Poems on Jelaluddin Rumi Seeking Honest Critique

Up he'yah in these mount'ns
lessons ah hahd as wintah  

Too much weight  
on ah frozen lake'll crack it  
from ah branch'll snap it  
in a hart'll break it  
 
Thas exactly what ya want  
'caus then ya don't have ta worry  
bout it breaking no more  
 
Long time ago I discovah'd  
I was hurt'n myself  
by tak'n things all personal;  
 
it's not what was said  
but what I was think'n;  
tha uffend'd, hurt, angry paht  
is ya wound talk'n  
 
an ya wound is tell'n ya...

I'm old(er)  
  and proud of every laugh line      
    a crow's talon has carved      
    into this olive landscape      
     
My mother was buried at 34;      
    never lived to see me graduate      
    marry, or give birth      
      to the next generation of her      
     
I remember thinking      
  how old she was      
But, recognized my ignorance      
  when I actually matured      
     
I recognize yours too-      
  and laugh ( though not deridingly )      
    enough to...

Confucius and Rumi:


My soul fell in love this morning,
with two men
One made the beating heart, in my chest,
happy
Another touched my troubled, and lonely mind
I’m not lonely
Comforted by their life,
I remember how, I should live mine
I could only show them love
the only way I know how
with my passion for life
Maybe thats why they are gone
There’s, would be, as deep as mine



Like whispers in the wind, I heard your voices,
I did not know your name; I never was good at remembering ...