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My pleasure toy and the Big Boy
Are you sticky baby
lying in my gush?
do you smell of
my steamy lust?
Lick me clean
I so demand
you will do
as I command
Can you taste
his salty cream?
Did you hear him
make me scream?
I like it when
you want to look
At this massive
thing I suck
Next time
I will reward my boy
For being my
little pleasure toy
I may let you
play a while
just to see
My big boy smile
lying in my gush?
do you smell of
my steamy lust?
Lick me clean
I so demand
you will do
as I command
Can you taste
his salty cream?
Did you hear him
make me scream?
I like it when
you want to look
At this massive
thing I suck
Next time
I will reward my boy
For being my
little pleasure toy
I may let you
play a while
just to see
My big boy smile
Published 22nd Mar 2013
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22nd Mar 2013 8:13pm
"Can you taste
his salty cream?
Did you hear him
make me scream?"
who is the 'you' ? Reference goes to whom ?
his salty cream?
Did you hear him
make me scream?"
who is the 'you' ? Reference goes to whom ?
22nd Mar 2013 10:55pm
Thank you for reading..you will see the answers below in the readers comments ;)
23rd Mar 2013 6:01pm
23rd Mar 2013 8:22pm
That's fine..i am pleased to get comments - constructive or not. Glad you liked it :)
22nd Mar 2013 9:06pm
I really loved this Summergirl! I got heavy vibes of dominance reading this and your simple descriptions instill vivid images!
I think there are three people here: you, the pleasure toy and the big boy. After reading a couple times, I think this poem could be about cuckholding or otherwise having one lover cleaning up what another lover left in you. It dawned on me in the second and third stanzas, and in the fourth I envisioned your dominated one (the pleasure toy) watching you sucking (the big boy's) massive dick. Perhaps the pleasure toy has a small one?
Anyways, hot poem!
I think there are three people here: you, the pleasure toy and the big boy. After reading a couple times, I think this poem could be about cuckholding or otherwise having one lover cleaning up what another lover left in you. It dawned on me in the second and third stanzas, and in the fourth I envisioned your dominated one (the pleasure toy) watching you sucking (the big boy's) massive dick. Perhaps the pleasure toy has a small one?
Anyways, hot poem!
22nd Mar 2013 10:54pm
23rd Mar 2013 5:54am
Awesome! Looking forward to more of your works, I'm loving your poems so far!
11th Apr 2013 1:54pm
I think I have found my new fave poet. Your words seem to be well thought out. You draw the reader in and deliver on content. Well done!
11th Apr 2013 2:31pm
Thank you so much Lovegood. I am honored indeed. I also write as Geminisub. You may want to take a look. :)
20th Apr 2013 9:18pm
