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Subconscious
when we’re asleep our brain
tends to our monsters
it shuts down the electric fence
and they rush out
they’ve anticipated this all day
they wander through the town
down sidewalks and alleys
it’s OK, though
they know the locals here
the meaty bouncer at the corner bar
and homeless dude who sits
on the corner under the neon signs
and smokes a joint
and laughs and watches
but there’s one monster
who doesn’t want to play
it wants to feed
and it means business
tends to our monsters
it shuts down the electric fence
and they rush out
they’ve anticipated this all day
they wander through the town
down sidewalks and alleys
it’s OK, though
they know the locals here
the meaty bouncer at the corner bar
and homeless dude who sits
on the corner under the neon signs
and smokes a joint
and laughs and watches
but there’s one monster
who doesn’t want to play
it wants to feed
and it means business
Published 10th Feb 2013
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Anonymous
- Edited 10th Feb 2013 2:53am
10th Feb 2013 2:47am
An excellent poem, Catie. Loved the wording/phrasing & your unique insights. Well done! Welcome to DUP. :)
Carlene
Carlene
10th Feb 2013 2:49am
Interesting read, thus is the subconscious!
Witty ink, written nicely, Catie! Welcome to DU! :) xo
Witty ink, written nicely, Catie! Welcome to DU! :) xo
10th Feb 2013 3:10am
i enjoyed your poem i thought it well written and would love to read more of your poems and thank you for your comment on ungrateful dead
10th Feb 2013 8:55pm
Nice poem. Very consistent. It's even a good idea to keep the reader wondering "who doesn't want to play . . ." I can identify with that monster, but for me it's plural: monsters. Great job. Welcome.
marcella1
marcella1
12th Dec 2013 4:54pm
I could've sworn I commented this!?
Oh well... Outstanding, dark, n mysterious stuff lady :)
Oh well... Outstanding, dark, n mysterious stuff lady :)
