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Mens rea
There's just something
so wickedly wanton
about lying here
on the kitchen table,
back arched,
hands replacing the bra
you ripped off,
one stocking limp around my calf,
the other gone to parts unknown,
hair brushing the ground,
watching you
come closer...
to coming closer...
and
begging
you
to take the fucking
money shot already
before I fall off the table
and
(please)
fall into you.
so wickedly wanton
about lying here
on the kitchen table,
back arched,
hands replacing the bra
you ripped off,
one stocking limp around my calf,
the other gone to parts unknown,
hair brushing the ground,
watching you
come closer...
to coming closer...
and
begging
you
to take the fucking
money shot already
before I fall off the table
and
(please)
fall into you.
Published 9th Jun 2012
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9th Jun 2012 4:41am
9th Jun 2012 12:32pm
Anonymous
- Edited 9th Jun 2012 9:55am
9th Jun 2012 9:54am
It's all about angles here (watch out for sharp furniture!) taking a slightly different slant on how we view the subject.
Your little scene is full of such powerful images - but they only hint at what has brought the characters to where we find them, thus engaging the imagination of the reader. Jaws was a great movie until they introduced the big rubber shark. Never show the monster!
I like your monsters. Liked this. Red
Your little scene is full of such powerful images - but they only hint at what has brought the characters to where we find them, thus engaging the imagination of the reader. Jaws was a great movie until they introduced the big rubber shark. Never show the monster!
I like your monsters. Liked this. Red
9th Jun 2012 12:34pm
I love that review. Never show the monster! YES! Exactly.
Thankee kindly, sir, Betty
Thankee kindly, sir, Betty
9th Jun 2012 7:28pm
10th Jun 2012 00:02am
