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Emotionally Broken
The day as dark as hell;
Closed as an open clam shell.
Asleep but awful awake;
Bought but stolen to take.
Lying but it's stating a fact;
Proact instead of react.
Speaking but no words;
Moving away but walking towards.
Premature ejaculation; incomplete thought;
Losing a war that was never fought.
Standing but bowing down;
Standing on your head to make a frown.
A tattoo without history;
Loving you without me.
Living life without a cause;
What do you think of when your thoughts pause.
Closed as an open clam shell.
Asleep but awful awake;
Bought but stolen to take.
Lying but it's stating a fact;
Proact instead of react.
Speaking but no words;
Moving away but walking towards.
Premature ejaculation; incomplete thought;
Losing a war that was never fought.
Standing but bowing down;
Standing on your head to make a frown.
A tattoo without history;
Loving you without me.
Living life without a cause;
What do you think of when your thoughts pause.
Published 3rd Oct 2012
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"Lying but it's stating a fact;
Proact instead of react."
Best line in the poem in my opinion.. I completely agree whith this statement hun. Though if I were honest I would admit to not understanding what you mean by proact.. care to explain?
"What do you think of when your thoughts pause"
This is a line I wish I had come up with myself, although my thoughts never have to time to pause.. always a never ending question in there. I like how you made me think in this one.
Proact instead of react."
Best line in the poem in my opinion.. I completely agree whith this statement hun. Though if I were honest I would admit to not understanding what you mean by proact.. care to explain?
"What do you think of when your thoughts pause"
This is a line I wish I had come up with myself, although my thoughts never have to time to pause.. always a never ending question in there. I like how you made me think in this one.
4th Oct 2012 6:25am
Proact To take action in advance of an expected event. Instead of reacting when it happens. My thoughts pause because Im so proactive it sucks. It's a sickness by far. I leaves little to no room to be spontaneous. I wish I could just flow as blood pours out of a fresh cut.
Thank you so much for your comment dear you are such a doll.
Thank you so much for your comment dear you are such a doll.
Anonymous
4th Oct 2012 3:16pm
Very well written
A rewarding read
Enjoying your poetry
Kitty
A rewarding read
Enjoying your poetry
Kitty
4th Oct 2012 5:51pm
A compliment from you is a great honor. Thank you very much and I am glad that you enjoy. Thank you for your comments
4th Oct 2012 9:36pm
14th Feb 2013 1:19am
Deep, sad, nice. I like this right here. Felt loneliness from deep inside in my fav. lines,
"Living life without a cause;
What do you think of when your thoughts pause. "
This I like.
"Living life without a cause;
What do you think of when your thoughts pause. "
This I like.
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