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Flight
Instruction given in soft even tones
Encouragement while holding on
Releasing was hard for them both
When the hand slowly fell away
There was no surprise of their pride
The smile on the father’s face
The laughter of the child
As she took flight and road away
It was beautiful to behold
Encouragement while holding on
Releasing was hard for them both
When the hand slowly fell away
There was no surprise of their pride
The smile on the father’s face
The laughter of the child
As she took flight and road away
It was beautiful to behold
Published 17th Mar 2013
| Edited 18th Mar 2013
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17th Mar 2013 4:55am
WOW beautiful memories brought back to me with this, went through it four times....written perfectly....thank you.....cassie
17th Mar 2013 9:17pm
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17th Mar 2013 10:02am
Like a metaphor for life itself..very clever and creative, love it :-)
much love
much love
17th Mar 2013 9:19pm
Just the way I wanted,
thanks for that Miki
I think the next to last stanza should have been left off, but I'm so glad you got it and enjoyed it.
Much love
G
thanks for that Miki
I think the next to last stanza should have been left off, but I'm so glad you got it and enjoyed it.
Much love
G
17th Mar 2013 10:40am
Yes. But at times they are missed...the flown ones. Glynis as usual your expressions are beautiful.
17th Mar 2013 9:21pm
[{Blushing]}
Thank you Grace, it means so much
Yes, they fly away, but sometimes, they fly back to us.
Much Love
G
Thank you Grace, it means so much
Yes, they fly away, but sometimes, they fly back to us.
Much Love
G
17th Mar 2013 5:46pm
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Luv'd everything except the "training wheels" verse. To me it diluted all what came before. Extracting much of the cleverness
you had achieved in this piece. Least for me, the wheels kinda popped the balloon.
: )
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Luv'd everything except the "training wheels" verse. To me it diluted all what came before. Extracting much of the cleverness
you had achieved in this piece. Least for me, the wheels kinda popped the balloon.
: )
17th Mar 2013 9:24pm
See, I knew it!
kriticool, you always see what needs to make things better.
Man! I was almost there
Thanks my friend
Much love
G
kriticool, you always see what needs to make things better.
Man! I was almost there
Thanks my friend
Much love
G
18th Mar 2013 1:34am
Down memory lane for sure. I remember leaving my skin on the sidewalk a few times. Lol! Cool write! :)
18th Mar 2013 3:22am
