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Sodomy Fiend
Lick me, suck me till I cum
You know you're the only one,
I want to fuck you till I die!
Fuck you, put your face in dirt,
I know You like it when it hurts,
Rip you open inside.
So-do-my fiend, fucking rockstar supreme,
breathe in my lies and die just for me!
Scrunch me up like a rubber glove,
This is love, lust and drugs
Lets get high and fuck like we're free.
Criss cross patterns on your skirt
you look cute with the burnt
patches on your knees.
So-do-my fiend fucking spleen eating freak,
don't cry, dry your eyes don't even speak!
You know you're the only one,
I want to fuck you till I die!
Fuck you, put your face in dirt,
I know You like it when it hurts,
Rip you open inside.
So-do-my fiend, fucking rockstar supreme,
breathe in my lies and die just for me!
Scrunch me up like a rubber glove,
This is love, lust and drugs
Lets get high and fuck like we're free.
Criss cross patterns on your skirt
you look cute with the burnt
patches on your knees.
So-do-my fiend fucking spleen eating freak,
don't cry, dry your eyes don't even speak!
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Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 11:03am
So... I might have skipped over it, but I didn't detect the sodomy.. Lol.
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re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 11:07am
Yeah I know I didn't take my time with this one, I was trying to weave it in but had the choice of only a few simple words to keep the flow, so I just let it take its own path... Thanks x
Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 11:09am
re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 12:26pm
Very true, but I was thinking more along the lines of... Well I'm sure you catch my drift ;)
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Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 12:13pm
Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Nov 2012 5:22pm
Re: Sodomy Fiend
14th Nov 2012 10:37am
mmmmmm...altho i feel a man can be taken away more in a tongue used as paintbrush and the woman using the man as her canvas and oil masterpiece...so more devine than a gobble type thing....but its good
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re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
14th Nov 2012 8:06pm
Yeah I got you and totally agree! It was just a spur of the moment thing, thanks for reading and your insight. X
Re: Sodomy Fiend
20th Nov 2012 1:11am
do i detect anger at the government
is the girl the government and you the supreme ruler
that
idk where i was going w/ that
is the girl the government and you the supreme ruler
that
idk where i was going w/ that
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re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
20th Nov 2012 3:19am
All poetry is potentially abstract in my opinion, but no that's not what I had in mind when I wrote it! Although I would definitely like to sodomize the government!
Re: Sodomy Fiend
20th Nov 2012 1:19am
A lot of anger there and didn't do what it said on the tin so whilst not satisfied I still enjoyed it. Like half a drink it leaves wanting more. unfulfilled.
I'll read more of your stuff though you have my appreciation.
I'll read more of your stuff though you have my appreciation.
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re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
20th Nov 2012 3:15am
Thanks for the honest feedback, and yes I don't really like this poem. It's just an expression of extreme male dominant energy. I'm not really a sodomy fiend, haha
re: re: Re: Sodomy Fiend
13th Dec 2012 9:16pm
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hey, i see...i guess
sometimes we let go for human consumption what we don't necessarily "enjoy" ourselves. we jus go forward with it anyway, expressing what feels to be the dominant, that energized slice of life as we see it at the time. our art, sometimes laughing it off as it were NO thing. but this is something, once again a case of you doing you. honest?
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hey, i see...i guess
sometimes we let go for human consumption what we don't necessarily "enjoy" ourselves. we jus go forward with it anyway, expressing what feels to be the dominant, that energized slice of life as we see it at the time. our art, sometimes laughing it off as it were NO thing. but this is something, once again a case of you doing you. honest?
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