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The fact that I’m drooling
behind my silk fan
is a pisser
because I’ve worked
really hard on this
antique facade
of utter fuck-it-ness
but you walk through the door
just for a split fucking second,
and my panties are soaked,
my mouth is dry
and my eyes are tight
with desire
you are hunger
and I am possessed
by starvation
Makes it a challenge
to pretend I don’t
(needwantpleasenow)
give a flying shit.
behind my silk fan
is a pisser
because I’ve worked
really hard on this
antique facade
of utter fuck-it-ness
but you walk through the door
just for a split fucking second,
and my panties are soaked,
my mouth is dry
and my eyes are tight
with desire
you are hunger
and I am possessed
by starvation
Makes it a challenge
to pretend I don’t
(needwantpleasenow)
give a flying shit.
Published 26th Jul 2012
| Edited 27th Jul 2012
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Anonymous
28th Jul 2012 2:47am
"Makes it a challenge
to pretend I don’t
(needwantpleasenow)
give a flying shit."
Excellent;) Never let them see you panting!
to pretend I don’t
(needwantpleasenow)
give a flying shit."
Excellent;) Never let them see you panting!
29th Jul 2012 1:16am
Thank you!
It's hard though, I keep turning blue from holding my breath.
Glad you enjoyed.
B
It's hard though, I keep turning blue from holding my breath.
Glad you enjoyed.
B
29th Jul 2012 2:41am
I enjoyed this poem. Overall I like the them and the way you wrote things. But one critique is I think that you could both expand and give this poem a little more flavor. The foundation is defiantly there. Are you planning on making another draft?
29th Jul 2012 2:46am
30th Jul 2012 1:20am
I'm not sure if you might have read the biography of Kato, the SteamPunk Mistress who makes her own clothes, but I saw her here and this was the component that allows her to have a love interest, a missing piece of her puzzle, so I see this as an expansion, not needing an expansion... just me? To me, cheery topped with a Kato pic.
like.........http://fashionablygeek.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/kato-steampunk2-600x400.jpg?cb5e28
like.........http://fashionablygeek.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/12/kato-steampunk2-600x400.jpg?cb5e28
30th Jul 2012 1:39am
Not a Kato follower, so some of that was beyond me, but hey, the sentiment is kickass, so thanks!
Truly, 'preciate the reads and reviews, turtle, and that pic? Love that vibe. Tres badASS.
Truly, 'preciate the reads and reviews, turtle, and that pic? Love that vibe. Tres badASS.
