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Sacrifice
Clouds cruising impassive wrap
waxen arms around us motherly.
Eavesdropping with avid ears,
Agent Cloud98 relays important
information from humanity to
the atmosphere control agency.
Secrets are guarded merciless.
United minds catapult at 200mph,
combined we weave tangles of
hypotheses into Celtic knots.
Seeking for tell-tell traces
of spiritual fulfillment.
The final conclusion stabs
a steady violet finger
to sacrifice.
Endowing my life to western winds,
my other gave his to the eastern.
Entwined around each other,
we whistle through the tree's
locating energy unexplored.
Our ghosts peer
down from above,
seated on gleaming
surfaces of the moon.
Spirits fulfilled
ceaselessly.
waxen arms around us motherly.
Eavesdropping with avid ears,
Agent Cloud98 relays important
information from humanity to
the atmosphere control agency.
Secrets are guarded merciless.
United minds catapult at 200mph,
combined we weave tangles of
hypotheses into Celtic knots.
Seeking for tell-tell traces
of spiritual fulfillment.
The final conclusion stabs
a steady violet finger
to sacrifice.
Endowing my life to western winds,
my other gave his to the eastern.
Entwined around each other,
we whistle through the tree's
locating energy unexplored.
Our ghosts peer
down from above,
seated on gleaming
surfaces of the moon.
Spirits fulfilled
ceaselessly.
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Re: Sacrifice
4th Mar 2013 11:17pm
Sweet!!
this is my kind of poem!
its opened ended and could lead to a series of poems
well done as always Scribbler :)
this is my kind of poem!
its opened ended and could lead to a series of poems
well done as always Scribbler :)
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re: Re: Sacrifice
5th Mar 2013 5:51am
Re: Sacrifice
4th Mar 2013 11:52pm
"United minds catapult at 200mph,
combined we weave tangles of
hypotheses into Celtic knots.
Seeking for tell-tell traces
of spiritual fulfillment."<--My goodness, that was deep and creative!
This entire poem reeks of brilliancy! :)))
combined we weave tangles of
hypotheses into Celtic knots.
Seeking for tell-tell traces
of spiritual fulfillment."<--My goodness, that was deep and creative!
This entire poem reeks of brilliancy! :)))
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Anonymous
5th Mar 2013 00:19am
Storytelling at its best in this masterful write! Loved the read from start to its wonderful finish. I like these lines, in particular:
"The final conclusion stabs
a steady violet finger
to sacrifice."
Wonderful work, as always, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
"The final conclusion stabs
a steady violet finger
to sacrifice."
Wonderful work, as always, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
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Re: Sacrifice
5th Mar 2013 2:02am
Trees do have unlimited amounts of energy:) You have a beautiful mind, Scribbler. Don't ever lose it.
Blake
Blake
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5th Mar 2013 6:02am
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5th Mar 2013 4:19am
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Re: Sacrifice
Anonymous
5th Mar 2013 7:09pm
Very nice word composition, the end is magical.
Much enjoyed1
Much enjoyed1
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5th Mar 2013 7:10pm
Re: Sacrifice
6th Mar 2013 5:11pm
As a lover of words and visuals created through them, your world of wonder here consistently gives us shots of clarity and pondering to enjoin.
I don't follow many here, and you are one of my faves.
I don't follow many here, and you are one of my faves.
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re: Re: Sacrifice
6th Mar 2013 5:13pm
Re: Sacrifice
7th Mar 2013 11:42pm
Love the write! A pure masterpiece. Each word you write is very authentic and mind blowing. Great pen!
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