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Deceitful Brother
The demon I strive to maintain in check
has been awoken with a vengeance
festering with a rage that dwells deep
within me it demands its ascendance.
How dare you try to heap you’re your guilt on me!
I did not go looking for you, you came to me!
With your insolent arrogance
you battered down my door!
Now you want to cleanse your wrongs
by laying them at my feet on the floor?
You disgrace your gender and regal race
with a behavior that should not have a place,
calloused behavior and lying to my face
for shame… shame on you and your name!
dishonor is now your claim to fame!
Your brilliant mind and eloquent words
now sound as hollow as the spirit you swear to serve!
You are a puppet dancing on your ego's string
following lies and discrediting the good you might bring.
“What a tangled web we weave, when we first practice to deceive”
Whatever good memory I might have had
you tarnished it behaving like a cad.
Your ignominious conduct humiliated me,
but karma will always have its way,
for the harm done, rest assured you will pay.
Pounding my fist on my chest;
What did I do to you to deserve this unrest!?
Did I hurt you in some way,
that now you mean to make me pay?
Why could you not desist from this quest?
You do not deserve me in any form, in any way,
not even as a friend, I denounce on this day!
Your weak apologies do nothing for me now
when I truly needed you, you were not there
and your lies now make you look like a clown.
Do you think I do not know?
That the time you claim not to have,
you were giving to that whore?
You and she deserve each other,
good luck with that, deceitful brother.
Gypsy Red
has been awoken with a vengeance
festering with a rage that dwells deep
within me it demands its ascendance.
How dare you try to heap you’re your guilt on me!
I did not go looking for you, you came to me!
With your insolent arrogance
you battered down my door!
Now you want to cleanse your wrongs
by laying them at my feet on the floor?
You disgrace your gender and regal race
with a behavior that should not have a place,
calloused behavior and lying to my face
for shame… shame on you and your name!
dishonor is now your claim to fame!
Your brilliant mind and eloquent words
now sound as hollow as the spirit you swear to serve!
You are a puppet dancing on your ego's string
following lies and discrediting the good you might bring.
“What a tangled web we weave, when we first practice to deceive”
Whatever good memory I might have had
you tarnished it behaving like a cad.
Your ignominious conduct humiliated me,
but karma will always have its way,
for the harm done, rest assured you will pay.
Pounding my fist on my chest;
What did I do to you to deserve this unrest!?
Did I hurt you in some way,
that now you mean to make me pay?
Why could you not desist from this quest?
You do not deserve me in any form, in any way,
not even as a friend, I denounce on this day!
Your weak apologies do nothing for me now
when I truly needed you, you were not there
and your lies now make you look like a clown.
Do you think I do not know?
That the time you claim not to have,
you were giving to that whore?
You and she deserve each other,
good luck with that, deceitful brother.
Gypsy Red
Published 28th Sep 2012
| Edited 7th Oct 2012
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28th Sep 2012 4:55pm
28th Sep 2012 5:02pm
28th Sep 2012 5:57pm
Your weak apologies do nothing for me now
when I truly needed you, you were not there
and your lies now make you look like a clown
Power baby!!! Another great write Gypsy....
when I truly needed you, you were not there
and your lies now make you look like a clown
Power baby!!! Another great write Gypsy....
28th Sep 2012 6:15pm
28th Sep 2012 5:59pm
You're on fire Gypsy, channel that anger and return to sender dear lady, it is one of the most potent emotions, make it work for you with will and desire.
Excellent vent.
Excellent vent.
28th Sep 2012 6:16pm
29th Sep 2012 2:53am
29th Sep 2012 3:01am
29th Sep 2012 3:32am
Still holding back a bit I see :P
This is a mantra to be grrrowled inches away from the inspirer.
This is a mantra to be grrrowled inches away from the inspirer.
29th Sep 2012 3:39am
Yea I am still a bit timid ;P haha glad you enjoyed that cause I certainly did.
Red
Red
29th Sep 2012 2:46pm
29th Sep 2012 3:28pm
Yes and the bitter taste it leaves in your mouth...
Thank you Mark for stopping by to read my piece.
Bigg Hugs
Red
Thank you Mark for stopping by to read my piece.
Bigg Hugs
Red
6th Oct 2012 00:13am
Gypsy
certainly has the voice of a woman scorned, I thought I knew what this was about until I got to the last couple of lines.
I'll be honest, the rhyme seemed a bit taut in places, sometimes when we think too hard about words it shows y'know yourself.
I'll try explain:
"Pounding my fist on my chest;
What did I do to you to deserve this unrest!?
Did I hurt you in some way,
that now you mean to make me pay?
Why could you not desist from this quest?"
the rhyme works good and fine on every one of these lines.
"Whatever good memory I might have had
is tarnished because you behaved like a cad.
Your ignominious endeavor has humiliated me,
but karma being what it is, you will soon see
that what you do unto others will be done unto thee!"
these lines don't really work that well, but it's hard to tell if changing the three letter ends might be a better trend.
so, what I'm trying to say, is the three letter word endings don't do you justice in terms of the language of the rest of the verse.
It's hard to get the right feel when doing rhyme
and keeping time within all the lines, changing the schemes it seems can be more of a challenge.
I mean no offence at all Gypsy, I'm still trying to learn myself and I find that by putting what I think I know to people I can get a clearer picture of where I'm at.
anyhow , I did enjoy reading and am glad of dropping in.
certainly has the voice of a woman scorned, I thought I knew what this was about until I got to the last couple of lines.
I'll be honest, the rhyme seemed a bit taut in places, sometimes when we think too hard about words it shows y'know yourself.
I'll try explain:
"Pounding my fist on my chest;
What did I do to you to deserve this unrest!?
Did I hurt you in some way,
that now you mean to make me pay?
Why could you not desist from this quest?"
the rhyme works good and fine on every one of these lines.
"Whatever good memory I might have had
is tarnished because you behaved like a cad.
Your ignominious endeavor has humiliated me,
but karma being what it is, you will soon see
that what you do unto others will be done unto thee!"
these lines don't really work that well, but it's hard to tell if changing the three letter ends might be a better trend.
so, what I'm trying to say, is the three letter word endings don't do you justice in terms of the language of the rest of the verse.
It's hard to get the right feel when doing rhyme
and keeping time within all the lines, changing the schemes it seems can be more of a challenge.
I mean no offence at all Gypsy, I'm still trying to learn myself and I find that by putting what I think I know to people I can get a clearer picture of where I'm at.
anyhow , I did enjoy reading and am glad of dropping in.
6th Oct 2012 00:20am
No worries no offense whats-o-ever, I appreciate it. It is hard sometimes to see things impartially especially if the piece is yours, I will work on it. good looking out. Thanks much.
Red
Red
