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Arrogant child
Today I cut the rope
set you free
Ego
feed me
pleasure & gain
money & fame
nothing but an empty name...
set you free
Ego
feed me
pleasure & gain
money & fame
nothing but an empty name...
Published 12th Nov 2012
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12th Nov 2012 4:03pm
I enjoy the ostensible simplicity and the implicit complexity. Also, I truly think people underestimate the power of brevity. My only criticism is I believe the poem begins stronger than it ends, and in my opinion it should be the reverse. All in all, a solid effort.
13th Nov 2012 8:44am
