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love or lust?
what is this? is this what fools chase or is this what the movies showcase
who are you? are you just another girl out of a zillion or are you that movie with all of the Jet Li's in it
how do we know that love is real or nothing more than just a better way to say i care for you?
who are you? are you just another girl out of a zillion or are you that movie with all of the Jet Li's in it
how do we know that love is real or nothing more than just a better way to say i care for you?
Published 3rd Jan 2013
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25th Jan 2013 12:50pm
Alright man.. don't force your rhyming, you need proper structure, more effective imagery.. your punctuational craft could use some tightening up. Try free verse, it'll suit your style better. Kepe at it though mate, keep writing.
