so much at once
reaching to the stars
keeping to the shallows
treading water when the shelf drops
then swim deep underwater holding my breath
space is alive and looking in on me
a warm inviting bath
cool to the touch
hostile... it is riveting in it's chaos
to witness a birth of a...
taking in too much
I masicate the words
to turn phrases into masterbaters,
producing masterpieces
body of pain
failing to digest the knowledge
regress the need for so much at once
reaching to the stars
keeping to the shallows
treading water when the shelf drops
then swim deep underwater holding my breath
space is alive and looking in on me
a warm inviting bath
cool to the touch
hostile... it is riveting in it's chaos
to witness a birth of a...
#astronomy
#metaphor
88 reads
2 Comments
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
7th Oct 2024 4:09pm
7th Oct 2024 4:09pm
Wrath of Bent Shadows
In shadowed depths where stars did wane
I sought the truths that none dare name
With tome and sigil, darkly scrawled
I pierced the veil, the void’s cold thrall
The heavens spun in twisted rhyme
and space did stretch, untouch’d by time
I gazed into that maw so vast
where light did bend and breath could pass
A gate, I thought, to realms divine
where God and daemon intertwine
But what I found, in endless dark
was neither flame nor holy spark
The void it pulled, it drank me whole
an unseen hand that stole my soul ...
I sought the truths that none dare name
With tome and sigil, darkly scrawled
I pierced the veil, the void’s cold thrall
The heavens spun in twisted rhyme
and space did stretch, untouch’d by time
I gazed into that maw so vast
where light did bend and breath could pass
A gate, I thought, to realms divine
where God and daemon intertwine
But what I found, in endless dark
was neither flame nor holy spark
The void it pulled, it drank me whole
an unseen hand that stole my soul ...
#astronomy
#dark
#universe
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ThePalestRider
Poem Published
7th Oct 2024 6:46am
7th Oct 2024 6:46am
A Hammer To Break The Stars
Foul spores upon the winde are cast
From void they come, a shadow vast
Shapes flee swift 'neath skies that break
Pale light doth rise, the dark to wake
Strange sounds from pools where stillness lies
Marks unseen upon men’s eyes
The hidden signs, burnt in their wake
In silent corners shadows quake
The winde, it bears a breath unknown
Of ancient doom, in whispers sown
'Tis not the stars, nor sky, nor sea
But something else, unseen, set free
What stirs beyond the tornèd veil
Doth sow the seed, yet leaves no trail ...
From void they come, a shadow vast
Shapes flee swift 'neath skies that break
Pale light doth rise, the dark to wake
Strange sounds from pools where stillness lies
Marks unseen upon men’s eyes
The hidden signs, burnt in their wake
In silent corners shadows quake
The winde, it bears a breath unknown
Of ancient doom, in whispers sown
'Tis not the stars, nor sky, nor sea
But something else, unseen, set free
What stirs beyond the tornèd veil
Doth sow the seed, yet leaves no trail ...
#astronomy
#curse
#rhyming
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