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Illegal Lust
Is she close to your heart?
That slut.
That tart.
...In mystery he waits, for someone to hire.
An obsessed soul that aches, with poisonous desire.
"I'm free for tonight, and you seem in the mood.
Play your cards right, I'll do something rude!
Romance? Your joking, just toys and smoking.
But I might kis you there... If you play fair."
The meeting at one, was finished soon after.
He goes back to the night, in cruel tearful laughter.
Is she close to your heart?
That woman.
That fine piece of art.
That slut.
That tart.
...In mystery he waits, for someone to hire.
An obsessed soul that aches, with poisonous desire.
"I'm free for tonight, and you seem in the mood.
Play your cards right, I'll do something rude!
Romance? Your joking, just toys and smoking.
But I might kis you there... If you play fair."
The meeting at one, was finished soon after.
He goes back to the night, in cruel tearful laughter.
Is she close to your heart?
That woman.
That fine piece of art.
Published 4th Sep 2010
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5th Sep 2010 7:44am
You worded this peice perfectly, I was amazed by how you placed the words, it worked really well with the message you conveyed. The emotions were guarded and displayed at all the right times. I really, really love this! Good job. :)
Anonymous
6th Sep 2010 00:11am
That's brutal, but wow you're good! This is definetely a favourite, love the two point perspective (:
6th Sep 2010 2:10pm
I am pleased you like it! This is the only poem i have that is actually fully finished, and to be honest, i'm not sure if i want to submit any more. But thank you both for your kind comments.
14th Oct 2010 6:00pm
It was the twist that got me. Strange how sex can change a man's prespective. Well done, sir.
19th Dec 2011 3:25pm
13th Feb 2012 1:58am
Well after your elusive comment, curiosity lead me to this, and I am impressed. Rather beautiful in all its bluntness.
Anonymous
13th Feb 2012 12:05pm
"Is she close to your heart? that woman. That fine piece of art"
My favorite line. This is a very clever piece of writing. I like the images it envokes and the easy flow of the words on the tongue. A fine write indeed.
My favorite line. This is a very clever piece of writing. I like the images it envokes and the easy flow of the words on the tongue. A fine write indeed.
