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Achromedia
Night is black, the stars have vailed.
There is no rest for the sleep dwellers.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Growl and howl of the drooling mouth.
Slumber as it may see, there is no peace for me.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Fangs of wrought, thy soul shall tremble
Wings of fate, death does not wait.
Hoodwinked and chained to the black muck wall,
I stand there alone and above all,
No clothes for me tonight
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Angel of wrath come forth for me,
Pain and emptiness is all though shall see.
Knawing, ripping churning teeth,
He is my inner beast.
The name he has knows no bounds
Achromedia strikes in my sleep.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
There is no rest for the sleep dwellers.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Growl and howl of the drooling mouth.
Slumber as it may see, there is no peace for me.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Fangs of wrought, thy soul shall tremble
Wings of fate, death does not wait.
Hoodwinked and chained to the black muck wall,
I stand there alone and above all,
No clothes for me tonight
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Angel of wrath come forth for me,
Pain and emptiness is all though shall see.
Knawing, ripping churning teeth,
He is my inner beast.
The name he has knows no bounds
Achromedia strikes in my sleep.
The demon strikes in my sleep.
Published 11th Sep 2012
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Anonymous
12th Sep 2012 4:23am
Interesting poem, you give off the appearance of past experience to poetry with your effective use of poetic techniques through your use of imagery, each line seems well thought through, well done.
If I may, structuring your poetry more effectivily with the inclusion of stanzas would be beneficial. Try and use other techniques other than imagery, personification, if I may. "The sullen wind was soon awake" for example, this contains personification, try and use these more in your poetry.
All in all, you're a fantastic poet from what i've read so far and I will be eager for more from you, keep up the solid effort.
And once again, welcome to Deep Underground poetry (DUP)
- Vegan.
If I may, structuring your poetry more effectivily with the inclusion of stanzas would be beneficial. Try and use other techniques other than imagery, personification, if I may. "The sullen wind was soon awake" for example, this contains personification, try and use these more in your poetry.
All in all, you're a fantastic poet from what i've read so far and I will be eager for more from you, keep up the solid effort.
And once again, welcome to Deep Underground poetry (DUP)
- Vegan.
12th Sep 2012 5:35am
thnx man.....ill have to look into how i write things out differently....i posted a new poem, but its a mix of dark and erotic so i posted it in dark...to bad there isnt a section for dark eroticism
20th Sep 2012 7:01pm
