Poems About Deep Underground Poetry Seeking Honest Critique
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
oldmanG
Poem Published
23rd Oct 2024 5:37am
23rd Oct 2024 5:37am
Depth is Deep
Depth is deep
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
Depth is so deep
In the black water of my soul
Fathoming searching
Come up for air
Hold my breath
Deep in the black water of my soul
Bubbles reach the surface
My soul is underwater
Try to catch my breath
In the black water of my soul
Fight the demons
That hold me under
There is a kink in the
Black water of my soul
Forces pulling me under
In the black water of my soul
Spirit wants to break free
From the black water of my soul
...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#mirror
#spiritual #water
#spiritual #water
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oldmanG
Poem Published
21st Oct 2024 5:22am
21st Oct 2024 5:22am
Feeling It
Your feeling it
Let it flow
Don’t think about it
Let it go
Keep it simple and true
Don’t complicate it
Or pick at scabs
Let the healing begin on the tip of my pen
I’m feeling it it feels so good
Like my soul has taken a shower
My armpit smells like basketball
But my iron is hot
Like a blacksmith
Pounding em out
Soul on metal feels real good
Every nerve dances and pulsates
Tingles down my legs
I can’t carry a tune
But I can create one
Sing it...
Let it flow
Don’t think about it
Let it go
Keep it simple and true
Don’t complicate it
Or pick at scabs
Let the healing begin on the tip of my pen
I’m feeling it it feels so good
Like my soul has taken a shower
My armpit smells like basketball
But my iron is hot
Like a blacksmith
Pounding em out
Soul on metal feels real good
Every nerve dances and pulsates
Tingles down my legs
I can’t carry a tune
But I can create one
Sing it...
#confessional
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#LifeAsAWriter #music
#LifeAsAWriter #music
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OyateInyanNajin
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 11:34pm
16th Oct 2024 11:34pm
COUNTERWEIGHT OFF THE TAIL ME BOYS (Fri., 10-11-2024; Palm Springs, California)
just counterweight
off
the tail
me boys
just counterweight
off
the tail
or in other
words
to put it
more simply
just counterweight
off
the tail
me boys
counterweight
off
the
t
a
i
l
for i m afraid
there may not be
much
left of me
afterwards
here tonight
beyond
the resonant echo s
widely spreading...
off
the tail
me boys
just counterweight
off
the tail
or in other
words
to put it
more simply
just counterweight
off
the tail
me boys
counterweight
off
the
t
a
i
l
for i m afraid
there may not be
much
left of me
afterwards
here tonight
beyond
the resonant echo s
widely spreading...
#courage
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#heroic
#WritersBlock
#WritingPoetry
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OyateInyanNajin
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 1:23am
16th Oct 2024 1:23am
MY FEEBLE PEN'S UNCERTAIN, ATTEMPTED RETURN (5:25pm, 10-7-2024; at KOFFI North, Palm Springs, California)
pausing here
this afternoon
with pen
and paper
in hand again
in hopes
of tapping
back into
my innate
creative muse s
too long neglected
too long distracted
ever mysterious
inner realms
to try retuning
back into
channeling
and releasing
whatever spontaneously arisen
free flow purge
of perceptive
conscious
and subconscious
self expression
might
to my surprise
possibly arise
from...
this afternoon
with pen
and paper
in hand again
in hopes
of tapping
back into
my innate
creative muse s
too long neglected
too long distracted
ever mysterious
inner realms
to try retuning
back into
channeling
and releasing
whatever spontaneously arisen
free flow purge
of perceptive
conscious
and subconscious
self expression
might
to my surprise
possibly arise
from...
#aging
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#LifeCycle
#nostalgia
#WritersBlock
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0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
13th Oct 2024 5:16am
13th Oct 2024 5:16am
Around the Corner
Inspiration is around the corner
Before you know it’s upon you
Lifts your spirit up and
Digs into your creativity
Could be an old song you heard on the radio
A line that resonates within you
So you create something new from something old
You can find your spirit in the weirdest places
Could come onto you at the supermarket
Creative spirits live in us
Between your ears or in your heart
You can find something anywhere anytime anyhow
Perk your ears up to the life that swirls around you ...
Before you know it’s upon you
Lifts your spirit up and
Digs into your creativity
Could be an old song you heard on the radio
A line that resonates within you
So you create something new from something old
You can find your spirit in the weirdest places
Could come onto you at the supermarket
Creative spirits live in us
Between your ears or in your heart
You can find something anywhere anytime anyhow
Perk your ears up to the life that swirls around you ...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#inspirational
#music #WritingPoetry
#music #WritingPoetry
79 reads
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oldmanG
Poem Published
2nd Oct 2024 1:34pm
2nd Oct 2024 1:34pm
Poetry Before Beat
Poetry before beat
Two things like Peanut butter n Jelly
Words so soulful
Rhythm and paper
Who do you want to be
Seems so simple
Rock star or at a Slam session
Banging on bongos
Or delivering a sermon
Butterfly on the surface
Of a train of rhythm
Dancing above
Below the deep wave
Downpicking like Hetfield
Spittin like Dylan
Spit the lyric
Lay down line
Poetry in commotion
Can’t find the beat
Coffee in the morning
Read the news
Thoughts forming ...
Two things like Peanut butter n Jelly
Words so soulful
Rhythm and paper
Who do you want to be
Seems so simple
Rock star or at a Slam session
Banging on bongos
Or delivering a sermon
Butterfly on the surface
Of a train of rhythm
Dancing above
Below the deep wave
Downpicking like Hetfield
Spittin like Dylan
Spit the lyric
Lay down line
Poetry in commotion
Can’t find the beat
Coffee in the morning
Read the news
Thoughts forming ...
