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Experiences
A black hole in my mind
syphons my experiences into a place called
‘memories’.
A vague trip with no way back.
It doesn’t discriminate between good or bad…
Devouring all in its wake.
Just gone.
Stored perhaps to be recalled in an afterlife.
Or so I’m told.
I go there sometimesIn a dream
that will one day leave me there
in the comfort of a grave
to then dwell in the mind’s vortex of those I have known.
syphons my experiences into a place called
‘memories’.
A vague trip with no way back.
It doesn’t discriminate between good or bad…
Devouring all in its wake.
Just gone.
Stored perhaps to be recalled in an afterlife.
Or so I’m told.
I go there sometimesIn a dream
that will one day leave me there
in the comfort of a grave
to then dwell in the mind’s vortex of those I have known.
Published 7th Jul 2010
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7th Jul 2010 4:28pm
This has a really great distant, formal feel to to it, which I think works cause it seems to create tension or be at odds with the kind of personal and emotional subject matter you write about.
9th Jul 2010 00:35am
Hi Merda,
Yeah. This is one I just blurted out in a few minutes or so. No real thought about refining or making it intimate to the reader. Wondering now whether I should try to take the edge off the mood I was in when I wrote it.
Unlike some, I can take soft and harsh critique so feel free to comment if you think changing the tone may make it better. Thanks for reading.
Yeah. This is one I just blurted out in a few minutes or so. No real thought about refining or making it intimate to the reader. Wondering now whether I should try to take the edge off the mood I was in when I wrote it.
Unlike some, I can take soft and harsh critique so feel free to comment if you think changing the tone may make it better. Thanks for reading.
