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Over Summer
You and I --
our bones fall in Autumn colours
softly, like feathers cast
off our tree named 'Ionraic'* -
and till crack-filled frost reflects the glow of Spring
we lie, dormant as sleeping seeds in the hollow
of Terra's throat
while Winter shades draw their bridal greys
over a hundred suns.
And we,
when Nyx bows to Equinox
and sweeps away her starlit skirts
stay quiet in our foetal state, waiting
for the desperation of twittering calls outside
to settle into young Summer,
the energy
in humanity's solar affair
swinging low into heat-soaked lull
for as long as gratitude takes to smile.
And you and I --
Salt and sun lovingly blanch our bones,
and we are clean.
*"Ionraic" - pronounced [IN-rig] - is a Scottish Gaelic word meaning "honest" or "upright" or "just".
our bones fall in Autumn colours
softly, like feathers cast
off our tree named 'Ionraic'* -
and till crack-filled frost reflects the glow of Spring
we lie, dormant as sleeping seeds in the hollow
of Terra's throat
while Winter shades draw their bridal greys
over a hundred suns.
And we,
when Nyx bows to Equinox
and sweeps away her starlit skirts
stay quiet in our foetal state, waiting
for the desperation of twittering calls outside
to settle into young Summer,
the energy
in humanity's solar affair
swinging low into heat-soaked lull
for as long as gratitude takes to smile.
And you and I --
Salt and sun lovingly blanch our bones,
and we are clean.
*"Ionraic" - pronounced [IN-rig] - is a Scottish Gaelic word meaning "honest" or "upright" or "just".
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ahh yes, this.. this is bloody good poetry.
"softly, like feathers cast
off our tree named 'Ionraic'*"
This is the language I love to read. words that dance about the page and give pleasure to the eye and the mind.
you've got a great one here Lady, well worth the wait.
Hat tip.
"softly, like feathers cast
off our tree named 'Ionraic'*"
This is the language I love to read. words that dance about the page and give pleasure to the eye and the mind.
you've got a great one here Lady, well worth the wait.
Hat tip.
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15th Jan 2013 10:23am
*whew* thank you! i'm not really into the flowery language thing, but this one seemed to need something a bit different than the usual. different mind mode lately, i guess. grateful for your eyes, E, thanks again. [:
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15th Jan 2013 10:28am
Hat tip number 2.
The first Stanza would have done it. But you, you just tipped it over the ice cap and ended it with victory.
Wonderful stuff.
Please don't edit this, let it lay there in all it's glory!
Plenty Blue Skies at you, Jesta.
Al
-x-
The first Stanza would have done it. But you, you just tipped it over the ice cap and ended it with victory.
Wonderful stuff.
Please don't edit this, let it lay there in all it's glory!
Plenty Blue Skies at you, Jesta.
Al
-x-
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too kind, Al, thank you; i'm still deciding if i can handle the bubbles it puts in my stomach. [: loves and loves to you, my friend.
p.s. i will try to leave it alone.... i have great trouble with the fidgets in my editing fingers though. [:
p.s. i will try to leave it alone.... i have great trouble with the fidgets in my editing fingers though. [:
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Anonymous
15th Jan 2013 11:03am
Once again, I always look at the category of your work, and then struggle to see how it fits, or I end up thinking of a completely different perspective. I see a lot of love in this poem. The spectacular image of 'bones falling in autumn colours' is embraced quite gently by its follow up line of 'softly, like feathers cast'. For me, it seemed like a wonderful metaphor, but it may not have been how you intended it.
So much love for this piece. Elegant wording, nature, and minimalistic. *deep sigh* - wonderful.
So much love for this piece. Elegant wording, nature, and minimalistic. *deep sigh* - wonderful.
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15th Jan 2013 11:19am
actually, you're right again. this was originally a love poem, but i was in denial about that. so i opted for upbeat, as it ends on, what feels to me, a free note. thank you so much, Missy. i'm fortunate to have writers i admire reading these pages, and i always appreciate your thoughtful reviews.
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Anonymous
- Edited 15th Jan 2013 11:52am
15th Jan 2013 11:50am
Nice addition to a great write Jestalessa!
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15th Jan 2013 11:52am
This is such a beautiful captivating piece Jesta. I love the visual and serene feeling it brings. :)
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15th Jan 2013 12:35pm
ah, thank you Mags... i was hoping it was as visual to others as i'd worked it in my head. so glad to have you by. [:
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Anonymous
15th Jan 2013 4:08pm
What a beautiful delightful string of flowing words, or "a waterfall of words". This is a poem for the senses...!
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16th Jan 2013 3:47pm
the fact that it could engage your senses is a joyous one. thank you for bringing your view, M. [:
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15th Jan 2013 8:15pm
"the energy
in humanity's solar affair
swinging low into heat-soaked lull
for as long as gratitude takes to smile."
Words to warm the bones! Summer, mystic forces and love woven together, a fine poem.
in humanity's solar affair
swinging low into heat-soaked lull
for as long as gratitude takes to smile."
Words to warm the bones! Summer, mystic forces and love woven together, a fine poem.
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16th Jan 2013 3:50pm
it was a bit of an odd one for mysticism, i admit. i like to read straightforward poetry best, so i'm grateful you could find something worth the read 'round here. thanks, Ms A. [:
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16th Jan 2013 3:54pm
that's huge for me, Matthew. i often feel like i'm off by a chunky margin, so thank you.
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Chunky Margin...ha ha I like that term...reminds me of Chunky Monkey...but I digress..you are anything but a Chunkey Monkey...perhaps at times a Cheeky Monkey...but never a Chunky Monkey...sheesh I got distracted again...you need to give your self credit...you dared to do something different from your other stuff and you pulled it off my dear...so never fear...pull more rabbits out of your hat and place upon the table...because you have very beautiful rabbits to offer...:) Sorry I'm little punchy tonight and I have not been drinking yet...:) always love your stuff Jesta
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21st Jan 2013 12:03pm
haha, thank you so much, Philip... my rabbits are rabid right now, but once they chill out a bit i'll brush them up and lay 'em out for a skinning. [:
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25th Jan 2013 9:41am
I certainly am a lucky bint sometimes. [:
Thanks for gracing the page, Mo. missed yo face.
Thanks for gracing the page, Mo. missed yo face.
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