Poems About Deep Underground Poetry Seeking Honest Critique
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
26th Jul 2024 7:36pm
26th Jul 2024 7:36pm
Words
Drowning
Pain
Vermin
Stench of mistakes
Illusions and delusions
Fear and self-loathing
Just muttering and worrying
I don’t die
Regretting everything
This is for black out poem competition. Original poem by Dreamboy the title The Rat King with his permission.
Pain
Vermin
Stench of mistakes
Illusions and delusions
Fear and self-loathing
Just muttering and worrying
I don’t die
Regretting everything
This is for black out poem competition. Original poem by Dreamboy the title The Rat King with his permission.
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
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12 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
24th Jul 2024 1:52pm
24th Jul 2024 1:52pm
Ta-ta for now
I have to go for a while. I hope to read your amazing work soon. All the Hugs and Kisses
To quote Gandolph in lord of the Rings
“A wizard is never late. Nor is he early; he arrives precisely when he means to"
To quote Gandolph in lord of the Rings
“A wizard is never late. Nor is he early; he arrives precisely when he means to"
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
64 reads
22 Comments
IofferMe
Poem Published
20th Jul 2024 9:47pm
20th Jul 2024 9:47pm
Yakhsaf Allah Bih Al’ard
A beautiful disaster or a horrendous beauty I know not which
Beguiling eyes, mischievous thighs, desirable lies
A hat trick, a party trick, a thrill and a tough pill
Triangular affair or possibly square
My part was two including you, that much is true
What else was consumed one can only assume
A detestable feast
An unsavory lunch
What a luck ton of fuck
A waddling duck askew
For everyone else what a view
As for me and you
We're threw
Beguiling eyes, mischievous thighs, desirable lies
A hat trick, a party trick, a thrill and a tough pill
Triangular affair or possibly square
My part was two including you, that much is true
What else was consumed one can only assume
A detestable feast
An unsavory lunch
What a luck ton of fuck
A waddling duck askew
For everyone else what a view
As for me and you
We're threw
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#marriage
#morality
#sadness
#shame
136 reads
0 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
17th Jul 2024 8:16pm
17th Jul 2024 8:16pm
Thoughts of Friendship
There is a fear here
it is palatable
every time I go near here
you draw back a little
have you forgotten how it felt
to be a friend and nothing else
to tell somebody your sorrows
your dreams of tomorrow
no one needs to get down on their knee
this friendship is not that you see
if you want romance go under someone else’s spell
I'm here for a different dance can’t you tell
Our time is numbered
from the day we were born
every second every number
we are closer to no more
...
it is palatable
every time I go near here
you draw back a little
have you forgotten how it felt
to be a friend and nothing else
to tell somebody your sorrows
your dreams of tomorrow
no one needs to get down on their knee
this friendship is not that you see
if you want romance go under someone else’s spell
I'm here for a different dance can’t you tell
Our time is numbered
from the day we were born
every second every number
we are closer to no more
...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
70 reads
16 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Jul 2024 7:33pm
17th Jul 2024 7:33pm
A Brief Message To You
I was thinking on writing something quite grand for my 600th poem. Instead, I have absolutely nothing on my mind. No stories, no poems, no lyrics.
One thing I will say is this...
A Gigantic Thank you to all of the poets that would read, comment and praise my poems and stories over & over again. You know who you are. I've always appreciated what you have said in the comments and through e-mail. You've all inspired me in one way or another. For those who I have collaborated with, I learned a lot from you. Everyone was considerate, patient and super talented! ...
One thing I will say is this...
A Gigantic Thank you to all of the poets that would read, comment and praise my poems and stories over & over again. You know who you are. I've always appreciated what you have said in the comments and through e-mail. You've all inspired me in one way or another. For those who I have collaborated with, I learned a lot from you. Everyone was considerate, patient and super talented! ...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#gratitude
#nonfiction
123 reads
10 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
14th Jul 2024 4:11am
14th Jul 2024 4:11am
The Jinn's
Welcome
Did you rub the lamp?
Sit back and feel the heat from the fire
Did you think you were going to get
a regular genie story?
You thought wrong
Water Jinn
Lay back and let the smoke consume you
Let it waft around and go through you
There was a wish that I heard
Not from your lips
No, that’s just absurd
There is a woman hidden in the lake
She would come out but not for my sake
I tried to coax, with sweet words of deception
She still will not come out to give me her affection
I am the water...
Did you rub the lamp?
Sit back and feel the heat from the fire
Did you think you were going to get
a regular genie story?
You thought wrong
Water Jinn
Lay back and let the smoke consume you
Let it waft around and go through you
There was a wish that I heard
Not from your lips
No, that’s just absurd
There is a woman hidden in the lake
She would come out but not for my sake
I tried to coax, with sweet words of deception
She still will not come out to give me her affection
I am the water...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#erotic
#sensual
54 reads
14 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
14th Jul 2024 1:01am
14th Jul 2024 1:01am
Ten Years of Posting to The Day
Ten years of words
Ten years of rain
Ten years spent absurd
Ten venting in vain
Ten minutes of joy reigning
Then ruled by another
Ten years of pens smothered
Ten years of keys covered in
Grease and tears
From my veins weeping
Ten years with very few brothers,
friendless
Years flew by,
at times seemingly endless
and still my word relentless
Picked up the passion to pen while cutting grass
where a mind does wander
I imagine some of the greatest lines
come from fishers and...
