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The Rapist
Deep red runs from edge to infinity
down the water where you drowned,
confused by the dimness of the night
we're frantic, fucking like rabbits.
Subsequently, we waited for that feeling to go.
Knowing this day will never begin
we charged in our 'animal-like' disarray
into the fog mucking the puddles,
breaking leaves and twigs -
A starless night for ghost stories.
Nude, ravenous and shamelessly concupiscent,
orgies occur amidst the foreplay.
No one knew how many we were,
we didn't care.
Against the trees, in the dirt,
staring at the sky or perched on a stone,
didn't matter where and how it happened
as long as the moans echoed through the woods.
In memory of a fallen friend,
promiscuous and brutish, a rapist.
He will be missed as we ejaculate
inside the women he once raped.
That feeling has long gone.
We're animals now, if only for one night.
Making each other squeal and throb.
In the presence of enemies we're all friends,
in the death of a villain we're debaucherous.
down the water where you drowned,
confused by the dimness of the night
we're frantic, fucking like rabbits.
Subsequently, we waited for that feeling to go.
Knowing this day will never begin
we charged in our 'animal-like' disarray
into the fog mucking the puddles,
breaking leaves and twigs -
A starless night for ghost stories.
Nude, ravenous and shamelessly concupiscent,
orgies occur amidst the foreplay.
No one knew how many we were,
we didn't care.
Against the trees, in the dirt,
staring at the sky or perched on a stone,
didn't matter where and how it happened
as long as the moans echoed through the woods.
In memory of a fallen friend,
promiscuous and brutish, a rapist.
He will be missed as we ejaculate
inside the women he once raped.
That feeling has long gone.
We're animals now, if only for one night.
Making each other squeal and throb.
In the presence of enemies we're all friends,
in the death of a villain we're debaucherous.
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Re: The Rapist
2nd Aug 2012 9:14am
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Re: The Rapist
2nd Aug 2012 9:38am
I think this would be better suited to dark poems. Despite the sexually nature, there is no pleasurable eroticism in this.
Peace, Indie
Peace, Indie
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Re: The Rapist
2nd Aug 2012 3:04pm
I sort of braced myself for a gory, violent poem. But I didn't get that, instead I got something of a darker, more sinister nature. This was mature and written almost intelligently. I love it.
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Anonymous
2nd Aug 2012 3:52pm
Raping it up lol awesome poem
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2nd Aug 2012 8:13pm
yes understood, but that isn't the premise of the poem.
you've missed it completely. so have most.
i just find topics like these very interesting. :P
i have a very 'morbid' view of the world.
you've missed it completely. so have most.
i just find topics like these very interesting. :P
i have a very 'morbid' view of the world.
Re: The Rapist
3rd Aug 2012 4:10am
Now we are talking. I can be nothing but extremely pleased at the care in the language and letting the detail of description carry the meaning for you. It is like a food chain In an eat-or-be eaten, fuck-or-get-fucked world. The predators who would be at the top are stuck squarely in the middle. You keep getting better at this every day man. Keep it up. Thumbs up.
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3rd Aug 2012 9:52am
hey thanks man... most don't get the twisted idea behind the poem.
you need to be really open minded to think like this.
sometimes even the bad seen as good... bcuz morality and decency aren't the true the ways of the world.
most hide a darker secrets.
you need to be really open minded to think like this.
sometimes even the bad seen as good... bcuz morality and decency aren't the true the ways of the world.
most hide a darker secrets.
Re: The Rapist
10th Aug 2012 11:20am
I love this. I totally understand the thought process you had when you wrote this. Nicely done.
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Re: The Rapist
10th Aug 2012 7:09pm
I'll say ditto with sublimes, I felt like I was reading something by Edgar Poe almost.
Great write,
Infinity
Great write,
Infinity
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Re: The Rapist
6th Jan 2013 11:35am
hey can you tell me the meaning of your poem? im one of the onjes who dont get it T.T
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Re: The Rapist
14th May 2013 2:50am
I'm going to take a gander here........ Is this about death? An analogy of how death fucks everyone? Like it's the symbolism of the woman as 'purity' or 'life' and the rapist, 'death', or the loss of innocence? It's just a guess but I really want to know how you felt writing this. It's lovely and crude but I personally think that's the best kind of truth or beauty....
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re: Re: The Rapist
15th May 2013 1:21pm
well its pretty crude i'll give you that... imagine a world governed without ethics... and the right thing is pretty much the wrong thing... and celebrating the right also comes ridiculous close to wrong... how messed up would the through process of such a world be?
Re: The Rapist
14th May 2013 2:51am
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15th May 2013 1:22pm
haha dont be... im glad it made you think... most people find this offensive.
thanks for the look :)
thanks for the look :)
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16th May 2013 2:38am
You're welcome. I wouldn't call it offensive per say, but thoughtful in a very explicit way. I love your work. Really. You're up there with Sylvia Plath in my book.
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17th May 2013 11:56pm
Oh i love that woman! she is freakin amazing! but i am no where close to her wonders.
thank you so much :)
thank you so much :)
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18th May 2013 1:24am