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The 'How' guide to surviving Winter. FREE.
The dumplings are cold, and the stomach is disinterested, so it doesn't really matter.
I whisper 'sorry' for the waste, to the empty space of changing light, I'm not shocked at the lack of response.
I bite my nails and move from seat to seat and never aim to settle the body or mind. Pleasuring myself in this grotesque maze of walls and floors and ongoing time.
The electricity goes, I haven't paid it for another month.
The water is cold, you know the drill.
The body is gluttonous of world loathing and chemical-imbalance. I don't, however, want to blame anything for the all-burning sensation of sadness, the real emotion, that is grazing my familiar skin.
I whisper 'sorry' for the waste, to the empty space of changing light, I'm not shocked at the lack of response.
I bite my nails and move from seat to seat and never aim to settle the body or mind. Pleasuring myself in this grotesque maze of walls and floors and ongoing time.
The electricity goes, I haven't paid it for another month.
The water is cold, you know the drill.
The body is gluttonous of world loathing and chemical-imbalance. I don't, however, want to blame anything for the all-burning sensation of sadness, the real emotion, that is grazing my familiar skin.
Published 12th Feb 2013
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13th Feb 2013 8:25am
Poppy,
hey, welcome back.
some suggestions:
The dumplings are cold, *but the stomach is disinterested, so it doesn't really matter.
not a hell of a difference with the *but but a small difference all the same
of changing light, *though I'm not shocked at the lack of response.
likewise with the *though
I bite my nails, move from seat to seat, and never aim to settle the body or mind.
I took out the first and, then stuck an extra comma in there to break up the line.
all just suggestions.
anyhow, nice way to announce you're arrival. it's a bleak enough image you're painting. the closing lines finish it nicely. well worth reading. hat tip to ya
good show I say :)
hey, welcome back.
some suggestions:
The dumplings are cold, *but the stomach is disinterested, so it doesn't really matter.
not a hell of a difference with the *but but a small difference all the same
of changing light, *though I'm not shocked at the lack of response.
likewise with the *though
I bite my nails, move from seat to seat, and never aim to settle the body or mind.
I took out the first and, then stuck an extra comma in there to break up the line.
all just suggestions.
anyhow, nice way to announce you're arrival. it's a bleak enough image you're painting. the closing lines finish it nicely. well worth reading. hat tip to ya
good show I say :)
15th Feb 2013 6:47am
The survival kit is sometimes abstract and when we have no other way but to face the situation and the time is over we say that is the survival kit. I agree with you.
