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inhaling sleeveless dreams
There are no sleeves here
to which to pin our hearts
There are no hearts
There is only a brokenness
to connect those stumbling around
beneath dead street lights
with paint-stained faces
and the nub of a cigarette
that never found its way
into already decaying lungs
Oh... we’ll steal all the street signs
because there is beauty in this void
of empty beer cans and overused bong water
But there is no key to lock the unhinged door
when the windows are glassless eyes
and there’s a schizophrenic mural on the wall
in memory of the unborn children that died
within our poisoned wombs
our demons hidden for all to see
Here
we’re just hearts that used to be
before life kissed us with the Devil’s hand
and we lost our humanity
for a deeper high
than the grief and misery
we continue to inhale
© Indie Adams 2012
to which to pin our hearts
There are no hearts
There is only a brokenness
to connect those stumbling around
beneath dead street lights
with paint-stained faces
and the nub of a cigarette
that never found its way
into already decaying lungs
Oh... we’ll steal all the street signs
because there is beauty in this void
of empty beer cans and overused bong water
But there is no key to lock the unhinged door
when the windows are glassless eyes
and there’s a schizophrenic mural on the wall
in memory of the unborn children that died
within our poisoned wombs
our demons hidden for all to see
Here
we’re just hearts that used to be
before life kissed us with the Devil’s hand
and we lost our humanity
for a deeper high
than the grief and misery
we continue to inhale
© Indie Adams 2012
Written by
Indie
(Miss Indie)
Published 8th Oct 2012
| Edited 2nd Nov 2012
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re: Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
8th Oct 2012 2:52am
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8th Oct 2012 5:15am
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8th Oct 2012 10:39am
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8th Oct 2012 7:06pm
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8th Oct 2012 10:16pm
Thanks zorro1. I've read your other comments on other peoples poems, if you want people to read you, have some respect and don't self advertise on their poems, at least have the courtesy to send them a pm.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
9th Oct 2012 2:17pm
Wonderful job conveying the pain and futility of substance abuse. I would strongly encourage taking just this one line, "There is no key to lock the unhinged door " and crafting a new write around it. This is a powerful metaphor that deserves its own poem.
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re: Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
21st Oct 2012 8:41am
Thank you dlmchale for your lovely feedback. :) That line is indeed worthy of consideration for another write. Thank you.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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21st Oct 2012 8:32am
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Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
28th Oct 2012 9:45pm
you def. see the would threw artist eyes
love your attention to things ppl would not normally see & how you used such a strong topic to write about kudos
love your attention to things ppl would not normally see & how you used such a strong topic to write about kudos
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re: Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
28th Oct 2012 9:48pm
Thank you very much Nourish, for your lovely comment. I'm glad I was able to convey the depths of that world through my words. Much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed. :)
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
2nd Nov 2012 11:08am
There's a mystical quality here that borders on the intersection of metaphysics and sci fi....
and we lost our humanity
for a deeper high
in ethnopharmacology, metaphoric death is seen as a way out of our limited lives...meditation has this inner seeking quality about it...and this seems to me a meditation on the lacking substance of what we leave behind as we tread out into inner space....
and we lost our humanity
for a deeper high
in ethnopharmacology, metaphoric death is seen as a way out of our limited lives...meditation has this inner seeking quality about it...and this seems to me a meditation on the lacking substance of what we leave behind as we tread out into inner space....
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re: Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
2nd Nov 2012 10:47pm
Thank you very much Mr Turtle for your thoughtful comment. X) Much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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2nd Nov 2012 11:39am
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Re: inhaling sleeveless dreams
8th Nov 2012 3:31pm
sweet/love-it.........
swell
videola reading too....
yes,
'way-to-go'
dear
indie
darlin
swell
videola reading too....
yes,
'way-to-go'
dear
indie
darlin
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8th Nov 2012 3:37pm