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Darkness
darkness engulfs me in it's cold embrace
feels like a pillow is being held against my face
i lose my way without you to guide me
without you i am like a moth to the flame, i am the very reason i get so unhappy
i've become so dependent on you
so when i'm without you i do not know what i am to do
part of me longs to find refuge in anothers arms,but know what that'll do
it'd drive a wedge between me and you
though i long to cry because it's so hard for me
seems like i'm always in pain
depression for me is like walking in a cold winter's rain
i know that i'll be fine, i'll make it through
but it's so much easier when i can talk to you
what would i do?
if i were forced to go through life without you
i won't cry, i'll just wait
i just hope it won't be too late
feels like a pillow is being held against my face
i lose my way without you to guide me
without you i am like a moth to the flame, i am the very reason i get so unhappy
i've become so dependent on you
so when i'm without you i do not know what i am to do
part of me longs to find refuge in anothers arms,but know what that'll do
it'd drive a wedge between me and you
though i long to cry because it's so hard for me
seems like i'm always in pain
depression for me is like walking in a cold winter's rain
i know that i'll be fine, i'll make it through
but it's so much easier when i can talk to you
what would i do?
if i were forced to go through life without you
i won't cry, i'll just wait
i just hope it won't be too late
Published 21st Jan 2013
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21st Jan 2013 2:55am
There is not enough darkness in all the world to put out the light of even one small candle.
Gorgeous Ink! :)
21st Jan 2013 3:06am
21st Jan 2013 3:09am
That's so true, Rain! No matter how dark things get, BlueBeastGirl, never let the darkness put your fire out... it's bright even through the dark of this beautiful, moving poem. And no one can take that light from you either because it's just totally you. Keep up the great poetry, kiddo!
21st Jan 2013 3:17am
21st Jan 2013 11:33am
I'll second ... an excellent poem. Made me feel the emotions and the hope of the last line.
21st Jan 2013 11:03pm
darkness engulfs me in it's cold embrace
feels like a pillow is being held against my face
A very powerful literary tactic is shown when an artist opens with a metaphor.
And then kicks the door by taking it visceral. Makes it physical, past the riddle.
That gripped me right away, in the first line. Fine work, Comrade!
feels like a pillow is being held against my face
A very powerful literary tactic is shown when an artist opens with a metaphor.
And then kicks the door by taking it visceral. Makes it physical, past the riddle.
That gripped me right away, in the first line. Fine work, Comrade!
21st Jan 2013 11:34pm
I like how the darkness is tempered with hope, this to me adds beauty and the passion of longing is made more bearable with the realization that there is hope, even if its desperate hope.
22nd Jan 2013 3:17pm
Keep those candles lit in a circle that you can make, it can be your key to personal power. Or sometimes there's a good path in darkness as well, whatever one thinks. Otherwise, this was a good poem, well done.
