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My Problem, Your Loss
You want to know what my problem is
and why you hear my pain.
Why I sit here crying
holding in all this retched shame.
It's that I am the only one giving
while you are the only one living
Your there, I'm here
the answers you are sending
is all so clear
So tell me why does my heart still grieve
for what I feel will never be
But mark my words well
when I'm done, I'm done
and only then will you fail
and what we had
will only be a tale
Because my love is INTENSE
Full of smiles
full of sexual content
Brought together with a family
and a home
A place full of love
to sit on a throne
Of respect and loyalty
that no man in my life
has ever known
I am no prize
but what I have inside
is what men dream of
to keep them satisfied
in their bed and in their heart
because I tell you what baby
once we are done
there is no restart.
and why you hear my pain.
Why I sit here crying
holding in all this retched shame.
It's that I am the only one giving
while you are the only one living
Your there, I'm here
the answers you are sending
is all so clear
So tell me why does my heart still grieve
for what I feel will never be
But mark my words well
when I'm done, I'm done
and only then will you fail
and what we had
will only be a tale
Because my love is INTENSE
Full of smiles
full of sexual content
Brought together with a family
and a home
A place full of love
to sit on a throne
Of respect and loyalty
that no man in my life
has ever known
I am no prize
but what I have inside
is what men dream of
to keep them satisfied
in their bed and in their heart
because I tell you what baby
once we are done
there is no restart.
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Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 3:40am
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16th Mar 2013 4:33am
Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 3:41am
You should be fought for. I wish I didn't relate to the wrong side of this poem but I was too late and lost what I should have fought for.
Great poem, immediately strikes a chord with me.
Great poem, immediately strikes a chord with me.
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re: Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 4:37am
I think the best thing that comes from us biggest regrets, is that we learn from them. Some of us will shut down and not give anyone else that part of us. But to live, we have to keep moving forward. At one time, I would't have thought I would of ever felt this pain from the one I love. But it happens, and I have yet to see how this love will go yet. Thank you again ♥
Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 4:29am
You don't give yourself enough credit, I would say you are quite a prize actually, and definitely his loss, great write, enjoyed reading it, stick to your guns....Cassie
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re: Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 4:40am
Thank you very much ♥ I am learning more of who I am through this pain. And I am proud that where ever it goes, someone will take what I have to offer and cherish me as I shall them. Below is a link to the most awesome love song I have ever heard. His words brings out a part of my soul that breathes love.
Josh Groban - Per te
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=Cq4cGRJleh8
Josh Groban - Per te
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_embedded&v=Cq4cGRJleh8
Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 6:58am
Ooooh wee! I could hear the strong black woman coming out in you in that one. It almost had a twang! LOL.
You and I have discussed things. You know in you heart what you need to do for You and the Children. Remember the Abyss? Get that shovel Babe and be strong and persevere because sometimes in life, we have no choice but to drive on. Go on with your badass self and be the strong woman that I know you are.
Take no prisoners! Survivors will be shot again!
You and I have discussed things. You know in you heart what you need to do for You and the Children. Remember the Abyss? Get that shovel Babe and be strong and persevere because sometimes in life, we have no choice but to drive on. Go on with your badass self and be the strong woman that I know you are.
Take no prisoners! Survivors will be shot again!
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re: Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 2:12pm
I know and Thank you :) My shovel is temporarily out of order, because my heart has it hidden. Can I borrow yours?? Ya, yea, I know, I have to do the shoveling or it will never be completely buried. But isn't there time to grieve to dream to hope. To still be loyal and strive for what once was seen?
This is the problem with having a loyal heart that holds on till the bitter end.
The shame is, the only way has always been
me the one left with my heart still beating,
while the other walks away,
as if I was never a soul worth seeing.
But I do take pride,
there everyone who has left, has cried
to have my love again
But once broken
Reopening is always denied.
That came out of no where but oh well :) Thanks as always you and I hope you see what you have to give as well!!
This is the problem with having a loyal heart that holds on till the bitter end.
The shame is, the only way has always been
me the one left with my heart still beating,
while the other walks away,
as if I was never a soul worth seeing.
But I do take pride,
there everyone who has left, has cried
to have my love again
But once broken
Reopening is always denied.
That came out of no where but oh well :) Thanks as always you and I hope you see what you have to give as well!!
re: re: Re: My Problem, Your Loss
16th Mar 2013 4:26pm
I'm an old infantryman. We dig rather well but we don't tend to fill the foxholes up that much. However my entrenching tool is your entrenching tool.
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16th Mar 2013 5:14pm
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Re: My Problem, Your Loss
23rd Mar 2013 00:20am
What I find intriguing about the write is it not only seems to give an account of the personal but can also be applied to lovers in general.
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re: Re: My Problem, Your Loss
23rd Mar 2013 1:52am
Good sight of my poem. I really do love knowing how people see them. It gives me a look into my own work through another's eyes. Thank you for your words :)