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the romance of a suicide
when life starts getting too much
we just go
end it
together
that's romance
not that shit you see in hollywood's dreams
fuck that
its all fucking empty
so we take our pills
lay there
and just hold each other
one last kiss
before we fall asleep
and never wake up
we just go
end it
together
that's romance
not that shit you see in hollywood's dreams
fuck that
its all fucking empty
so we take our pills
lay there
and just hold each other
one last kiss
before we fall asleep
and never wake up
Published 17th May 2010
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Anonymous
17th May 2010 00:25am
Straightforward and yet beautiful poem, without artifice or pretension, like a simple, poetic statement of fact. This is how it is. To die together is more romantic than to live by each other's side for all eternity. Your brushstrokes here are sparse and grey, an entrancing postcard, or an all-too-brief glimpse, through the slits of a shuttered window, at some enormous, bleak landscape. If I'm rambling, that's just further evidence of how much I like this poem.
17th May 2010 5:45am
you know how occasionally I'll take little bits of our conversations or something I've written in a comment to you and turn it into a poem (I do this with others as well) you should think about taking some out of your comments and turning them into poems because I'll tell you honestly some of the comments you write are as good as the poems you're writing them about.. so a compliment back to you bud.. and thank you so much.. cheers!
Anonymous
17th May 2010 11:09am
Thank you Nathan; that's actually not a bad idea! I may well try that.
17th May 2010 9:13pm
17th May 2010 10:18pm
ty hun.. aw I thought you were happy lately.. or do you just mean the romantic theme of it all like "that's the way to go if I gotta go"? well glad you like it.. cheers!!
Anonymous
18th May 2010 3:50pm
this one comes without any artifice, only makes it all the more beautiful nathan,hell, it moves me so much.
18th May 2010 10:59pm
aw ty so much for the compliment and insight.. I was moved and quite inspired while writing it.. :D
26th May 2010 1:47pm
it somehow reminds me of the tragedy of romeo and juliet though in their case was a drug. how painfully beautiful!
"so we take our pills
lay there
and just hold each other
one last kiss
before we fall asleep
and never wake up"
"so we take our pills
lay there
and just hold each other
one last kiss
before we fall asleep
and never wake up"
26th May 2010 3:40pm
oh definitely similar to the romeo and juliet scenario except instead of the drama of one thinking falsely the other was dead so dies then the other wakes up and dies because their lover is dead.. I surpass that and just have them both die at the same time.. by will and wits end alone.. much more romantic than the romeo and juliet them but dont tell shakespear I said that
27th May 2010 10:23pm
