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Indolence 2.0
You heard the word indolent that night
and said it made you soft...
But lover, indolence is a Cheshire smile
from a white sheet in a dark room,
and as you approach me,
my prevaricating body language
taunts:
That I expect
to remain inert,
defying the third law of motion;
that I can't be moved
won't be moved
by you;
that I will not react
to the pure magnitude
of your force;
that I can remain
completely unphased
as you grab the sheet around me
and use it as a weapon to
yank me to my feet
forcing my nakedness against you,
forcing my eyes to meet yours
and calling me out
as a fucking liar
when your two fingers,
trail below my stomach,
my traitorous body witness,
proving
that I am not
only moved
by you,
but starved
for you
to drop
the sheet.
Author's Note: [i]Olympia, by Edouard Manet is probably one of the most glorious depictions of sensuality and feminine knowing I've ever seen. It evokes a passion. I want to move her... she's so fucking sure of herself.
Check out Manet's paintings -- especially Olympia and Un bar aux Folies Bergère (come on, everyone needs French pre-impressionism in his or her life. It changes everything. For real.) http://www.manetedouard.org/[/i]
and said it made you soft...
But lover, indolence is a Cheshire smile
from a white sheet in a dark room,
and as you approach me,
my prevaricating body language
taunts:
That I expect
to remain inert,
defying the third law of motion;
that I can't be moved
won't be moved
by you;
that I will not react
to the pure magnitude
of your force;
that I can remain
completely unphased
as you grab the sheet around me
and use it as a weapon to
yank me to my feet
forcing my nakedness against you,
forcing my eyes to meet yours
and calling me out
as a fucking liar
when your two fingers,
trail below my stomach,
my traitorous body witness,
proving
that I am not
only moved
by you,
but starved
for you
to drop
the sheet.
Author's Note: [i]Olympia, by Edouard Manet is probably one of the most glorious depictions of sensuality and feminine knowing I've ever seen. It evokes a passion. I want to move her... she's so fucking sure of herself.
Check out Manet's paintings -- especially Olympia and Un bar aux Folies Bergère (come on, everyone needs French pre-impressionism in his or her life. It changes everything. For real.) http://www.manetedouard.org/[/i]
Published 17th Jun 2012
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17th Jun 2012 4:48am
Fine poem Betty. No wonder you were spouting Newton earlier. "Inert" is a particularly apt word here as are "magnitude" and "force." I like the semicolons as hard stops. Semicolons are much-maligned. They should be used for more on this site than winking at each other. The only word that I think I might replace is "starved." Not that I have a suggestion off the top of my head. I will let you know if I come up with one, but if we are going to have this sex in the classroom poem it seems more primal than your other science-heavy offerings.
As an aside to your aside Olympia is also a much-maligned painting. Teen prostitute as muse. It was still too controversial to be let out of the sight of armed guards in Paris, so I never got to see it at the big Impressionist show in Boston back in the mid-80s, just a bunch of ballerinas and barmaids.
As an aside to your aside Olympia is also a much-maligned painting. Teen prostitute as muse. It was still too controversial to be let out of the sight of armed guards in Paris, so I never got to see it at the big Impressionist show in Boston back in the mid-80s, just a bunch of ballerinas and barmaids.
That review was made of awesome.
I've been toying with momentum all freaking day, so yeah, it seemed apt.
If you think of anything to replace starved, let me know.
Again, thanks for the kickass review.
An aside to the aside-aside: You got to go to a big Impressionist show? I think I hate you a little. Sure it's controversial. But good hell, it changed the world, changed the concept of what beauty is, and it was also a slap in the face to the bourgeoisie, while hypocritical, changed... everything. GLORIOUS. Plus the cat and the servant... so many elements that just scream badass social commentary.
I've been toying with momentum all freaking day, so yeah, it seemed apt.
If you think of anything to replace starved, let me know.
Again, thanks for the kickass review.
An aside to the aside-aside: You got to go to a big Impressionist show? I think I hate you a little. Sure it's controversial. But good hell, it changed the world, changed the concept of what beauty is, and it was also a slap in the face to the bourgeoisie, while hypocritical, changed... everything. GLORIOUS. Plus the cat and the servant... so many elements that just scream badass social commentary.
