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\mry \\\\\\\v\CQT
her scratched up paws invesigate my lap and then my laptop
her dusty brown-black fur can make me cry
her thin bones are
a fragile charm
she nudges my typinghandsanf \i c
rests her cheek on the back
-O, that I were a glove
No more writing tonight
her dusty brown-black fur can make me cry
her thin bones are
a fragile charm
she nudges my typinghandsanf \i c
rests her cheek on the back
-O, that I were a glove
No more writing tonight
Published 30th Aug 2012
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30th Aug 2012 9:16am
Original take on a moggie attack described in vivid realtime.
I'm wondering about "epitome of fragility" as it kinda jumps me as being a tad pretentious in this setting.
Can't come up with much better tho, maybe "essence of fragile" or similar.
The last lines might be stronger - altho I appreciate the sigh ridden classical tone you come up with
-O that I were a glove
No more writing tonight.
... gets out quicker, says it less obviously & still leaves the writer's feelings open about what's happening.
All JMHO^
Best ~ Abra
I'm wondering about "epitome of fragility" as it kinda jumps me as being a tad pretentious in this setting.
Can't come up with much better tho, maybe "essence of fragile" or similar.
The last lines might be stronger - altho I appreciate the sigh ridden classical tone you come up with
-O that I were a glove
No more writing tonight.
... gets out quicker, says it less obviously & still leaves the writer's feelings open about what's happening.
All JMHO^
Best ~ Abra
30th Aug 2012 9:41am
lol you're so right :) epitome was only the first thing I thought of probly because it rhymes
i luv mi cat
im jus expressin mi luv
i luv mi cat
im jus expressin mi luv
