Temple of the Mind

A beutifully written enigma
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hey, thanks hotkitty. :)

I'd use a comma after the word "unnatural."  I'm not sure how you get from "desert" to "ocean" to "city," but you do with this reader having to look closely at place.  Wonderful movement, flowing without flow.  Not an obvious movement to this reader at all--very clever and imaginative.
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marcella1

yeah, i suppose you're right, though its smoother if you take 'deserts of time' more abstractly. thanks for the thoughtful comment. :)

Mike, your back on so you are not new. please under your other user name stealth take your insults down about my ex and our six year old son. also you texted her many times today asking her to come over tomorrow night. This is slander and has been happening since february. stop bashing her dad. he has been made aware of it as well. me and a handful of her friends have been on here. I know u dislike children but take the poem down now. My six yr old does not need this as you have threatened to post pics. filed report with police for harassment and slander. we have all user names and everything copied with all lies since u met.  none of us have time for your poor me games. move on and leave our family alone. she has a respectable man now. she told you its over. and as u posted her dad is famous and she has been disowned by him.  wrong she was not disowned, just another lie and you have him involved  now too, not too bright mike.

you are confusing me with somebody.

I like this. From the two poems of yours I have read so far, they seem to have a very structured, almost classic feel. However, I think the last line adds a twist to the poem. Nice work :)

really? Dude, you texted her yesterday as u do everyday telling her you were posting under this name with a pic of einstein with the exact word for word as to what u would be posting and you named of names of people you said you talked to on here to post bs about her. the worst part is our son. you wrote the poem about him under the user name stealth bibi. you leave children out. you were never quite right in your head mike. we would all appreciate it if you could just leave our son who is most well behaved out. just like we think u should stop having your son post. he is only a kid to. leave him out of your battles and she is with someone else and keeps letting you know to just end it. you have to move on. your lies are fine but leave children out. you enjoy this. thats sick.

http://allpoetry.com/virgin_universe

my name is not mike. i live in india. i am nineteen years old. i'm not on facebook or i would link you.

how about this: the guy saw my account, told your ex it was his account, though i really cant fathom why.

notice you deleted the poem.  Good one, Mike!!

i dont have the patience for this anymore.

i sent you a message, read it. and please delete your comments.