Ten years of rain
Ten years spent absurd
Ten venting in vain
Ten minutes of joy reigning
Then ruled by another
Ten years of pens smothered
Ten years of keys covered in
Grease and tears
From my veins weeping
Ten years with very few brothers,
friendless
Years flew by,
at times seemingly endless
and still my word relentless
Picked up the passion to pen while cutting grass
where a mind does wander
I imagine some of the greatest lines
come from fishers and...
#birthday
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry
#anniversary
305 reads
6 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
11th Jul 2024 5:59am
11th Jul 2024 5:59am
deepundergroundpoetry home
I'm very lonely today
I've been so disconnected
I alienated all my close ones
I feel like I'm out to sea with no way back
adrift in the void with no anchor
I miss you guys terribly
when did I stop making connections?
affectionate family I love you
my mind has been playing tricks on me
a since of apathy has confounded me
listless has seen my days fruitless
I'm coming home
DU my family I need you
I never forgot you
even while trapped in my silence
I wanted to reach out
but felt so many miles...
I've been so disconnected
I alienated all my close ones
I feel like I'm out to sea with no way back
adrift in the void with no anchor
I miss you guys terribly
when did I stop making connections?
affectionate family I love you
my mind has been playing tricks on me
a since of apathy has confounded me
listless has seen my days fruitless
I'm coming home
DU my family I need you
I never forgot you
even while trapped in my silence
I wanted to reach out
but felt so many miles...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#family
150 reads
4 Comments
The_Darkness_Insid
Poem Published
13th Jun 2024 5:44am
13th Jun 2024 5:44am
From Dark To Dim
I think its pretty clear from my writes
The dark subject matter
That I was in a really bad place when I found DU
I needed an outlet badly
I needed to know that I wasnt alone
I was wallowing in self loathing
Death seemed like the only relief possible
In a little under 2 months this place has become quite a boon to me
Seeing others show support and share how they relate has been so therapeutic
My blunt nature and direct approach got me into some trouble
I briefly walked away because I questioned if I belonged here ...
The dark subject matter
That I was in a really bad place when I found DU
I needed an outlet badly
I needed to know that I wasnt alone
I was wallowing in self loathing
Death seemed like the only relief possible
In a little under 2 months this place has become quite a boon to me
Seeing others show support and share how they relate has been so therapeutic
My blunt nature and direct approach got me into some trouble
I briefly walked away because I questioned if I belonged here ...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#gratitude
#respect #support
#respect #support
264 reads
14 Comments
PurrfectlyPoetic
Purr
Purr
Poem Published
9th Jun 2024 2:05am
9th Jun 2024 2:05am
This will make no sense...until it does
It begins...a pool of calm, reflections perfect,
stillness undisturbed with the sound of nothing
a steadiness that seems endless
with time that seems limitless
and yet...we know better
the pebble that's thrown as ripples shatter
perfection destroyed with sounds that scatter
forever instilling in quiet minds
peace forgotten your out of time
the emptiness of places that once were filled
eyes lost in worlds out of reach
mouths lost in the art of speech
making sense in words that have no reason
insanity that...
stillness undisturbed with the sound of nothing
a steadiness that seems endless
with time that seems limitless
and yet...we know better
the pebble that's thrown as ripples shatter
perfection destroyed with sounds that scatter
forever instilling in quiet minds
peace forgotten your out of time
the emptiness of places that once were filled
eyes lost in worlds out of reach
mouths lost in the art of speech
making sense in words that have no reason
insanity that...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#freedom
#frustration
#motivational
#passion
125 reads
3 Comments
Magdalena
Spartalena
Spartalena
Poem Published
1st Jun 2024 8:45pm
1st Jun 2024 8:45pm
Driftwood
almost girl
too outside
your stars are broken
your galaxies are sleeping
fading moonlight
transparent against the flowers
we burn our disasters in the fire
flickering. hesitant.
-unbetrayal her
she's a freedom angel
falling quietly, through music rain
into this nothing which we are
all bright and warm colours
too outside
your stars are broken
your galaxies are sleeping
fading moonlight
transparent against the flowers
we burn our disasters in the fire
flickering. hesitant.
-unbetrayal her
she's a freedom angel
falling quietly, through music rain
into this nothing which we are
all bright and warm colours
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
291 reads
7 Comments
Magdalena
Spartalena
Spartalena
Poem Published
23rd May 2024 00:50am
23rd May 2024 00:50am
Memoirs
I never saw you cloudy
but I felt it, like a restless sky
rumbling along my spine
your mood-scent rain, filled my cup
wheting my abandoned lips
velvet eyes closed to my breath
and the map from me to you
misplaced itself, when you stopped looking
there was something in the way
you silently left my senses
your name hung like a ghost
in the chambers of my heart
blowing an icy wind along its walls
and the steady beat echoed like...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
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4 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About Deep Underground Poetry Seeking Honest Critique
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