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Coward
You sit watching over everything
having the power to rule the entire kingdom
making everyone feel small with your tiny jibes
even when you cut a head off an innocent they still kneel to you, look up to you, worshiping your abilities
out smarting them every chance you get while they sit and suck their thumb because you have laid down the law and the minions obey you ,obsess over you
You're just a person, who has no real pull
to be worshiped by strangers was your intentions
because in reality everyone sees you for who you are
and that's just a "plain Jane" like the rest of us minions
enjoy the limelight and your power
but this minion follows you no more!
seeing your true colors made you not a king to me
just a coward hiding behind a computer screen
having the power to rule the entire kingdom
making everyone feel small with your tiny jibes
even when you cut a head off an innocent they still kneel to you, look up to you, worshiping your abilities
out smarting them every chance you get while they sit and suck their thumb because you have laid down the law and the minions obey you ,obsess over you
You're just a person, who has no real pull
to be worshiped by strangers was your intentions
because in reality everyone sees you for who you are
and that's just a "plain Jane" like the rest of us minions
enjoy the limelight and your power
but this minion follows you no more!
seeing your true colors made you not a king to me
just a coward hiding behind a computer screen
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Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 6:02pm
Jesus gigi,can't we talk 'bout this first.. well I'm sorry to lose you :)
look, all seriousness aside if you're gonna name the poem coward you should stick with your convictions and take the disclaimer off the end of it.
"look up to you,worshiping your abilities" keep that on the one line.
out smarting them every chance you get while they sit
and suck their thumb because you have laid down the law
and the minions obey you obsess over you
drop the 'but' at the start of the second stanza .
"you're just a person, who has no real pull
to be worshiped by strangers" no need for the 'was your intentions'.
feisty stuff Gigi, nice one !
look, all seriousness aside if you're gonna name the poem coward you should stick with your convictions and take the disclaimer off the end of it.
"look up to you,worshiping your abilities" keep that on the one line.
out smarting them every chance you get while they sit
and suck their thumb because you have laid down the law
and the minions obey you obsess over you
drop the 'but' at the start of the second stanza .
"you're just a person, who has no real pull
to be worshiped by strangers" no need for the 'was your intentions'.
feisty stuff Gigi, nice one !
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re: Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 6:04pm
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19th Sep 2012 6:22pm
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19th Sep 2012 6:26pm
Maybe! I could be. Oh stop you know you have always been my favorite. With your wit and perfect personality! One of a kind you are. Now don't expect me to be this nice always I have a rep lol xoxo
Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 6:30pm
Quite fiesty indeed! Wish I had seen the disclaimer.
enjoy that you have elevated a network of lone people behind screens dropping words, to a kingdom of headless people rulers bowing and probably dragons.
enjoy that you have elevated a network of lone people behind screens dropping words, to a kingdom of headless people rulers bowing and probably dragons.
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re: Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 6:33pm
Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 8:30pm
Gg lioness that you are have licked the bones of this coward clean leaving him in the dust..I only wish I knew who he was..beautiful poem all heart just like you..xoxoxo Crim
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Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 8:37pm
Ouch Gigi, haha.
First verse was very nicely done and the second was the slap in the face. Great job and execution, soldier.
First verse was very nicely done and the second was the slap in the face. Great job and execution, soldier.
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Re: Coward
19th Sep 2012 11:42pm
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20th Sep 2012 00:52am
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