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live old die young
step from outside in
slide off shoes and feel the floor from under
soles, feet know the path to go
mind stuck a step behind
credit to the lasting skin whitch holds within
fire in a mental over-used in time
body stagnent brain developed for a day of echos
life cycle, take a spek of slow among a face of frekles
slide off shoes and feel the floor from under
soles, feet know the path to go
mind stuck a step behind
credit to the lasting skin whitch holds within
fire in a mental over-used in time
body stagnent brain developed for a day of echos
life cycle, take a spek of slow among a face of frekles
Published 16th Sep 2010
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30th Oct 2011 6:20pm
I really liked this
although I'd hate to end up with my:
"body stagnent brain developed for a day of echos"
although I'd hate to end up with my:
"body stagnent brain developed for a day of echos"
13th Nov 2011 6:41pm
typo 'whitch' replace it with 'which'
i like the carpe diem theme of this poem
i like the carpe diem theme of this poem
