"Raped"

I wrote this when I was 14. Back then I thought it was ok but now that I look at it.... Well tell me what you think. In my opinion it sucks. But it's your opinion that counts.

It's quite simple but it still packs a punch. I adore the powerful simplicity of it, good job, as usual. :D

Thank You :)

i agree with jade, it's a simple poem but its really good. you have good rhyming and you create a feeling of loss and misery through the way you have structured and worded your piece. a powerful and enjoyable read.
very good work, very good poem.
:)
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Thank you :)