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..hate burns stronger than love...
"We can forgive you for killing our sons. But we will never forgive you for making us kill yours. Peace will come when the Arabs will love their children more than they hate us"
Golda Meir - The Fourth Prime Minister of Israel.
Feel it burn you?
That C4 strapped to your chest..
beneath your ragged cloth.
Your Father carries you
proud of his only son.
Hoisted on his soldiers,
he sings to his brethern
he has groomed you
for the The Second Intifada.
Your friends, those little infants
you left behind
are not ready for this honour
that your Father claims to know.
Only you have been groomed
to Allah he has prayed.
And he is very sure
step forward, only son.
Child of nine.
You do not wield the AK-47
you understand it is your sacrifice
not his.
Your Father hates his enemy
more than he loves
his first born Son.
You breathe in
taste the Southern Israeli air.
And within that second
you, disappear.
The War rages on
your Father is pleased.
Casting aside the triggered detonater.
He casts himself
unto the chaos.
انتفاضة الأقصى
Your memory, honoured.
The Newest Martyr
For another Man's Jihad.
In a War you did not know.
Golda Meir - The Fourth Prime Minister of Israel.
Feel it burn you?
That C4 strapped to your chest..
beneath your ragged cloth.
Your Father carries you
proud of his only son.
Hoisted on his soldiers,
he sings to his brethern
he has groomed you
for the The Second Intifada.
Your friends, those little infants
you left behind
are not ready for this honour
that your Father claims to know.
Only you have been groomed
to Allah he has prayed.
And he is very sure
step forward, only son.
Child of nine.
You do not wield the AK-47
you understand it is your sacrifice
not his.
Your Father hates his enemy
more than he loves
his first born Son.
You breathe in
taste the Southern Israeli air.
And within that second
you, disappear.
The War rages on
your Father is pleased.
Casting aside the triggered detonater.
He casts himself
unto the chaos.
انتفاضة الأقصى
Your memory, honoured.
The Newest Martyr
For another Man's Jihad.
In a War you did not know.
Written by
AscensionES
(Aptilneilrionaltion)
Published 1st Mar 2013
| Edited 2nd Mar 2013
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Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
1st Mar 2013 5:33pm
Wow Evan, strong piece of work here....The concept is moving, as always I am shocked by your topics, and you seem to fit them together so well...walking the line of controversial with your art. Good job you SOB! ;)
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re: Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
Thanks mate. Controversial it is, and it's something I invest myself in emotionally as well. Whatever I could find about the Israeli-Palestinian conflict I have, I hope a two state solution can be met. And I thought I'd bring that into my poetry, Strider's competition ' KID SOLDIERS ' a catalyst for that, you could say.
Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
Anonymous
1st Mar 2013 10:46pm
Everyone has a right to an opinion.... well written.
My opinion its all Israels.....shalom
My opinion its all Israels.....shalom

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re: Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
2nd Mar 2013 1:11am
The problem is this, the entire issue is so clouded and shrouded in propaganda from both sides that it'll never truly make sense. We have to be realistic and work with whatever we can.
Thanks for your thoughts.
Thanks for your thoughts.
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Anonymous
2nd Mar 2013 1:26am
No thank you for sharing a daring piece....
Peace to you poet:)))))
Peace to you poet:)))))

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Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Mar 2013 1:20am
2nd Mar 2013 1:19am
Breathtaking, thought-provoking piece, Evan! As for example, this:
Your Father hates his enemy
more than he loves
his first born Son.
Brilliant finish - "In a war you did not know" -showing much compassion in portraying the child as an innocent victim of his father's hatreds & fanatacisms. As though the young boy is, somehow, a disposable commodity in the sacraficial process of his father's personal war ideologies.
A terrific read! :)
Carlene
Your Father hates his enemy
more than he loves
his first born Son.
Brilliant finish - "In a war you did not know" -showing much compassion in portraying the child as an innocent victim of his father's hatreds & fanatacisms. As though the young boy is, somehow, a disposable commodity in the sacraficial process of his father's personal war ideologies.
A terrific read! :)
Carlene

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re: Re: Hate Burns Stronger than Love
2nd Mar 2013 1:28am
Re: Hate burns stronger than Love
2nd Mar 2013 2:01am
Evan
This is extremely well written, and without any doubt the best I have read of yours thus far.
Very well done :)
This is extremely well written, and without any doubt the best I have read of yours thus far.
Very well done :)
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re: Re: Hate burns stronger than Love
2nd Mar 2013 2:05am
Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
Line eleven, you don't need the full-stop, it can keep running. You don't need the apostrophies around 'honour'. The fact that you use the word "claims" in the next line already gives honour that doubt.
This is a good piece, strong. Wouldn't say it's the best I've read from you, but I can see the effort and creativity working pretty fucking well.
This is a good piece, strong. Wouldn't say it's the best I've read from you, but I can see the effort and creativity working pretty fucking well.
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re: Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
Noted, I'll give it a tightening up. Thanks Mr. A, humbling to say the least, aha agreed there. I suppose it's subjective to what's my best.
Thanks for stopping by!
Thanks for stopping by!
Anonymous
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2nd Mar 2013 11:43am
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re: Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
2nd Mar 2013 11:48am
Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
2nd Mar 2013 11:59pm
thought provoking reminder to those who don't stay up on their current events. gr8 quote to lead with also....
well done evan.........
well done evan.........
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re: Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
3rd Mar 2013 00:05am
Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
3rd Mar 2013 00:58am
Another great piece, very strongly rooted in the political which I know you love so much! Very sad, sometimes I don't understand other cultures, but it's not my place to judge, everyone has their own beliefs and the rights to them. I really wish we'd stop meddling. (And them as well, need to start respecting other cultures.)
AlwaysCaliban
AlwaysCaliban
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re: Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
3rd Mar 2013 1:00am
Good points there Caliban :-) Thanks for your comments! Middle Eastern Islam is a culture/faith where breasts are more offensive than bombs.. There is much that is wrong in this world, but there is also good. Even when it's barely there.
Thanks again! :-)
Thanks again! :-)
Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
Anonymous
5th Mar 2013 6:23pm
Wonderfully expressed..so many layers of deception coated in propaganda- nice someone sees it's depths...and can write so well!

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re: Re: ..hate burns stronger than love...
6th Mar 2013 1:06am