#confessional
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#emotional #music
#emotional #music
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
12th Sep 2024 10:40am
12th Sep 2024 10:40am
Shut the f**k up and write
Art?
Fuck art!!
Fuck me, Fuck You!
Fuck all of it!
Just fucking do it!!!!
Whatever it is
However it turns out is the way it is
Poetry!??
Fuck poetry!!
Fuck poets, fuck poems!
Most poets are pretentious stupid assholes that think they know everything and everyone
Quite a few I had the honor to meet here on this site
You don't have the key or knowledge to unlock anything
Many of you know so much about nothing at all
Did you truly read what you just wrote
You sound pathetic
The use of...
Fuck art!!
Fuck me, Fuck You!
Fuck all of it!
Just fucking do it!!!!
Whatever it is
However it turns out is the way it is
Poetry!??
Fuck poetry!!
Fuck poets, fuck poems!
Most poets are pretentious stupid assholes that think they know everything and everyone
Quite a few I had the honor to meet here on this site
You don't have the key or knowledge to unlock anything
Many of you know so much about nothing at all
Did you truly read what you just wrote
You sound pathetic
The use of...
#anger
#art
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#frustration
#WritingPoetry
165 reads
14 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
7th Sep 2024 9:08pm
7th Sep 2024 9:08pm
I didn't do it
I'm gonna kill this woman
My friends are going to kill her baby
The baby looks like a profile face I've seen on this website
They can't do it
I look down at the baby, who's in a pile of books
The baby is bleeding out of it's head
When I look back I see the baby's head rolling down a bowling alley
It's a split
I bury the body near the restroom
I turn around
The police have arrived
They received a short story written by someone here, saying I was the murderer
I know I will find them and destroy them
My friends are going to kill her baby
The baby looks like a profile face I've seen on this website
They can't do it
I look down at the baby, who's in a pile of books
The baby is bleeding out of it's head
When I look back I see the baby's head rolling down a bowling alley
It's a split
I bury the body near the restroom
I turn around
The police have arrived
They received a short story written by someone here, saying I was the murderer
I know I will find them and destroy them
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#fiction
#nightmares
93 reads
6 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
27th Aug 2024 2:46pm
27th Aug 2024 2:46pm
deepundergroundpoetry
dreadful feeling I'm in a hateful mood
damn the day
I'm breaking out I can swim on the winds
who knows where I'll land
desiring a brutal man
a sharp-cutting intellect to spar with
with a tongue to match
a sardonic wit
with sarcastic undertones
nobody wants my kindness
so I'll be honest
I'm tired of internalizing everything
and blaming myself
I don't gossip with anyone
so I'm out of the loop
I like to write and I come here for sanctuary
sometimes I'm pure madness
and the poets probably...
damn the day
I'm breaking out I can swim on the winds
who knows where I'll land
desiring a brutal man
a sharp-cutting intellect to spar with
with a tongue to match
a sardonic wit
with sarcastic undertones
nobody wants my kindness
so I'll be honest
I'm tired of internalizing everything
and blaming myself
I don't gossip with anyone
so I'm out of the loop
I like to write and I come here for sanctuary
sometimes I'm pure madness
and the poets probably...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#love
168 reads
12 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
26th Aug 2024 2:20am
26th Aug 2024 2:20am
poetry
erase the confounded artistry
with my mad genius and I'd be nothing
because all creative beings are genius
to take the crazy away you lose your edge
relax the anxiety and something goes missing
to be driven by a force you don't understand
it's an artist fire breathing down your back
even when you lie down to sleep you keep thinking
how to invent the passages to clear your head
verses of deliverance a ticket to destinations unexplored
dreaming in starlight kissing the cosmos
open the soul and find your meaning ...
with my mad genius and I'd be nothing
because all creative beings are genius
to take the crazy away you lose your edge
relax the anxiety and something goes missing
to be driven by a force you don't understand
it's an artist fire breathing down your back
even when you lie down to sleep you keep thinking
how to invent the passages to clear your head
verses of deliverance a ticket to destinations unexplored
dreaming in starlight kissing the cosmos
open the soul and find your meaning ...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
93 reads
3 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
25th Aug 2024 7:18pm
25th Aug 2024 7:18pm
DUP Mafia Romance part 3
Frank
I need to get one of my best shooters on this case, and the only person who comes to mind is Big Red.
She's done some hits for me in the past. I need to remove some of these players from the roster.
I pulled out my cell phone and dialed her number. She answered on the 1st ring.
“Frank.” She said in a whisper, letting me know she's on a job right now and her sites are on her kill shot.
“Red I need you to come here as soon as possible.”
She did not utter one word, but I heard the audible sound of swisssshhhh from a...
I need to get one of my best shooters on this case, and the only person who comes to mind is Big Red.
She's done some hits for me in the past. I need to remove some of these players from the roster.
I pulled out my cell phone and dialed her number. She answered on the 1st ring.
“Frank.” She said in a whisper, letting me know she's on a job right now and her sites are on her kill shot.
“Red I need you to come here as soon as possible.”
She did not utter one word, but I heard the audible sound of swisssshhhh from a...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#dirty
#sex
58 reads
16 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
25th Aug 2024 3:00pm
25th Aug 2024 3:00pm
The Mafia Romance DUP Men
In being fare I needed you to see the Mafia Men characters. lol
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#funny
56 reads
11 Comments
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