can you hear me

Lovely flow to this write dear faith

happy new year

marcus

Many thanks, Marcus.  Happy New Year to you!

Sweet Lady, he hears your cries always. When he sends rain, it is his tears for you. :)

Thank you for your lovely comments, flowergirl.  You are such a dear friend!

Faith, I agree with the other commenter that this has a "lovely flow" to it. I think it is such a heartfelt, relatable prayer. I like how you included this telling line:

"i am not hard yet"

To me, that line shows an uncommon depth of thinking/feeling. Very thought provoking, indeed! There does seem to be that edge -- that turning point in life -- where one can go either way!

With the last line. I wonder if the inclusion of the word 'out' might (or might not)enhance the beat. So that 'cry to you' becomes 'cry out to you'. I'm not sure but thought I'd throw out the simple suggestion. Having said that, I wish I had only one word to consider as I get around to editing my past poems. :)

It's a beautiful write, my friend!

Carlene


 

 

Dear Carlene-Thank you for your lovely and thoughtful feedback.  I'm glad you enjoyed my poem and I am giving your suggestion some thought.  Your comments are most welcome, my friend.

*TEAR*

Im so emotional these days!

This one was inked with an emotional pen!
Very heartfelt!
And Yes! He Can hear you! :)

Thanks for sharing!xoxoxo

Thank you, dear Lady Rain...I wrote this when my heart felt cold only to find that He does answer all prayers...thank you for your loving words.

Once again, you seem to know my life.  I have cried those same words.  Maybe the answer isn't yes all the time, but He does answer and is always with us.

Wishing you a Happy New Year, filled with joy and poetry.

Thank you for your kind and loving comments, Amazon.  I wish you all the best in the year ahead.