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My tunnel's so dark
My tunnel's so dark
I don't think there's light to be found,
Or maybe I'm blind
Is it all in the mind
This search for an end
I would escape
But for the trouble I'd rend
And after it's done
It can't be unrent,
My one life will be spent
If life's about happiness
At least if I leave
I can leave it to the living...
I don't think there's light to be found,
Or maybe I'm blind
Is it all in the mind
This search for an end
I would escape
But for the trouble I'd rend
And after it's done
It can't be unrent,
My one life will be spent
If life's about happiness
At least if I leave
I can leave it to the living...
Published 10th Jun 2012
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10th Jun 2012 8:38pm
So lyrical, you are a very talented writer. Next time you should add more to your poem, they could be so much more involved and I see you have the capacity of mind to do that. Wow me :) Good work.
I'm a new poet here, feel free and stop by to comment/critique a couple of my poems for me? Thank you
AlwaysCaliban
I'm a new poet here, feel free and stop by to comment/critique a couple of my poems for me? Thank you
AlwaysCaliban
10th Jun 2012 8:45pm
I try to lengthen my poems and make them more involved but I get side-tracked easily. ADHD. Thanks for the criticism, always good to hear.
"feel free and stop by to comment/critique a couple of my poems for me"
Sounds like a plan.
"feel free and stop by to comment/critique a couple of my poems for me"
Sounds like a plan.
10th Jun 2012 8:44pm
10th Jun 2012 8:57pm
