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Foolish questions
How long do you have to wait for, till that one you want gives you a piece of their time. Is it a greater loss to never say anything, to never find out the way they really see you. Is the fear of being reject greater than the satisfaction of knowing what could be. Or are you foolish in already knowing what's real and hoping for a alternative reality.
Published 24th Sep 2012
| Edited 28th Sep 2012
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Anonymous
24th Sep 2012 11:22pm
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25th Sep 2012 8:58am
27th Sep 2012 5:15pm
I'm assuming this is another multiple profile experiment to establish honest critique versus the potential of wooing to a possible flirt. The sentence structure of whatever this is, is awful. Especially the misplacement of tenses. Simple things like 'there' instead of 'their' and 'a' appearing before a vowel. Granted, not everyone has to be the next Einstein, but some things are inexcusable. Overall, an effortless and poorly constructed few sentences.
Well yes your right I'm not the smartest person in the world, but I just started writing so I'm just writing down how I feel and shit I don't really know how to write poems that well but I'm trying to figure it out. I liked it that's all that matters to me honestly sorry you didn't but thanks for letting me know how much you hated it.. Think you maybe a lil up tight sweet heart I wanted you to understand how I felt not so much the grammer and the one word I spelled wrong thanks..
Ah to act or not to act, that is the question! There are elements that could be crafted better but it doesn't stop me from getting a clear picture of the problem.
