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To the end, you and I.
The concluding breath melds into memory,
whilst ivory irises ink the
conclusion lethally sharp.
Life takes a holiday someplace vacant,
stuffing my optimism into a suitcase
lined with anti-depressants.
Silence and I formed a blood pact
entwined united till the very end.
He blossoms in the various
mercurial plains of my lungs.
Gallantly tending foxgloves which
reach towards my larynx with grief.
Brothers and sisters branch
their family trees in
opposite directions to my
inspirited tilt of lips.
My own gave me a grave
stone for my birthday,
I set it teary for
safe keeping.
Hand in hand we float
into the sunset,
my transparent fingers
held remorseful in his.
whilst ivory irises ink the
conclusion lethally sharp.
Life takes a holiday someplace vacant,
stuffing my optimism into a suitcase
lined with anti-depressants.
Silence and I formed a blood pact
entwined united till the very end.
He blossoms in the various
mercurial plains of my lungs.
Gallantly tending foxgloves which
reach towards my larynx with grief.
Brothers and sisters branch
their family trees in
opposite directions to my
inspirited tilt of lips.
My own gave me a grave
stone for my birthday,
I set it teary for
safe keeping.
Hand in hand we float
into the sunset,
my transparent fingers
held remorseful in his.
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Re: To the end, you and I.
5th Feb 2013 8:38pm
Life takes a holiday .. I wish. And I love this. This was heartfelt and relatable xoxox nice
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
5th Feb 2013 8:43pm
Re: To the end, you and I.
5th Feb 2013 8:57pm
well written Scribbler!
you have a great talent for poetry!
everything I read is impressive! you never let the reader down
Kudos!
you have a great talent for poetry!
everything I read is impressive! you never let the reader down
Kudos!
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
5th Feb 2013 9:09pm
Re: To the end, you and I.
5th Feb 2013 9:26pm
"Life takes a holiday someplace vacant,
stuffing my optimism into a suitcase
lined with anti-depressants."
genius, I'm running out of words to praise you.
stuffing my optimism into a suitcase
lined with anti-depressants."
genius, I'm running out of words to praise you.
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 00:12am
As always you are delightfully elegant with your words, I look forward to our sure to be ingenious rap battle scribs.
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 6:12am
As do I, as do I; ingenuous it will be :)
Thank you kindly, for your comments.
Thank you kindly, for your comments.
Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 00:24am
Absolutely nothing bad to say about this...this is elegant, poised...i dont know...good job
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 6:14am
Re: To the end, you and I.
Anonymous
6th Feb 2013 2:17am
A stunning opening stanza, Scribbler. And an equally stunning write, throughout. Great wording/phrasing & expression. NOW on my reading list!! :)
Carlene
Carlene

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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 6:09am
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 6:15am
Thank you for your comments, No1.
I always look forward to reading them :)
I always look forward to reading them :)
Re: To the end, you and I.
Anonymous
6th Feb 2013 1:26pm
Very well composed poem, Scribbler!
This one is much more dreamlike and uplifting than your other poems....
This one is much more dreamlike and uplifting than your other poems....

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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
6th Feb 2013 2:58pm
Re: To the end, you and I.
9th Feb 2013 9:14am
scribbs you have quite the ability to make a man wit a concrete heart misty eyed.........
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
It's great you feel from reading my poems,
'tis what I aim for.
Thank you again for commenting, sir;
I look forward to reading them.
'tis what I aim for.
Thank you again for commenting, sir;
I look forward to reading them.
Re: To the end, you and I.
10th Feb 2013 2:53pm
An acute, sobering glimpse beyond the view. Strong piece of heartspeak.
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
10th Feb 2013 2:57pm
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
16th Feb 2013 12:00pm
Re: To the end, you and I.
24th Mar 2013 6:28pm
Life takes a holiday somewhere vacant ----
love that line!
This is going on my reading list.
love that line!
This is going on my reading list.
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re: Re: To the end, you and I.
24th Mar 2013 6:29pm