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viridian desolation
spat out from the joyless sea,
awash with bruised decay,
an entity unwelcomed
the disdain swirls and
splits into pigmented indifference,
marks skin perpetually
uranium agent flaked,
arsenic amethyst mixed,
the faded star extinguished
a red-swollen, clouded glaze
remains, unseeing rejection’s
abyss, naked in dejection
Submitted for competition - poems on above image
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Re: viridian desolation
7th Dec 2012 4:52pm
Ahhh this is a great portrayal of the picture Atakti.... Good luck to you too in the comp. :)
The picture haunts me in a sorrowful way since I first saw it.
The picture haunts me in a sorrowful way since I first saw it.
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7th Dec 2012 4:58pm
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7th Dec 2012 5:08pm
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Anonymous
7th Dec 2012 5:13pm
Nicely done Ataki...good luck!
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7th Dec 2012 5:16pm
Re: viridian desolation
7th Dec 2012 5:23pm
"uranium agent flaked,
arsenic amethyst mixed,
the faded star extinguished"
*grins*
This is where you had me drooling a bit ;)
and viridian ?
Fabulous friggin word isn't ?
Much enjoyed :)
arsenic amethyst mixed,
the faded star extinguished"
*grins*
This is where you had me drooling a bit ;)
and viridian ?
Fabulous friggin word isn't ?
Much enjoyed :)
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re: Re: viridian desolation
7th Dec 2012 6:05pm
Re: viridian desolation
7th Dec 2012 5:35pm
this is great!
actually its awesome, I love you interpretation
of the pic!!!
good luck in the comp
actually its awesome, I love you interpretation
of the pic!!!
good luck in the comp
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7th Dec 2012 6:06pm
Re: viridian desolation
7th Dec 2012 9:26pm
This is magnificent. My kind of write for sure. A very post apocalyptic feel. It's going to the reading list.
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7th Dec 2012 9:54pm
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8th Dec 2012 2:43am
Re: viridian desolation
8th Dec 2012 3:24am
WOW!!!! this kicks ass!! Short, to the point, yet extremely descriptive. A being who has given up on the world, because the world gave up on them. Brilliant and good luck.
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8th Dec 2012 8:11am
Re: viridian desolation
4th Jun 2014 9:33pm
It's this kind of stuff that drives me to take a black crayon to the walls of my office... A powerful write indeed
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re: Re: viridian desolation
5th Jun 2014 5:50am
Oooh, then take a pic of the crayoned wall, and lemme see!
Thanks, JC, for going through my old stuff.
:)
Thanks, JC, for going through my old stuff.
:)