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The Bets of Seagulls
The ultraviolet spectrum bewitched
my perception supernatural,
allowing me to evade the ethereal
that always followed, wide eyes warning.
Then I was running, eternal galaxies
slipping away behind and in front
of my foreseen footsteps.
Thundering waves invaded the shore,
frothing bloodless rage at the mouth.
Seagulls circled darkening skies,
calling out their bets (Will she jump?).
'Negative thoughts' was played by Suicidal
upon a cerebral broken record.
Rhythmic feet pounded trodden earth,
arms flung open daringly wide;
storms of denied truth struck with fact,
lightning javelins slicing me in two.
Defying gravitational expectations,
desperation lifted my body to
foreign heights.
The ledge came as a blessing unexpected.
I crumpled, mouth gaping wide for
words unsaid and actions unfinished.
The wind swallowing my screams.
For the 'One Memory' competition.
"Write a poem or short prose on any
vivid memory you have."
my perception supernatural,
allowing me to evade the ethereal
that always followed, wide eyes warning.
Then I was running, eternal galaxies
slipping away behind and in front
of my foreseen footsteps.
Thundering waves invaded the shore,
frothing bloodless rage at the mouth.
Seagulls circled darkening skies,
calling out their bets (Will she jump?).
'Negative thoughts' was played by Suicidal
upon a cerebral broken record.
Rhythmic feet pounded trodden earth,
arms flung open daringly wide;
storms of denied truth struck with fact,
lightning javelins slicing me in two.
Defying gravitational expectations,
desperation lifted my body to
foreign heights.
The ledge came as a blessing unexpected.
I crumpled, mouth gaping wide for
words unsaid and actions unfinished.
The wind swallowing my screams.
For the 'One Memory' competition.
"Write a poem or short prose on any
vivid memory you have."
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Re: The Bets of Seagulls
26th Mar 2013 9:28pm
An excellent plunge Scribbler!!!
the closing line was perfection!!!
parts made me think of "how will I laugh tomorrow"
Good luck in the comp!!!
the closing line was perfection!!!
parts made me think of "how will I laugh tomorrow"
Good luck in the comp!!!
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26th Mar 2013 9:38pm
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27th Mar 2013 6:02am
Re: The Bets of Seagulls
27th Mar 2013 00:12am
Beautiful as always scribbs ^_^
A natural story teller you are, but one thing though..
'The ultraviolet spectrum bewitched
my perception supernatural'
I don't quite understand this..
Care to elaborate?
A natural story teller you are, but one thing though..
'The ultraviolet spectrum bewitched
my perception supernatural'
I don't quite understand this..
Care to elaborate?
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re: Re: The Bets of Seagulls
Thank you :)
The ultraviolet spectrum is
said to be good for 'ghost
hunting', and if you look
to the line after that I
relate back to it with
'ethereal'.
The ultraviolet spectrum is
said to be good for 'ghost
hunting', and if you look
to the line after that I
relate back to it with
'ethereal'.
Re: The Bets of Seagulls
Anonymous
27th Mar 2013 4:31am
Loved the read! That stunning last line & this, in particular:
Seagulls circled darkening skies,
calling out their bets (Will she jump?).
Excellent work, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
Seagulls circled darkening skies,
calling out their bets (Will she jump?).
Excellent work, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
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Re: The Bets of Seagulls
27th Mar 2013 3:39pm
Captivating read, Scribbler12! Amazing Ink!
You are indeed one of my favorite poets on here.
Love the diversity in your pen! :) xo
You are indeed one of my favorite poets on here.
Love the diversity in your pen! :) xo
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27th Mar 2013 3:47pm
Re: The Bets of Seagulls
Anonymous
27th Mar 2013 7:52pm
This is just so visual, the sights and sounds are very vivid and paint the picture so well!
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Re: The Bets of Seagulls
29th Mar 2013 8:50am
This was vivid in it's imagery you brought me to the edge with you..brilliant Scribbler..peace Crim
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29th Mar 2013 8:52am
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Re: The Bets of Seagulls
Anonymous
31st Mar 2013 11:03pm
grasping on the ledge with this write and I like the little twist in relation to the title. Intense!!!! And awesome:)
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1st Apr 2013 7:44am
Re: The Bets of Seagulls
1st Apr 2013 7:23pm
The entire poem is very good. The ending is very powerful with emotional impact.
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Re: The Bets of Seagulls
2nd Apr 2013 8:33pm
I love this. Every line is powerful.
With your permission, I'd like to write a song using my favorite line from this poem- "cerebral broken record"
With your permission, I'd like to write a song using my favorite line from this poem- "cerebral broken record"
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2nd Apr 2013 9:07pm