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For the sake of writing after a nightmare
Projecting my mistakes,
Exchanging each one
Like scrolling slides
Upon an others white washed walls,
Now I must question
If I’m the damaged one
Or the one inflicting harm
The entire time after all?
Loose skin
And it’s baby teeth,
Carless lips
Their youth and secrets
That I’ve failed to keep.
Innocence
And it’s slippery slope
Between times divide
On one side truth
The other
hope.
Old stories
Found in dusty boxes
Abandoned in aged
And vacant homes,
Are these tales
Mine,
theirs,
Or just the ones I inherit as my own?
“Come closer”
I say
“And feel what it’s like to be me.
Share some of your warmth
And I’ll show you what it means to be free.”
Exchanging each one
Like scrolling slides
Upon an others white washed walls,
Now I must question
If I’m the damaged one
Or the one inflicting harm
The entire time after all?
Loose skin
And it’s baby teeth,
Carless lips
Their youth and secrets
That I’ve failed to keep.
Innocence
And it’s slippery slope
Between times divide
On one side truth
The other
hope.
Old stories
Found in dusty boxes
Abandoned in aged
And vacant homes,
Are these tales
Mine,
theirs,
Or just the ones I inherit as my own?
“Come closer”
I say
“And feel what it’s like to be me.
Share some of your warmth
And I’ll show you what it means to be free.”
Published 12th Mar 2013
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12th Mar 2013 12:08pm
this poem is obscenely vague, written at 6 am after a ominous nightmare i experienced this morning.
it really doesn't follow any substantiated cohesive meaning, but rather more or less just a haze of thoughts that this dream left lingering in my mind when I awoke.
I would however like to breathe a little meaning into the last stanza of the poem, as i couldn't find a way to make it evoke the exact sentiment that is intended.
it's kind of like '"come into my parlor" says the spider to the fly.' When the speaker is asking the individual to "come closer" it's supposed to indicate luring the individual into some sort of trap where they steal the warmth from them. The 'spider' so to speak is viewed as this beautiful and intricate thing that knows what it's like to be free, when really the closest the speaker has every gotten was by stealing it from others (getting a taste of freedom so to speak), which is enforced by the "old stories" portion of this poem. the rest is up for interpretation, but i just wanted to clarify this section of the poem as I just cant find the means to tweak it at this given moment, but would much like to receive feed back on this initial skeleton.
it really doesn't follow any substantiated cohesive meaning, but rather more or less just a haze of thoughts that this dream left lingering in my mind when I awoke.
I would however like to breathe a little meaning into the last stanza of the poem, as i couldn't find a way to make it evoke the exact sentiment that is intended.
it's kind of like '"come into my parlor" says the spider to the fly.' When the speaker is asking the individual to "come closer" it's supposed to indicate luring the individual into some sort of trap where they steal the warmth from them. The 'spider' so to speak is viewed as this beautiful and intricate thing that knows what it's like to be free, when really the closest the speaker has every gotten was by stealing it from others (getting a taste of freedom so to speak), which is enforced by the "old stories" portion of this poem. the rest is up for interpretation, but i just wanted to clarify this section of the poem as I just cant find the means to tweak it at this given moment, but would much like to receive feed back on this initial skeleton.
12th Mar 2013 12:12pm
also, "show you what it means to be free"
is meant to show that the speaker means to define their interpretation of freedom as something that is not recognized until it is taken away, which in the instance of this poem is the loss of niavety, which over time, is a result of making poor descions on "innocence slippery slope"
is meant to show that the speaker means to define their interpretation of freedom as something that is not recognized until it is taken away, which in the instance of this poem is the loss of niavety, which over time, is a result of making poor descions on "innocence slippery slope"
12th Mar 2013 2:42pm
