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Awakening
Open eyes
toward the round
luminescent moon
unable to tell
if she is in reach
or simply
largely
hovering just too far
Connect the dots
among the stars
the trail
tear stained
and slightly
blurry
through the haze
of disbelief
Acceptance
is my freedom
the key
to release
Still other stars
as far as the heavens
stretch
to touch my tongue to
so very tactile
soft and warm
and open
if the weather is right
and you can be still
with me
in the moment
Light is scattered
dance from place to place
touching hearts
leaving traces
of sweet encounters
never once falling
from the orbit
of the sun
on this journey
to enlightenment
Awaiting
passion
to uncontrollably
spontaneously
and with dramatic crescendo
rip apart my soul
and create me anew
awakened
whole
toward the round
luminescent moon
unable to tell
if she is in reach
or simply
largely
hovering just too far
Connect the dots
among the stars
the trail
tear stained
and slightly
blurry
through the haze
of disbelief
Acceptance
is my freedom
the key
to release
Still other stars
as far as the heavens
stretch
to touch my tongue to
so very tactile
soft and warm
and open
if the weather is right
and you can be still
with me
in the moment
Light is scattered
dance from place to place
touching hearts
leaving traces
of sweet encounters
never once falling
from the orbit
of the sun
on this journey
to enlightenment
Awaiting
passion
to uncontrollably
spontaneously
and with dramatic crescendo
rip apart my soul
and create me anew
awakened
whole
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Re: Awakening
20th Sep 2012 10:14am
I gasped at the ending and couldn't stop
reading from the stunning first verse,
just beautifully crafted and a joy to read.
Best wishes
Ricecake
reading from the stunning first verse,
just beautifully crafted and a joy to read.
Best wishes
Ricecake
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re: Re: Awakening
24th Sep 2012 5:26pm
Re: Awakening
20th Sep 2012 10:40am
I agree with rice cake, the last two stanzas where hypnotic. I find it sweet with just the right amount of soft desire.
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re: Re: Awakening
24th Sep 2012 5:27pm
Re: Awakening
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20th Sep 2012 11:06am
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re: Re: Awakening
27th Sep 2012 6:06am
Thank you so much for your wonderful words! So happy that you enjoyed it!!
Re: Awakening
20th Sep 2012 1:41pm
Light is scattered
dance from place to place
touching hearts
leaving traces
of sweet encounters
never once falling
from the orbit
of the sun
on this journey
to enlightenment
Great write as always sweetheart. Was drawn in with each line...
dance from place to place
touching hearts
leaving traces
of sweet encounters
never once falling
from the orbit
of the sun
on this journey
to enlightenment
Great write as always sweetheart. Was drawn in with each line...
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re: Re: Awakening
27th Sep 2012 6:10am
Wonderful! :) Happy to have touched you along the way, Doc. Your light is bright!
Re: Awakening
21st Sep 2012 3:21am
I love rebirth of our souls. We people of passion feel beyond the norm. Though hurt and pain come in waves, the replenishing drench of love's rain gives us strength and resolve to keep shining and be assured that these interactions are never by chance.
Snap snap :)
Snap snap :)
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re: Re: Awakening
27th Sep 2012 6:13am
Re: Awakening
29th Apr 2014 8:16pm
Love this, so beautifully written and packed with imagery. Exceptional write!
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Re. Awakening
26th Aug 2016 5:10pm
Re. Awakening
26th Aug 2016 5:11pm
Do not remove this please. It absolutely should be part of the whole. Please
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