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Tingle
A simple touch
Gets my heart racing
A tug of my hair
My breath starts pacing
The natural feel
When i'm left with you
Is magic on it's own
It's simply what you do
A nibble here
And a tease there
Only what your touch sends
A feeling so rare
But now the sheets are wet
And we are both panting for air
Art has been painted on your bed
An image so fair
Gets my heart racing
A tug of my hair
My breath starts pacing
The natural feel
When i'm left with you
Is magic on it's own
It's simply what you do
A nibble here
And a tease there
Only what your touch sends
A feeling so rare
But now the sheets are wet
And we are both panting for air
Art has been painted on your bed
An image so fair
Published 6th Mar 2013
| Edited 8th Mar 2013
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6th Mar 2013 10:53pm
Watch your spelling of racing/pacing. Apart from that it's not bad, I liked the quick tempo and rhyme.
6th Mar 2013 10:56pm
7th Mar 2013 2:36am
7th Mar 2013 10:27am
I like the rhythmn and impetus of the short lines. It builds up beautifully-but rather fades in the last six lines or so.
9th Mar 2013 4:25am
5th Dec 2023 6:03am
Favourite lines:
The natural feel
When i'm left with you
Is magic on it's own
Only what your touch sends
A feeling so rare
But now the sheets are wet
And we are both panting for air
Art has been painted on your bed
An image so fair
The natural feel
When i'm left with you
Is magic on it's own
Only what your touch sends
A feeling so rare
But now the sheets are wet
And we are both panting for air
Art has been painted on your bed
An image so fair
