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Le Résistance
(Sudden stop in heartbeat,
A guilty, pleasant surprise of a kiss
in the dark -
our chemistry would have blown up the rocketship
and taken us to the stars anyway.)
But no, my Love.
I never can remember his mischievous grin
(his nose lightly brushing my cheek),
or the subtle, titillating scent of his cologne.
(drawing me closer, closer)
I hardly felt the searing heat of his hand sliding up my thigh.
I haven't thought twice about his eyes
desperately drawn to my lips, and it never
crosses my mind enough for me to wonder
what might have happened if
we had been alone.
A guilty, pleasant surprise of a kiss
in the dark -
our chemistry would have blown up the rocketship
and taken us to the stars anyway.)
But no, my Love.
I never can remember his mischievous grin
(his nose lightly brushing my cheek),
or the subtle, titillating scent of his cologne.
(drawing me closer, closer)
I hardly felt the searing heat of his hand sliding up my thigh.
I haven't thought twice about his eyes
desperately drawn to my lips, and it never
crosses my mind enough for me to wonder
what might have happened if
we had been alone.
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ooh la la
Anonymous
9th Sep 2010 4:47pm
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re: oh wow!
10th Sep 2010 2:09pm
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Anonymous
12th Sep 2010 6:46pm
Subtly erotic piece, moving and intense. The first stanza is brilliant. The rocket metaphor was a particular high point. Oh, and the title was very clever.
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re: Comment
14th Sep 2010 9:58am
you are so kind, Jack. that means a lot coming from such a talented writer. [:
wow
23rd Sep 2010 5:33pm
re: wow
24th Sep 2010 2:56pm
Thank you; I'm glad it came across successfully! I wasn't sure if it was too subtle. Stop in any time. [:
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6th Oct 2010 5:58pm
where have you been hiding all these time you little poetic wonderer?
this piece is beyond amazement!
this piece is beyond amazement!
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my god!
27th Dec 2010 7:41pm
My heart is pounding! I have a certain sweetling just like this haunting my mind as of late....
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re: my god!
30th Dec 2010 9:08pm
it's torture, isn't it?? *sigh* just almost, then comes the self control...
LA
24th Jan 2011 10:26pm
Oh, Jestalessa, it's wonderful. you know exactly the style I like. It's brutal, honest, fresh and real. Thoroughly enjoyed it, it was easy throughout.
LA
LA
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re: LA
27th Jan 2011 10:22pm
and I didn't respond to your comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I guess I kind of msg-comment-responded... we talked about it anyway. [:
Clever and racey
Anonymous
27th Jan 2011 10:14pm
I shied away from using the word sexy..because everyone else says that - but I guess I'll join the chorus. This is sexy!
Your poem has created an atmosphere in my heart and mind. It takes me to the streets of Paris and dusk...long coats...spies....secrets....black and white movies....
This one gives me the belief again, that romance may actually exist.
Steven
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Your poem has created an atmosphere in my heart and mind. It takes me to the streets of Paris and dusk...long coats...spies....secrets....black and white movies....
This one gives me the belief again, that romance may actually exist.
Steven
I like
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re: Clever and racey
27th Jan 2011 10:19pm
well! that is a most eloquent and beautiful compliment! you've literally made my jaw drop, and i wish i could take it more gracefully than that. thank you. so much. [:
re: re: Clever and racey
Anonymous
27th Jan 2011 10:22pm
Not so sure that me and eloquent fit together particularly well..lol.
Its a lovely piece of work - and I'm working my way through your back catalogue.
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re: re: re: Clever and racey
27th Jan 2011 10:26pm
i suppose i should say "beautifully worded", and i know you didn't just say you and eloquent don't fit together...i've read you, sir, you can't fool me.
re: re: re: re: Clever and racey
Anonymous
27th Jan 2011 10:30pm
I like the idea of being down here in this long thread of comments, so I'll use the opportunity to pay you a compliment by saying that your writing skill stands out. Have you studied literature or been published? One for a pm I guess...
By the way, me and eloquent go way back, but she ditched me when I started getting precious on her and got myself a taste of delusion. I think she's a stuck up tart nowadays to be honest.
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re: re: re: re: re: Clever and racey
14th Feb 2011 3:56pm
worth the twisted arm
19th Apr 2012 5:45am
anytime. Oh how i wish my infidelity could sound this classy.( maybe I'll grant you "near" infidelity... but since you've given this much to your pen- finding him alone would probably be a cool down)
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re: worth the twisted arm
19th Apr 2012 8:20am