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Intervention
a curiously common addiction:
I am prey to instant coffee
caffeine is my mission
it has never occurred to me
to sweeten it or milk it
and I've never liked tea
but four cups at 1:00
four teaspoons each
has got to stop
I am prey to instant coffee
caffeine is my mission
it has never occurred to me
to sweeten it or milk it
and I've never liked tea
but four cups at 1:00
four teaspoons each
has got to stop
Published 26th Aug 2012
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26th Aug 2012 1:10pm
Amalasuntha.
It's good, easy to read and a quality ending.
one or two suggestions,
and I've never liked tea. I dunno why to be honest ,It may be because the V sound helps soften the move from I to never.
but four cups at one a.m
just for aesthetics.
Both purely personal nits and mere suggestions. the poem would probably neither benefit nor lose anything from either one.
good stuff.
It's good, easy to read and a quality ending.
one or two suggestions,
and I've never liked tea. I dunno why to be honest ,It may be because the V sound helps soften the move from I to never.
but four cups at one a.m
just for aesthetics.
Both purely personal nits and mere suggestions. the poem would probably neither benefit nor lose anything from either one.
good stuff.
26th Aug 2012 1:30pm
You're right about the v - I didn't see that
Thank you for your constructive appraisal :)
Thank you for your constructive appraisal :)
