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Blurred Focus
A blurred focus, through fractured
lens, is more than enough.
We still polish the glaze
lovingly.
A rising from the dust and
glass ashes is no miracle,
naught but a rebirth awaited
expectantly.
We gather the least favored
and stones grind their bones.
Molten truths harden
inevitably.
Nothing much remains
besides the stained votive
tokens, cracks abound
transparently.
Published 17th Jan 2013
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17th Jan 2013 10:24pm
Atakti,
you have a great way of drenching your poetry in imagery.
The four stanzas together make a marvelous poem , each stanza on it's own has something pretty good to say too.
hat tip to you, shine on
you have a great way of drenching your poetry in imagery.
The four stanzas together make a marvelous poem , each stanza on it's own has something pretty good to say too.
hat tip to you, shine on
17th Jan 2013 10:28pm
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18th Jan 2013 10:29am
Anonymous
18th Jan 2013 00:57am
Tremendously interesting read, Atakti. A terrific, philosophical write. Beautifully penned. I so enjoyed reading this poem! :)
Carlene
Carlene
18th Jan 2013 10:30am
Anonymous
18th Jan 2013 1:54am
Agreed with Craic Ataki, very descriptive and a strong setting of imagery, it comes off like second nature to you, very interesting!
18th Jan 2013 10:31am
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18th Jan 2013 1:52pm
18th Jan 2013 1:11pm
"We gather the least favored
and stones grind their bones.
Molten truths harden
inevitably." - I loved this part.
"Nothing much remains
besides the stained votive
tokens, cracks abound
transparently." - but I really, really loved the ending the best!!!
Excellent poeting my dear Atakti ...
and stones grind their bones.
Molten truths harden
inevitably." - I loved this part.
"Nothing much remains
besides the stained votive
tokens, cracks abound
transparently." - but I really, really loved the ending the best!!!
Excellent poeting my dear Atakti ...
18th Jan 2013 1:53pm
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20th Jan 2013 6:23pm
Ooh, now, don't say "perfect" to me, I'll panic, lol.
Thanks very much, Blake. :)
Thanks very much, Blake. :)
